Friends— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (tenses and word choice), avoid redundancy, and give one or two specific examples. Use linking words to connect past and present.

Example: Yes, there is a big difference. In the past I mostly made friends at kindergarten and school, but now I usually meet people online through social media or at local cafés and events.

Suggestion: Begin with a direct topic sentence explaining suitability, correct confusing phrases, and give clear reasons with linking words. Avoid vague fillers and incorrect vocabulary.

Example: Some places are suitable for meeting because they offer a relaxed atmosphere and privacy. For example, cafés and cinemas are comfortable and casual, whereas a university campus can feel too public and busy for a date.

Suggestion: Start with a clear statement of preference, use gender-neutral wording and smoother linking, and provide a specific reason or brief example. Keep sentences concise.

Example: I prefer spending time with one friend because it allows deeper conversation and support. For instance, if I have a problem I can speak privately and get focused advice.

Suggestion: Give a concise topic sentence, correct repetition, and add a short specific detail about how you host. Use cohesive linking between ideas.

Example: Yes, I often invite friends because I have a large flat with a home cinema. We usually watch films and order pizza or sushi while chatting comfortably.

Suggestion: Provide a clear main sentence, correct grammar (subject-verb agreement), avoid hesitations, and give one specific example of support to make it concrete.

Example: Friends are very important to me because they offer emotional support. For example, when I was stressed before exams, my friends helped me study and cheered me up.

Suggestion: Start with a direct answer, fix awkward phrasing (e.g. 'graduate grade'), and use linking words to explain frequency and reason. Be specific about how often you meet.

Example: Not often. I'm in my final year and we have frequent exams, so we usually meet only once a month on a weekend to relax.

Suggestion: Give a neat topic sentence, remove repetition, and include one specific advantage with a linking phrase. Correct small grammatical issues.

Example: We usually meet at someone's house because it is cheaper than going out and more comfortable than public places.

Suggestion: Start with a clear opening sentence, use parallel structure for activities, and give a short specific example of a recent activity to make it vivid.

Example: We do a variety of things: we often play war games, and on special occasions we go to amusement parks or watch films at the cinema. Last month we rode roller coasters for a birthday.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence, correct vocabulary ('kindergarten'), fix tense and phrasing, avoid fillers, and include one brief detail about what makes the friendship special.

Example: Yes, my friend Marsha. I've known her since kindergarten, and although we see each other less often now, she has always been my closest friend because she understands me and supports me.

× Yes, of course there is big difference because I used to make friends in school or in kindergarten but now I become became adolescents so now I find you friends in Internet or in social places.

✓ Yes, of course there is a big difference because I used to make friends at school or in kindergarten but now I have become an adolescent so now I find friends on the Internet or in social places.

Errors: missing article before 'big difference' (article error/singular-plural), wrong prepositions ('in school'→'at school' and 'in the Internet'→'on the Internet'), incorrect verb forms ('become became' should be 'have become'), incorrect article and count with 'adolescents' (plural) should be singular 'an adolescent', extra pronoun 'you' before 'friends'. Suggestion: add appropriate articles, use correct prepositions for institutions and the Internet, use present perfect 'have become' to indicate change from past to present, and remove unintended pronouns.

× I think it's because self conception of the police.

✓ I think it's because of people's self-conception.

Errors: incorrect noun 'police' and incorrect word order. The intended meaning is likely 'people's self-conception' (possessive). Also need 'because of' to introduce noun phrase. Suggestion: use possessive form for 'people' and correct preposition 'because of'.

× if it is cafe or uh, cinema, it is nice to sit there with your friend or your boyfriend.

✓ If it is a cafe or a cinema, it is nice to sit there with your friend or boyfriend.

Errors: missing indefinite articles before countable nouns 'cafe' and 'cinema' and redundant 'your' before 'boyfriend' (optional). Suggestion: include 'a' for singular, countable places.

× But if there is something like, uh, I don't know, university, it is a little bit strange to have a date in university.

✓ But if it is something like, I don't know, a university, it is a little bit strange to have a date at a university.

Errors: missing article before 'university', wrong preposition 'in university' should be 'at a university' to indicate location in this context. Suggestion: add 'a' and use 'at' for events or activities held at institutions.

× I prefer to spend time with only one friend, because when you are alone, you can focus on only one person, speak about your troubles in life and support him.

✓ I prefer to spend time with just one friend, because when you are alone you can focus on one person, talk about your troubles in life, and support them.

Errors: repetition of 'only', use of 'him' assumes gender—use gender-neutral 'them'. 'Speak about' is unnatural; use 'talk about'. Suggestion: use 'just' or single 'only', and use gender-neutral pronouns.

× So it is much better than try to understand all members of the company.

✓ So it is much better than trying to understand all the members of the group.

Errors: incorrect comparative structure 'better than try' — gerund 'trying' required after 'than'. 'Company' is wrong word for group of friends; use 'group' and include 'the' before 'members'. Suggestion: use gerund and correct noun choice.

× Yes, I have a big a big flat, so I like to invite friends to my home.

✓ Yes, I have a big flat, so I like to invite friends to my home.

Errors: duplicated article phrase 'a big a big'. Suggestion: remove the repetition and keep single 'a big flat'.

× We can watch cinema because I have home cinema.

✓ We can watch movies because I have a home cinema system.

Errors: 'watch cinema' is incorrect collocation; say 'watch movies' or 'watch a film'. Missing article before 'home cinema' and better to specify 'system'. Suggestion: use natural collocations.

× We can order some pizza or sushi and enjoy eating with them.

✓ We can order pizza or sushi and enjoy eating with them.

Errors: 'some' is unnecessary before uncountable/food items in this context but not strictly wrong; removing 'some' makes the sentence more natural. Suggestion: omit 'some' for conciseness.

× They are really important for me because they can always support me.

✓ They are really important to me because they can always support me.

Errors: preposition 'for me' is acceptable but 'important to me' is more natural collocation. Suggestion: use 'important to' with feelings.

× They may help me in some situation.

✓ They may help me in some situations.

Errors: singular 'situation' after 'some' should be plural 'situations'. Suggestion: pluralize to match quantifier.

× They always, uh, gets my mood up, uh, and I really appreciate that.

✓ They always, uh, get my mood up, uh, and I really appreciate that.

Errors: verb form 'gets' does not agree with plural subject 'They' — use 'get'. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with subject number.

× Not really because now I'm in the graduate UH grade of the school.

✓ Not really, because now I'm in the final grade of school.

Errors: awkward phrase 'the graduate UH grade of the school' — unclear; likely intended 'final grade' or 'graduating grade'. Suggestion: use clear expressions like 'final year' or 'final grade'.

× So now we all have UH exams and we don't have enough time to meet each other so we just meet once a month on some weekends.

✓ So now we all have exams and don't have enough time to meet each other; we just meet once a month on some weekends.

Errors: repetition of 'so' and run-on sentence. Suggestion: link clauses properly with punctuation or conjunctions; remove filler 'UH'.

× We prefer to meet in someone's house because it is cheaper than going to some cafe or cinema and also you feel more comfortable in familiar in familiar place than in some social place.

✓ We prefer to meet at someone's house because it is cheaper than going to a cafe or cinema and you feel more comfortable in a familiar place than in a public place.

Errors: preposition 'in someone's house' → 'at someone's house', missing articles 'a cafe', repetition 'in familiar in familiar', and 'social place' is odd—use 'public place'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions and avoid repetition.

× We often play war games, sometimes if there is some celebration we can go to roller coasters or watch a cinema and sometimes we go to restaurants.

✓ We often play war games; sometimes if there is a celebration we can go on roller coasters, watch a movie, or go to restaurants.

Errors: 'go to roller coasters' should be 'go on roller coasters', 'watch a cinema' → 'watch a movie', unnecessary 'some' before 'celebration'. Suggestion: use correct verbs for activities and streamline.

× Yes, it is my friend Marsha. I have known her since children garden and now we uh, spent less time together but she's all she always be my uh, best friend.

✓ Yes, she is my friend Marsha. I have known her since kindergarten and now we, uh, spend less time together but she has always been my, uh, best friend.

Errors: 'it is' should be 'she is' for a person (pronoun error), 'children garden' is incorrect — 'kindergarten', past tense 'spent' conflicts with 'now' and should be present 'spend', and 'she always be' should be present perfect 'she has always been'. Suggestion: use correct pronouns, correct noun, appropriate tenses (present perfect for actions from past to present), and proper auxiliary verbs.