Friends— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 과거와 현재를 비교하는 구조는 좋지만, ‘in the past’와 ‘nowadays’를 일관되게 사용하세요. 현재 사람들이 친구를 만나는 장소를 ‘online’이라고 표현하기보다는 ‘through social media’ 또는 ‘video calls’처럼 구체적으로 말하는 것이 자연스럽습니다. 또한 ‘a cafe’, ‘a restaurant’처럼 관사를 사용하고, 과거와 현재의 주어를 명확히 구분하세요.

Example: Yes, there is quite a difference. In the past, my friends and I usually met at cafés or restaurants and talked over a meal. Nowadays, we often keep in touch online through messaging apps or video calls because it is more convenient.

Suggestion: 이유를 제시하려는 시도는 좋지만, ‘the appropriate venue ... is because’는 문법적으로 어색하므로 ‘A café is suitable because...’처럼 간단히 말하세요. ‘have to think’는 의미가 불분명하므로 ‘the music is too loud’와 같이 장소의 구체적인 특징을 제시하세요. 같은 표현인 ‘because’를 반복하지 말고 ‘whereas’나 ‘since’를 활용하세요.

Example: Cafés are suitable because they are usually quiet and provide a comfortable place to talk. By contrast, karaoke rooms are less suitable for a serious conversation since the music is often too loud. People usually go there to sing rather than chat.

Suggestion: 선호를 직접 밝힌 점은 좋습니다. 다만 ‘not confident of keeping in touch’는 ‘not very good at keeping in touch’가 더 자연스럽고, ‘a fractional number of friends’는 부적절하므로 ‘a small circle of friends’를 사용하세요. 마지막 문장은 ‘I can have meaningful conversations with them’처럼 완전하고 자연스럽게 마무리하세요.

Example: I prefer spending time with one close friend. I am not very good at keeping in touch with a large number of people, so I have a small circle of friends. This also allows me to have deeper and more meaningful conversations.

Suggestion: ‘Yes, definitely’처럼 자연스럽게 시작하고, 초대할 사람의 수와 이유를 간결하게 연결하세요. ‘What's more you to my small house’는 의미가 불분명하므로 ‘My house is quite small, so I could not host a large group’으로 수정해야 합니다. 앞 답변을 그대로 반복하기보다 집에서 함께 할 활동을 한 가지 추가하면 내용이 더 구체적입니다.

Example: Yes, definitely. I would invite one or two close friends because my apartment is quite small. We could cook dinner together, watch a film, and have a relaxed conversation.

Suggestion: 친구의 중요성을 설명하고 두 가지 이유를 제시한 점은 좋습니다. 하지만 ‘demonstrate stress’가 아니라 ‘relieve stress’ 또는 ‘reduce my anxiety’를 사용해야 하며, ‘solutions of person issues’는 ‘solutions to personal problems’로 고치세요. 친구와 대화한 결과를 구체적으로 설명하면 답변이 더 효과적입니다.

Example: Friends are extremely important to me. Spending time with them helps me relieve stress and feel less anxious. I can also share my personal problems with them and get practical advice, which often makes me feel much better.

Suggestion: 빈도와 활동 순서를 설명한 점은 좋지만, ‘Yes, I frequently go out’처럼 어순을 수정하세요. ‘Subsequently’는 Part 1에서 다소 딱딱하므로 ‘After that’를 사용하는 것이 자연스럽습니다. ‘we visit movie theatres too is because’는 ‘we sometimes go to the cinema because...’로 고치고, 영화 관람을 선호하는 이유를 간단히 덧붙이세요.

Example: Yes, I often go out with my friends. We usually start at a café, where we catch up over a drink. After that, we sometimes go to the cinema because we enjoy watching the latest films together.

Suggestion: 장소를 두 가지로 나누어 설명한 구성은 좋습니다. ‘in a café or at a movie theater’처럼 전치사와 관사를 수정하고, ‘ladies movies’는 의미가 부자연스러우므로 ‘the latest films’ 또는 실제 선호 장르를 사용하세요. 영화 후에는 ‘discuss the film’처럼 ‘debate’보다 자연스러운 표현을 쓰세요.

Example: We usually meet at a café or a movie theater. At the café, we catch up on each other’s lives over coffee. If we go to the cinema, we watch the latest films, eat popcorn, and discuss the movie afterward.

Suggestion: 이 답변은 친구들과 하는 일반적인 활동에 비해 호텔 방문이 갑작스럽고, 어휘와 문법 오류가 많아 의미가 불명확합니다. ‘two hotels’는 특별한 이유가 없다면 삭제하고, ‘order room service’, ‘eat delicious food’, ‘go swimming’처럼 정확한 표현을 사용하세요. ‘have a match’는 어떤 경기인지 구체화하고, 3~4개의 활동만 자연스럽게 연결하세요.

Example: We usually meet at a café, watch movies, or go swimming together. Sometimes we play a friendly match at a sports center. Afterward, we might have dinner and chat about what has been happening in our lives.

Suggestion: 오래된 친구와 가까워진 과정을 설명하려는 내용은 좋지만, 첫 문장은 ‘The friend I have known for a long time is...’로 수정해야 합니다. ‘met in middle school’ 앞에 관계대명사와 문장부호를 사용하고, ‘different elementary school’은 ‘different elementary schools’가 자연스럽습니다. ‘as we were an outsider’의 의미가 불명확하므로 ‘we were both new students’처럼 정확히 설명하세요.

Example: Yes, I have known a friend called Duan Kim for a long time. We first met in middle school, although we were not close at first because we had attended different elementary schools. However, we became good friends after discovering that we shared similar interests.

× When it comes to past, people used to meet their friends at cafe or restaurant.

✓ When it comes to the past, people used to meet their friends at a café or a restaurant.

‘Past’ needs the definite article ‘the’ when referring to a general period. Singular countable nouns such as ‘café’ and ‘restaurant’ also need articles.

× In stark contrast, people used to meet friends online in the present.

✓ In stark contrast, people meet their friends online nowadays.

‘Used to meet’ describes a past habit, so it is inappropriate for a present situation. Use the simple present ‘meet’ with ‘nowadays’.

× From my perspective, cafe is the appropriate venue for a meeting is because people can have a conversation while having a drink.

✓ From my perspective, a café is an appropriate venue for a meeting because people can have a conversation while having a drink.

The sentence incorrectly uses both ‘is’ and ‘because’ in the structure ‘the reason is because.’ Remove the unnecessary ‘is’ and use a complete clause beginning with ‘because.’

× From my perspective, cafe is the appropriate venue for a meeting is because people can have a conversation while having a drink.

✓ From my perspective, a café is an appropriate venue for a meeting because people can have a conversation while having a drink.

The singular countable noun ‘café’ needs an article. Use ‘a café’ when referring to any café in general.

× However, karaoke is inappropriate venue for meeting.

✓ However, karaoke is an inappropriate venue for meeting.

The singular countable noun ‘venue’ requires an article. Use ‘an’ because ‘inappropriate’ begins with a vowel sound.

× It's because people can't have a conversation because they have to think.

✓ This is because people cannot have a conversation while they are singing.

The original sentence repeats ‘because’ and creates an unclear structure. Use one clear cause-and-effect structure. ‘Singing’ also expresses the likely reason people cannot talk in karaoke.

× To be honest, I'm not confident of keeping in touch with numerous friends.

✓ To be honest, I'm not confident about keeping in touch with numerous friends.

The adjective ‘confident’ is normally followed by the preposition ‘about’ when describing an activity or situation.

× Therefore, I only have a fractional number of friends I used to have conversation with them.

✓ Therefore, I only have a small number of friends with whom I have conversations.

‘Fractional number’ is not an appropriate quantifier for people in this context. Use ‘a small number of friends.’

× Therefore, I only have a fractional number of friends I used to have conversation with them.

✓ Therefore, I only have a small number of friends with whom I have conversations.

The relative clause is incorrectly formed because ‘friends’ is followed by the separate object pronoun ‘them.’ Use ‘with whom’ or ‘who I have conversations with,’ but do not use both.

× Therefore, I only have a fractional number of friends I used to have conversation with them.

✓ Therefore, I only have a small number of friends with whom I have conversations.

The countable noun ‘conversation’ should be plural when referring to repeated conversations. It also needs a determiner if used in the singular.

× I'll invite a friend to my home absolutely.

✓ I will definitely invite a friend to my home.

The adverb ‘absolutely’ is awkward at the end of this sentence. Place an adverb such as ‘definitely’ before the main verb to emphasize the decision naturally.

× What's more you to my small house, I couldn't host numerous friends.

✓ What's more, because my house is small, I couldn't host numerous friends.

The original sentence contains an incomplete and unintelligible clause. Use a complete subordinate clause with a subject and verb, such as ‘because my house is small.’

× Additionally, I could share worries or solutions of person issues with them by having a conversation

✓ Additionally, I could share my worries or solutions to personal issues with them through conversation.

‘Person’ is a noun, but the adjective ‘personal’ is needed before ‘issues.’ The phrase ‘personal issues’ is the correct adjective-noun combination.

× Additionally, I could share worries or solutions of person issues with them by having a conversation

✓ Additionally, I could share my worries or solutions to personal issues with them through conversation.

The standard collocation is ‘solutions to problems or issues,’ not ‘solutions of issues.’

× Additionally, I could share worries or solutions of person issues with them by having a conversation

✓ Additionally, I could share my worries or solutions to personal issues with them through a conversation.

The singular countable noun ‘conversation’ needs an article. Use ‘a conversation’ when referring to one conversation.

× Yes, I do frequently go out with my friends.

✓ Yes, I frequently go out with my friends.

The adverb ‘frequently’ should normally be placed before the main verb ‘go.’ The auxiliary ‘do’ is unnecessary in this affirmative sentence.

× Subsequently we visit movie theatres too is because we prefer to watch the latest movies.

✓ Subsequently, we also visit movie theaters because we prefer watching the latest movies.

The original sentence incorrectly combines ‘too’ with ‘is because.’ Remove ‘is’ and use the complete structure ‘we visit ... because ...’.

× As I mentioned before, we do frequently meet each other in cafe or movie theatre.

✓ As I mentioned before, we frequently meet each other in a café or at a movie theater.

Singular countable nouns need articles. Use ‘a café’ and ‘a movie theater.’ The preposition ‘at’ is also the natural choice for a meeting place.

× In Cafe we catch up on each other's lives. Meanwhile in movie theatre we watch ladies movies, while eating popcorn or drinking Coke.

✓ In the café, we catch up on each other's lives. Meanwhile, in the movie theater, we watch movies while eating popcorn or drinking Coke.

Specific places mentioned in the context require ‘the.’ The phrase ‘ladies movies’ is not needed and makes the meaning unclear, so ‘movies’ is the appropriate noun here.

× In hotel, we order room services to eat abandon foods.

✓ In the hotel, we order room service and eat abandoned food.

Use ‘the hotel’ when referring to a specific hotel. ‘Room service’ is generally uncountable in this meaning, so it does not take a plural ending.

× In hotel, we order room services to eat abandon foods.

✓ In the hotel, we order room service and eat abandoned food.

‘Abandon’ is the base form of the verb. The adjective describing food that has been left behind must use the past participle ‘abandoned.’

× What's more, we visit to the swimming pool to have a match.

✓ What's more, we visit the swimming pool to play a match.

The verb ‘visit’ takes a direct object and is not followed by ‘to.’ Say ‘visit the swimming pool,’ not ‘visit to the swimming pool.’

× We also visit to Sauna to have a brief conversation.

✓ We also visit the sauna to have a brief conversation.

As with ‘visit the swimming pool,’ the verb ‘visit’ does not take ‘to’ before its object. Use ‘visit the sauna.’

× The friend I have keep in touch with a long time is absolutely Duan Kim.

✓ The friend I have kept in touch with for a long time is definitely Duan Kim.

The present perfect structure requires ‘have’ plus the past participle. The past participle of ‘keep’ is ‘kept,’ not ‘keep.’

× The friend I have keep in touch with a long time is absolutely Duan Kim.

✓ The friend I have kept in touch with for a long time is definitely Duan Kim.

Use ‘for’ with a period of time, such as ‘for a long time.’ The preposition ‘with’ belongs to the expression ‘keep in touch with someone.’

× She is a friend that I have met in middle school at first we weren't on intimate terms with because we graduated from different elementary school.

✓ She is a friend whom I first met in middle school. At first, we were not close because we had graduated from different elementary schools.

The original sentence contains several independent clauses joined without proper punctuation and has an incomplete phrase after ‘terms with.’ Divide it into two sentences and use the complete expression ‘were not close.’

× She is a friend that I have met in middle school at first we weren't on intimate terms with because we graduated from different elementary school.

✓ She is a friend whom I first met in middle school. At first, we were not close because we had graduated from different elementary schools.

The past perfect ‘had graduated’ shows that graduating happened before the past situation of not being close. This creates the correct sequence of past events.

× She is a friend that I have met in middle school at first we weren't on intimate terms with because we graduated from different elementary school.

✓ She is a friend whom I first met in middle school. At first, we were not close because we had graduated from different elementary schools.

The noun ‘schools’ should be plural because the two people graduated from two different schools.

× However, as we were an outsider, we become close friends.

✓ However, because we were outsiders, we became close friends.

The plural subject ‘we’ requires the plural noun ‘outsiders,’ not the singular noun ‘an outsider.’

× However, as we were an outsider, we become close friends.

✓ However, because we were outsiders, we became close friends.

The story is about a past change in the relationship, so the past-tense form ‘became’ is required instead of the present form ‘become.’