Websites— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating words and use more accurate nouns (e.g., 'cooking tutorials' instead of 'websites to teach me how to cook').

Example: I usually visit academic and lifestyle websites. For example, I follow cooking tutorial sites that provide step-by-step videos and recipes, and I also read educational blogs for study tips.

Suggestion: Be specific about the website and avoid vague phrases. Use a topic sentence naming the site, then give one clear reason and an example. Reduce redundancy and correct grammar (e.g., 'short videos are very varied' and 'lots of information').

Example: My favourite app is TikTok because it offers a variety of short videos that help me relax; for instance, I watch quick cooking clips and travel highlights when I have free time.

Suggestion: Reduce hesitation and speak more clearly. Give a direct topic sentence about the change, then one or two specific examples, using linking words like 'now' or 'for example'. Avoid filler words and improve grammar.

Example: Yes, websites have improved a lot. For example, search functions are faster now and modern sites use high-quality images and intuitive layouts, which makes them much easier and more attractive to use.

Suggestion: Use clearer vocabulary and correct names, and give one or two specific reasons. Start with a concise statement, then support it with examples and linking words like 'because' or 'for example'. Avoid hesitation and unclear phrases.

Example: Short-video platforms are very popular in my country. For example, TikTok attracts many users because people can quickly watch entertainment clips, find product reviews, and share personal experiences.

Suggestion: Give a clear preference with reasons and a short contrast. Use linking words like 'because' and 'however'. Correct grammar (e.g., 'information' is uncountable) and avoid repetition.

Example: I prefer getting information online because it is fast and convenient; however, I still use books for deep or reliable information, especially for academic research.

Suggestion: State your reason clearly and give a concise example. Use linking words like 'also' or 'for example' and correct collocations (e.g., 'a personal website' or 'an online resume'). Avoid awkward phrasing.

Example: Yes, I would like to have my own website because it is a great way to share my ideas. For example, I could create a personal portfolio site to showcase my writing and a resume for potential employers.

Suggestion: Be specific about what you learned and how it helped you. Use clear linking words such as 'for example' and avoid unclear words (e.g., 'alert' is incorrect). Keep the answer concise and grammatical.

Example: I learned cooking skills from online tutorial videos that I can follow step by step. For example, I learned to make stir-fry dishes and now I can prepare healthy meals more confidently and quickly.

× I often visit websites about academic and lifestyle.

✓ I often visit websites about academics and lifestyle.

'Academic' should be plural noun 'academics' when referring to the subject area; 'academic' as an adjective would need a following noun (e.g., academic topics). Use 'academics' to match 'lifestyle' as noun topics.

× For example, I usually watch some websites to teach me how to cook and I can follow the information step by step.

✓ For example, I usually visit websites that teach me how to cook, and I can follow the instructions step by step.

Use 'visit' or 'watch' appropriately; you 'visit' websites and 'watch' videos. 'Websites to teach me' is incorrect; use a relative clause 'websites that teach me'. 'Information' is vague for procedural guidance; 'instructions' is better here.

× My favorite website is an app and I can scroll in some short videos on that, and the short videos are really very various and I can get lots of informations on that and I think it is a very good way for me to relax.

✓ My favorite website is an app where I can scroll through short videos. The videos are very diverse, and I can get a lot of information from them. I think it is a great way for me to relax.

Multiple issues: use 'scroll through' not 'scroll in'; 'various' used as adjective needs noun — 'diverse' fits better; 'informations' is uncountable—use 'information' or 'a lot of information'; split long sentence for clarity and natural phrasing.

× Yes, I, I, I remember that the uh, website was umm, difficult to search uh, several years ago by in these days, the websites are really, umm, efficient and the pictures are really beautiful, which really attracted people to use it.

✓ Yes, I remember that the website was difficult to search several years ago, but nowadays the websites are much more efficient and the pictures are very beautiful, which attracts people to use them.

Remove hesitations and fix tense/contrast: 'several years ago' requires simple past 'was'; contrast with present 'nowadays' and present simple 'are'/'attracts'. 'Which really attracted people to use it' should be 'which attracts people to use them' to match plural 'websites' and present general truth.

× I think the show videos website is very popular.

✓ I think video-sharing websites are very popular.

'Show videos website' is unnatural. Use 'video-sharing websites' or 'sites that show videos'. Make noun plural to match general statement.

× For example, the Tiktok is very popular in my country because lots of people are scrolling the shop videos uh, in the, in normal and uh, we can uh, get many informations and uh, sharing our experience on that.

✓ For example, TikTok is very popular in my country because lots of people scroll through short videos in their daily lives. We can get a lot of information and share our experiences there.

Remove article 'the' before brand name, use 'scroll through' and 'short videos' (not 'shop videos'). 'In the normal' is incorrect—use 'in their daily lives' or 'normally'. 'Informations' is uncountable—use 'a lot of information'. 'Sharing' needs 'can' + base verb or 'can share'.

× Yes, I like, uh, I prefer to get informations on online because I think it is efficient and convenient and I can, uh, search for the anything, uh, I want very quickly, but I think the books are reliable. The informations can uh, search very reliable.

✓ Yes, I prefer to get information online because I think it is efficient and convenient and I can find anything I want very quickly. However, I think books are more reliable.

Use 'online' without preposition 'on'. 'Informations' incorrect—use 'information'. 'Search for the anything' wrong—use 'find anything'. Last sentence was ungrammatical; rephrase to 'books are more reliable'.

× Yes, I like to have my own website because I think it is a very good way to express my own perspectives. And also sometimes people always establish the resume website and I think I really wanted it.

✓ Yes, I would like to have my own website because I think it is a good way to express my perspectives. Also, some people create online resumes, and I would really like that.

'Like to have' better as 'would like to have' for willingness. 'Own' repeatedly is redundant. 'Establish the resume website' is awkward—use 'create an online resume' or 'personal website'. 'I really wanted it' should be present/future desire 'I would really like that'.

× I learned how to cook from the website because I can follow the show videos step by step and it always give me some recipes that I can alert, so I think it is very convenient and useful for me.

✓ I learned how to cook from websites because I can follow the video demonstrations step by step and they always give me recipes that I can try, so I think they are very convenient and useful for me.

'Show videos' should be 'video demonstrations' or 'cooking videos'. Subject-verb agreement: 'it always give' -> 'they always give' because 'websites' plural. 'Alert' is wrong word—use 'try'. Adjust pronouns and verbs to plural and correct gerund usage.