Gifts— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Reduce hesitations and correct small word errors; start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Use linking words (for example) and avoid repetition. Also correct vocabulary mistakes (Gibbs → gifts) and tense/number agreement.

Example: Yes, I think I'm quite good at giving gifts. I usually choose useful presents that will be kept for a long time; for example, I like giving a photo frame with pictures of shared memories because it is both practical and sentimental.

Suggestion: Be concise and avoid unclear or awkward phrasing. Use correct article and plural forms (a friend → one of my friends; anniversary → anniversaries). Give a clearer, specific example and explain briefly why you chose that gift. Remove hesitations and incorrect terms.

Example: I usually give gifts on special occasions such as birthdays, anniversaries, or when someone reaches a milestone. For example, when one of my friends was promoted to president of our student society, I gave him a small statue of Lord Krishna because he is very religious and would appreciate a meaningful gift.

Suggestion: Good structure with two points—make it smoother by using clearer linking words and more natural phrasing (e.g., 'the recipient's personality' and 'their needs'). Add a short example to illustrate each point. Avoid repetitive words like 'mindset' twice.

Example: I usually consider two things: the recipient's personality and their practical needs. For instance, if someone is very religious I might choose a religious item, whereas for a busy friend I would select something useful like a portable charger.

Suggestion: Use correct tense and more concise phrasing; start with a direct answer ('Yes' or 'No') followed by one or two clear supporting sentences. Reduce repeated 'used to' and fix noun phrases (childhood times → childhood).

Example: Yes, when I was a child I often made handmade cards for my maternal uncle. He treasured them and displayed one in his office, which made me very proud whenever I visited.

Suggestion: Avoid double negatives and make the opinion clear in one sentence. Provide a brief reason to support your view and a short example. Use natural linking words such as 'instead' or 'rather'.

Example: No, expensive gifts do not necessarily express feelings; rather, handmade gifts often show thought and effort. For example, a personalized photo album can mean more to someone than an expensive gadget because it shows you remembered special moments.

× I would probably say yes because, uh, I prefer, uh, giving gifts which are more, uh, in use and probably the person can, uh, remember that for longer period.

✓ I would probably say yes because I prefer giving gifts that are more useful and that the person can remember for a longer period.

The phrase 'in use' is incorrect; use the adjective 'useful'. Also 'which' is better replaced with 'that' for defining relative clauses. Add 'a' before 'longer period' or better 'for a longer period' to be grammatically correct. Remove filler 'uh' and extra commas for clarity.

× For example, I prefer giving Gibbs which has a photo frame along with some photographs of old memories.

✓ For example, I prefer giving gifts that include a photo frame with some photographs of old memories.

Spelling error 'Gibbs' should be 'gifts'. 'Which has' is awkward; use 'that include' to describe the gift. 'Along with' can be replaced by 'with' for conciseness. Keep 'photographs of old memories' though 'old memories' is slightly redundant; consider 'old photographs' or 'photos of past memories'.

× I often give gifts to others when there is some special occasion like their birthdays or anniversary or uh, maybe some other milestones they have achieved.

✓ I often give gifts to others on special occasions like their birthdays, anniversaries, or other milestones they have achieved.

Use plural 'anniversaries' to match 'birthdays' and 'other milestones'. Replace 'when there is some special occasion' with 'on special occasions' for natural phrasing. Remove 'some' and filler 'uh'.

× For instance, one of my friend has been promoted as a widespread IS president so I preferred giving him gift of God Krishna.

✓ For instance, one of my friends was promoted to president of the widespread IS, so I preferred giving him a gift of Lord Krishna.

'One of my friend' should be 'one of my friends' (plural after 'one of'). Use past tense 'was promoted' if referring to a past event. 'Promoted as' is incorrect; use 'promoted to'. Add articles: 'a gift' and 'Lord Krishna' is more appropriate than 'God Krishna'. Clarify 'widespread IS' if it's a proper noun; keep as written but adjust word order.

× Usually I consider two things, one is the mindset of the person I'm giving the gift and second would be the requirement.

✓ Usually I consider two things: one is the mindset of the person I'm giving the gift to, and the second is their requirement.

Add 'to' after 'giving the gift' to complete the verb phrase. Use consistent present simple 'is' for both items rather than mixing 'is' and 'would be'. Use 'their' for gender-neutral reference.

× So if the person is having mindset which is more on religious side, I prefer giving something related to God.

✓ So if the person has a mindset that is more on the religious side, I prefer giving something related to God.

Use 'has a mindset' instead of 'is having mindset'—English prefers stative verbs in present simple. Add articles: 'a mindset' and 'the religious side'. Use 'that' for the defining clause.

× Not now but I still remember at my childhood times I used to prepare handmade card for my maternal uncle and he used to like it the most and he used to keep it as a frame in his office and whenever I used to visit his office so I used to feel happy about.

✓ Not now, but I still remember that in my childhood I used to make a handmade card for my maternal uncle. He liked it the most and used to keep it in a frame in his office, and whenever I visited his office I felt happy about it.

'At my childhood times' is incorrect; use 'in my childhood'. Use 'make' or 'create' rather than 'prepare' for cards; 'used to prepare handmade card' needs articles: 'a handmade card'. Remove repetitive 'used to' where unnecessary; keep past habitual 'used to' for repeated actions but avoid overuse. 'Keep it as a frame' should be 'keep it in a frame'. 'Whenever I visited' not 'used to visit' when already using 'used to' earlier—keep consistent past narration.

× Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

✓ Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

Sentence is a grammatically acceptable question; no correction needed. The rest of the student's answer contains errors.

× I would say not expensive gift does not always express your feelings, rather handmade gifts are more towards sharing your feelings.

✓ I would say that expensive gifts do not always express your feelings; rather, handmade gifts are better for sharing your feelings.

Original has double negative structure and missing article: 'not expensive gift does not' is incorrect. Use 'expensive gifts do not always express your feelings'. 'More towards' is awkward; use 'better for' or 'more effective at'. Add 'that' after 'say' for clarity and use punctuation to separate clauses.