Swimming— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời tự nhiên và rõ ràng, có câu chủ đề và chi tiết hỗ trợ. Tuy nhiên bạn nên rút gọn một chút để tránh lặp ý và dùng liên từ hợp lý (ví dụ: 'because' hoặc 'so') để mạch câu trôi chảy hơn. Ngoài ra có thể thêm một cụm từ so sánh ngắn để làm rõ vì sao biển hấp dẫn hơn hồ bơi.

Example: I like swimming, though I'm not a huge fan overall. I especially enjoy swimming in the sea because it feels more exciting than a pool — the waves hit you and jumping over them is great fun.

Suggestion: Trả lời có cấu trúc tốt, nêu lý do cụ thể và kết luận cá nhân. Để cải thiện, hãy dùng vài liên từ để kết nối ý rõ hơn (ví dụ: 'because', 'so', 'therefore') và thay một vài từ lặp như 'swim' bằng từ thay thế (e.g., 'stroke', 'technique'). Có thể rút gọn để không quá dài.

Example: Yes, it can be quite challenging. I can only swim a little because I never had formal lessons and mainly learned by watching others, so my technique is weak and I don't feel confident in deep water.

Suggestion: Rất rõ ràng, có so sánh theo mùa và lý do cụ thể. Để hoàn thiện hơn, sử dụng thêm một liên từ chuyển mạch ngắn như 'however' hoặc 'while' để nối hai ý về bãi biển và hồ bơi. Bạn cũng có thể thêm một ví dụ cụ thể về địa điểm nổi tiếng nếu muốn mở rộng.

Example: It depends on the season. In summer many people go to the beach with family to cool off, while on ordinary days public pools are more popular because they're accessible and safer for children.

Suggestion: Trả lời so sánh tốt, cung cấp lý do hợp lý và ý kiến cá nhân. Để cải thiện, thay 'on the other hand' bằng một liên từ khác nếu đã dùng trước, và tránh từ thừa như 'even' ở cuối câu. Thêm một chi tiết cụ thể về an toàn hoặc ví dụ trải nghiệm sẽ tăng tính thuyết phục.

Example: They offer different experiences. Pool swimming feels safer because the water is calm and you don't have to worry about currents, while the sea is more exciting and refreshing thanks to the scenery and waves. I prefer the sea because it gives me a real sense of freedom.

× I just say I like it, but I'm not a huge fan of swimming in general.

✓ I would just say I like it, but I'm not a huge fan of swimming in general.

The speaker uses 'I just say' which is unnatural for expressing a preference; the modal-like phrase 'I would say' or 'I would just say' fits present-tense habitual/comment contexts. Use 'would' to soften statements or give opinions. Suggestion: use 'I would just say' or 'I just say that' for clarity and natural tone.

× I especially enjoy swimming in the sea because it feels much more exciting than being in a swimming pool.

✓ I especially enjoy swimming in the sea because it feels much more exciting than swimming in a pool.

The comparison 'exciting than being in a swimming pool' mixes gerund phrase and passive-like 'being in'; better parallel structure uses the same verb form: 'swimming in a pool.' Suggestion: keep parallel gerund forms when comparing activities.

× I love the feeling of the waves hitting me and jumping over the waves is honestly so much fun.

✓ I love the feeling of the waves hitting me, and jumping over the waves is honestly so much fun.

Missing comma before coordinating conjunction joining two independent clauses causes slight run-on; structure is otherwise gerund-based and fine. Add comma to separate clauses for clarity. Suggestion: use a comma before 'and' when joining two independent clauses.

× Even now I can only swim a little because I've never taken any formal swimming lessons.

✓ Even now I can only swim a little because I have never taken any formal swimming lessons.

Contraction 'I've' is acceptable, but expansion 'I have' fits formal test responses better. Tense is present perfect correctly used to link past experience to present ability. Suggestion: prefer full form 'I have' in formal speech; grammar is otherwise correct.

× I mostly learned by watching other people and practicing on my own, so my swimming technique isn't very good.

✓ I mostly learned by watching other people and by practicing on my own, so my swimming technique isn't very good.

Parallelism issue: 'watching other people and practicing on my own' is acceptable, but adding 'by' before both gerunds improves parallel structure and clarity. Suggestion: keep parallel prepositional phrases: 'by watching... and by practicing...'.

× That's why I still don't feel completely confident in deep water.

✓ That's why I still don't feel completely confident in deep water.

Sentence is grammatically correct; present tense 'don't feel' properly expresses current state. No change needed.

× On normal days though, swimming pools are much more popular since they are easier to access and safer, especially for children.

✓ On normal days, though, swimming pools are much more popular since they are easier to access and are safer, especially for children.

Add comma placement for parenthetical 'though'; parallelism suggests repeating 'are' before 'safer' for rhythm, though optional. Suggestion: punctuate 'though' with commas and maintain parallel verb structure.

× I think both are common, but beaches tend to be much busier during holidays.

✓ I think both are common, but beaches tend to be much busier during holidays.

Correct present-tense general statement. No grammatical correction needed.

× They are quite different experiences.

✓ They are quite different experiences.

Grammatically correct as a simple present statement; no change needed.

× Swimming in a pool feels safer because the water is calm, clean and you don't have to worry about strong waves or currents.

✓ Swimming in a pool feels safer because the water is calm and clean, and you don't have to worry about strong waves or currents.

Missing conjunction 'and' between 'calm' and 'clean' for proper coordination, and comma before 'and' joining two independent clauses improves clarity. Suggestion: use 'and' to join adjectives and comma before conjunction between clauses.

× On the other hand, swimming in the sea is much more exciting and refreshing because you can enjoy the natural scenery and feel the waves.

✓ On the other hand, swimming in the sea is much more exciting and refreshing because you can enjoy the natural scenery and feel the waves.

Sentence is grammatically correct in present tense; no change needed.

× Personally, I prefer the sea because it gives me a stronger sense of freedom even.

✓ Personally, I prefer the sea because it gives me a stronger sense of freedom.

The adverb 'even' at the end is awkward and unnecessary. Removing it improves natural phrasing. Suggestion: omit 'even' or reposition it earlier if needed (e.g., 'even more').