Websites— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 문장 구조를 더 간결하고 자연스럽게 다듬고, 불필요한 반복을 줄이세요. 예를 들어 ‘such as’뒤 항목을 정리하고, ‘I usually’ 반복을 피하며 연결어를 사용해 흐름을 부드럽게 만드세요. 또한 구체적인 예시(예: 자주 보는 뉴스 섹션이나 사용하는 서비스)를 하나 추가하면 더 설득력 있습니다.

Example: I often visit portal sites like Neighbor because they offer multiple services, including news, email and blogs. For example, I regularly check the national news section and use the email service to manage my messages.

Suggestion: 문법 오류(예: 'I'm recently used' → 'I recently used')를 고치고 표현을 자연스럽게 만드세요. 또한 이유를 하나만 말할 때는 구체적인 상황을 덧붙여 주세요(어떤 기능이 특히 편리했는지).

Example: My favourite website is Naval because it’s tailored to Korean users and has helpful features like news, email and blogs. For instance, I recently used it to read bloggers’ reviews before buying a book.

Suggestion: 좋은 답변이나 더 자연스러운 연결어와 시제 사용으로 개선하세요. 'a few years ago'와 'nowadays'를 같이 쓰면 시제 혼동이 있으니 조정하고, 변화를 설명할 때 개인적 경험이나 영향도 덧붙이세요.

Example: Yes, some sites have changed. For example, YouTube introduced Shorts a few years ago to meet younger users’ demand for short, easy-to-watch videos, and I now often watch those clips during short breaks.

Suggestion: 'portrait sites'라는 표현이 어색합니다. 'portal sites'로 수정하고, 이유를 더 구체적으로 제시하세요(예: 쇼핑, 뉴스, 커뮤니티 기능). 문장 연결을 위해 접속사를 사용하면 자연스럽습니다.

Example: Social media sites are very popular in Korea because people enjoy sharing photos and videos and connecting with others. In addition, portal sites like Neighbor remain widely used for news, online shopping and community forums.

Suggestion: 표현을 더 정확하고 자연스럽게 고치세요(예: 'the certain content' → 'specific information'). 문장 수를 적절히 유지하고 연결어로 이유를 명확히 하세요. 책의 장점과 비교하는 한두 문장을 덧붙이면 균형잡힌 답변이 됩니다.

Example: I prefer getting information from websites because it’s easy to find specific information quickly and the layout is usually clear. However, I still use books for in-depth study because they often provide more detailed explanations.

Suggestion: 매우 자연스러운 답변입니다. 다만 'write down my own feelings in order to feel relaxed' 대신 더 자연스러운 표현을 사용하고, 블로그의 구체적 계획(예: 포스트 빈도, 대상 독자)을 한 문장으로 추가하세요.

Example: Yes, I’d like to have a blog to share travel and book reviews. I plan to post once a week to connect with readers who enjoy travel tips and personal reflections, and writing helps me relax.

Suggestion: 좋은 사례 제시입니다. 다만 'improve my learning better' 같은 중복 표현을 수정하고, 구체적으로 어떤 콘텐츠(예: 강의, 모의고사, 요약 노트)가 도움이 되었는지 밝히면 설득력이 높아집니다.

Example: I’ve learned many useful things from websites. For example, in high school I used EPS sites that provided lecture videos, practice tests and summary notes, which helped me review past exams and improve my scores.

× I usually search something that I wonder and read the news.

✓ I usually search for things I am curious about and read the news.

Use 'search for' instead of 'search' + object; 'wonder' is not used as 'I wonder something' — use 'be curious about' or 'wonder about' with a clause. Also match plural 'things' for general activities. Suggestion: use 'search for' + noun phrase or 'search' + 'for' + noun; use 'be curious about' to express wondering.

× For example, I'm recently used it to look up bloggers book reviews that I want to buy.

✓ For example, I recently used it to look up bloggers' book reviews that I wanted to buy.

Mix of present progressive 'I'm' with past 'used' is incorrect. Use simple past 'I recently used' for a completed action. Possessive for plural 'bloggers' requires an apostrophe (bloggers'). Match tense for 'want' to past context or keep present if still true; here 'wanted' fits completed browsing. Suggestion: use 'I recently used it' or 'I've recently used it' and 'bloggers' book reviews' with apostrophe.

× YouTube has added short phone videos called Shorts a few years ago because younger generations want short and intuitive videos nowadays.

✓ YouTube added short phone videos called Shorts a few years ago because younger generations want short and intuitive videos nowadays.

Present perfect 'has added' conflicts with a past time expression 'a few years ago'; use simple past 'added'. 'Phone videos' is acceptable but 'short videos' suffices. Suggestion: avoid present perfect with specific past time phrases.

× I think social media websites are popular in Korea because many people like to share their photos and videos with others and communicate with a lot of people.

✓ I think social media websites are popular in Korea because many people like to share their photos and videos with others and communicate with many people.

Repetition 'a lot of people' after 'many people' is redundant and stylistically awkward. Use 'many people' consistently. Suggestion: avoid repetitive expressions; vary wording or use one clear phrase.

× Also, Koreans like to use portrait sites like Neighbor because they provide useful information and functions.

✓ Also, Koreans like to use portal sites like Neighbor because they provide useful information and functions.

Probably intended 'portal' not 'portrait'. 'Portrait' is incorrect adjective here. Suggestion: use 'portal sites' for web portal services.

× I prefer getting information from websites because when using websites it is easy to find the certain content that I want to know in addition.

✓ I prefer getting information from websites because when using them it is easy to find the specific content I want to know.

Awkward phrasing 'the certain content' is incorrect; use 'specific content'. 'When using websites it is' should be 'when using them it is' to avoid repetition. Remove unnecessary 'in addition'. Suggestion: use 'specific' and replace repeated noun with pronoun.

× The construction of websites is neat, so easy to follow.

✓ The layout of websites is neat, so they are easy to follow.

Fragment 'so easy to follow' lacks subject and verb; add 'they are'. 'Construction' is awkward; 'layout' or 'design' is better. Suggestion: include subject and verb for clarity.

× Well, I'd like to have my own blog because I want to share my travel reviews or book reviews.

✓ Well, I'd like to have my own blog because I want to share my travel reviews and book reviews.

Using 'or' suggests choosing between types; 'and' fits when listing multiple things you want to share. Suggestion: use 'and' when both items apply.

× Furthermore, I'd like to write down my own feelings in order to feel relaxed.

✓ Furthermore, I'd like to write down my feelings to feel relaxed.

'My own feelings' is wordy; 'my feelings' is sufficient. 'In order to' can be shortened to 'to'. Suggestion: prefer conciseness.

× For example, when I was a high school student, I used EPS websites which helped me review my previous exams and improve my learning better through videos and resources.

✓ For example, when I was a high school student, I used EPS websites which helped me review past exams and improve my learning through videos and resources.

'Previous exams' is redundant with 'past exams'; 'improve my learning better' is ungrammatical—use 'improve my learning' or 'learn better'. Remove 'better'. Suggestion: use 'past exams' and 'learn better' or 'improve my learning' but not both together.