Shopping— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence and avoid repetition. Keep it within 3-4 sentences and correct minor grammar (e.g., “I feel confident” not “I feel myself confident”). Add one specific detail about what you enjoy buying or where you shop to make the answer more concrete. Use a linking phrase to connect ideas (e.g., “also” or “for example”).

Example: Yes, I enjoy shopping because it makes me feel happy and relaxed. I often go with my best friends, and we like browsing for clothes and accessories. For example, last weekend we visited a local market where I found a great jacket.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence, then explain briefly with a reason using clearer language and fewer hesitations. Replace fillers (“uh”) and correct grammar: say “very expensive clothes” or “a very expensive item.” Add a linking word like “however” to show exception. Provide one specific example of an expensive item you would check.

Example: Not usually. I prefer to decide based on how much I like an item without checking price first. However, if I am buying a very expensive item, such as a winter coat, I will compare prices online and in stores before deciding.

Suggestion: Begin with a clear, grammatically correct topic sentence (use “depends on” not “depends of”). Use linking words like “however” to contrast clothes and groceries. Be concise and give one specific example of a difficult choice. Avoid extra words and keep to 2–4 sentences.

Example: It depends on what I am buying. For clothes, yes — I find it hard to choose because I often like many items; for instance, I recently had to pick one dress out of three I liked. However, I don’t have this problem with groceries, where I usually know what I need.

Suggestion: State your opinion clearly and provide a specific reason and example. Avoid unclear words like “effectable” and refine grammar: say “more effective” or “more useful than expensive ones.” Use a linking phrase like “for example” to support your point. Keep it concise and eliminate filler words such as “and yeah.”

Example: No, I don’t think expensive products are always better. Cheaper items can sometimes be more effective or practical; for example, I bought a budget blender that worked better for daily smoothies than a pricier model. Often the higher price reflects the brand rather than better performance.

× Yeah, I do like shopping so much because it makes me feel very happy and joyful so I can go shopping all by myself or with my best friends.

✓ Yes, I really like shopping because it makes me feel very happy and joyful, and I can go shopping by myself or with my best friends.

Use 'Yes' instead of informal 'Yeah' in formal tests; 'do like' is emphatic but unnecessary—'really like' is more natural. Add 'and' to join clauses and remove redundant 'all' before 'by myself'. Maintain present tense.

× So yeah, I really enjoy it and I feel myself confident when I go to shop.

✓ So yeah, I really enjoy it and I feel confident when I go shopping.

'Feel myself confident' is incorrect; reflexive pronoun 'myself' is unnecessary. Use 'feel confident'. Use gerund 'go shopping' instead of 'go to shop' for natural English.

× No, I do not because I don't like to see the prices until I buy the thing.

✓ No, I don't, because I don't like to look at prices until I buy something.

Use contraction 'don't' consistently and more natural verb 'look at prices'. 'The thing' is vague; use 'something'. Maintain present simple for habits.

× But if it is a very expensive, uh, clothes, maybe I'll uh, check for price and think about it.

✓ But if it is very expensive clothing, maybe I'll check the price and think about it.

'Clothes' is plural and should not take 'a very expensive'; use 'expensive clothing' or 'a very expensive item'. Use 'check the price' rather than 'check for price'. Remove filler 'uh'.

× It depends of what I am buying, if it is some clothes, so yes, because I really wanted to buy all the things I like but I need to choose one or two things.

✓ It depends on what I am buying; if it is clothes, then yes, because I really want to buy everything I like but I need to choose one or two items.

Use 'depends on' not 'depends of'. Use present 'want' instead of past 'wanted' to match current habit. 'All the things' is better as 'everything' and 'items' sounds natural.

× But when it's grocery I don't make a choice.

✓ But when it's groceries, I don't have to choose.

Use plural 'groceries' and natural phrase 'have to choose' or 'I don't need to choose'. Present tense maintained.

× No, I do not, because cheaper things could be more effectable and more useful when the expensive things.

✓ No, I don't, because cheaper things can be more effective and more useful than expensive ones.

'Effectable' is not a word; use 'effective'. Use comparative structure 'more useful than' and replace 'the expensive things' with 'expensive ones'. Use 'can' or 'could' consistently.

× So I think what expensive things is just about the brand and a name of the label and yeah.

✓ So I think expensive things are often just about the brand and the label name.

Original sentence is ungrammatical. Use plural verb 'are' to match 'expensive things' and restructure: 'just about the brand and the label name' is concise. Remove filler 'and yeah'.