Gifts— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons. Avoid awkward phrases and redundancy (e.g. “give in gifts”, “happiness is always parading”). Use more natural collocations like “give gifts” and “bring happiness to people around me.”

Example: Yes, I enjoy giving gifts because they usually make people happy. For example, I like to choose items that suit the recipient’s hobbies, and seeing their smile makes me feel satisfied.

Suggestion: Open with a clear statement about typical occasions, then give one specific example and a brief reason. Correct grammar (e.g. “people who are interested in shoes”) and avoid vague language like “something like that.” Use a linking word to connect idea and example.

Example: I usually give gifts for celebrations, such as birthdays or graduations. For instance, when a friend is into footwear I often buy a stylish pair of shoes because it matches their interest.

Suggestion: Be specific and correct vocabulary. Start with a direct topic sentence (what you consider) and give one clear example. Fix unclear words (e.g. “Paydel”, “pedal rackets”) — if you mean a sport like paddle, say “paddle” or the sport name. Use linking words like “for example” properly.

Example: I focus on the recipient’s personality and hobbies when choosing a gift. For example, if someone plays paddle tennis, I would buy them a new paddle or some quality balls because these items are useful for their hobby.

Suggestion: Answer directly and cleanly: use correct tense (e.g. “I have given” or “I once gave”) and avoid repetition. Give one specific detail about the handmade gift and why it matters. Use linking words like “because” to explain.

Example: Yes, I have given handmade gifts. For example, I once made a scrapbook full of photos and notes because it collected many memories in a personal and creative way.

Suggestion: State your position clearly, then support it with one or two specific reasons. Use correct grammar and natural phrases (e.g. “expensive gifts are only a complement to your intention,” “what matters more are sincere letters or personal gestures”). Avoid repeating words.

Example: No, I don’t think so. Expensive gifts can show effort, but what matters more are sincere gestures like a heartfelt letter or a thoughtful homemade present, which feel more genuine.

× Yes, I love to give in gifts for another person because it makes them happy for a reason and how they enjoy the gifts or the present they give to them.

✓ Yes, I love to give gifts to other people because it makes them happy and they enjoy the presents I give them.

Original uses incorrect prepositions 'give in' and 'for another person' and awkward phrasing 'for a reason and how they enjoy'. Use 'give gifts to' and 'other people'. Remove redundant phrases and simplify to make the sentence natural and grammatically correct.

× It makes me happy as well because happiness is always parading to everyone surrounding you.

✓ It makes me happy as well because happiness always spreads to everyone around you.

The verb 'parading' is incorrect in this context; 'spreads' is a better verb and must agree with singular subject 'happiness'. Also replace 'surrounding you' with 'around you' for natural collocation.

× I think when they are celebrating something or achieving something, usually I will present them things that are highly related towards them.

✓ I think when they are celebrating or achieving something, I usually give them things that are closely related to their interests.

Use consistent present/simple tense 'I usually give' instead of 'I will present' to match habitual action. 'Related towards them' is incorrect; use 'related to their interests'. Simplify 'celebrating something or achieving something' to 'celebrating or achieving something'.

× For example, I give a set of shoes for a person who interested in shoes, something like that.

✓ For example, I give a pair of shoes to a person who is interested in shoes, something like that.

Use 'a pair of shoes' rather than 'a set of shoes' in common usage. Use preposition 'to' with 'give' and include the verb 'is' in 'who is interested in shoes' to form a correct relative clause.

× I think I want to match the person with the receiver personality or type of things they like the most.

✓ I try to match the gift to the recipient's personality or the types of things they like most.

Use 'recipient's' to show possession and 'types of things they like most' for natural phrasing. 'I think I want to' is wordy for expressing usual strategy; 'I try to' is clearer.

× For example, for a person that is currently actively applying Paydel, I will give them pedal rackets or even the balls that that kind of things that I consider.

✓ For example, for a person who is currently actively playing paddle, I would give them paddle rackets or even balls, those are the kinds of things I consider.

The sentence has several pronoun and word-choice errors: use 'who' for people, correct verb 'playing' rather than 'applying', correct noun 'paddle' (or 'padel' depending on intended sport), and avoid repeating 'that'. Use 'those are the kinds of things I consider' for clarity.

× Yes, of course, I had once gave my friends letters or scrapbook because it is very interesting through gathering bunch of of ideas about a person into one creatively stuff and I love to give them those.

✓ Yes, of course, I once gave my friends letters or a scrapbook because it is interesting to gather a bunch of ideas about a person into one creative item, and I love to give them those.

Use simple past 'gave' rather than 'had gave'. Remove redundant 'had once' and fix noun phrases: 'a scrapbook', 'a bunch of ideas', 'one creative item'. Correct word order and remove duplicate 'of'.

× No, not necessarily because I think expensive gift as a complimentary of your intention.

✓ No, not necessarily, because I think an expensive gift is not a guarantee of your intention.

Original lacks an appropriate verb and article. Use 'an expensive gift is not a guarantee of your intention' to express the idea. 'Complimentary' is incorrect here; use 'not a guarantee' or 'not a substitute'.

× The main things that is more important is the the letters or other stuffs that it can feel genuine from you.

✓ The main things that are more important are the letters or other items that can feel genuine from you.

Fix subject-verb agreement: 'things... are'. Remove duplicate 'the'. Use 'items' instead of informal 'stuffs' and remove extraneous 'it'. Keep 'genuine from you' but better would be 'that feel genuine'.