Advertisement— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: ควรตอบให้ตรงคำถามด้วยโครงสร้าง “Yes, I have” แล้วอธิบายสิ่งที่ซื้อและเหตุผลอย่างชัดเจน ควรใช้คำกริยาและพหูพจน์ให้ถูกต้อง เช่น “I saw advertisements on shopping apps” แทน “I see some in the applications” และใช้ชื่อแอปเป็น “Shopee and Lazada” ไม่ควรพูดซ้ำหรือใช้วลีที่ไม่เป็นธรรมชาติ เช่น “want to buy it for for me” ควรเพิ่มรายละเอียดเฉพาะเจาะจงว่าซื้ออะไรและโฆษณาช่วยตัดสินใจอย่างไร โดยใช้ linking word เช่น “For example”

Example: Yes, I have. I once bought a pair of shoes after seeing an advertisement on Shopee. The ad showed the shoes clearly and offered a discount, so I decided to buy them.

Suggestion: คำตอบมีความขัดแย้งระหว่าง “often” กับ “rarely” จึงควรเลือกคำตอบให้ชัดเจน เช่น “Yes, I often see advertisements.” นอกจากนี้ “adverbs” ต้องแก้เป็น “advertisements” หรือ “ads” และควรใช้ present simple เพราะพูดถึงพฤติกรรมปัจจุบัน เช่น “when I use my phone” หลีกเลี่ยงการใช้ “because” ซ้ำและการลงท้ายด้วย “Yes” โดยไม่จำเป็น ควรอธิบายว่าเห็นโฆษณาที่ไหนและรู้สึกอย่างไร เช่น โฆษณาบนโซเชียลมีเดียหรือแอปช้อปปิ้ง

Example: Yes, I often see advertisements when I use my phone, especially on social media and shopping apps. However, I usually ignore them because I prefer to look for products when I actually need something.

Suggestion: ควรเริ่มด้วยคำตอบตรงประเด็น เช่น “Yes, there was one advertisement...” และระบุให้ชัดว่าโฆษณานั้นเกี่ยวกับอะไรและเห็นที่ไหน คำว่า “at the shop at More” ไม่ชัดเจน ควรใช้ชื่อสถานที่หรือประเภทสินค้าอย่างถูกต้อง ส่วน “bred and better” น่าจะต้องการสื่อว่า “excited” หรือ “happy” ควรใช้ past tense ให้สอดคล้องกัน เช่น “I saw,” “I liked,” และ “I told my mother” รวมทั้งอธิบายว่าเหตุใดโฆษณานั้นจึงน่าประทับใจ

Example: Yes, there was one advertisement that impressed me when I was about twelve. It was for a popular toy, and I saw it in a shopping mall. The colorful characters made me feel excited, so I told my mother that I wanted to buy it.

Suggestion: ควรใช้ present simple ให้ถูกต้อง เพราะคำถามถามถึงประสบการณ์ทั่วไป เช่น “I usually see” ไม่ใช่ “I usually saw” และ “advertisements” ควรเป็นพหูพจน์ ควรแก้ “on their trains” เป็น “on trains” และอธิบายให้ชัดว่าโฆษณามักอยู่บริเวณใด เช่น บนผนัง ภายในตู้โดยสาร หรือที่สถานี ควรเปลี่ยนวลีที่ไม่เป็นธรรมชาติอย่าง “support about the things for the people to want to buy it” เป็น “promote products and encourage people to buy them”

Example: Yes, I often see advertisements on trains, buses, and at airports. They are usually displayed on the walls, inside vehicles, or near the platforms. I think companies use these places because many passengers see the ads while they are travelling.

Suggestion: ควรใช้คำว่า “advertisements” หรือ “ads” แทน “Edwards” และแก้ “it's hard to support me” เป็น “they help me” เพราะต้องการสื่อว่าโฆษณาช่วยในการตัดสินใจซื้อ ควรตอบเหตุผลอย่างเป็นธรรมชาติและยกตัวอย่างให้ชัด เช่น โฆษณาโทรศัพท์ช่วยให้เปรียบเทียบราคา คุณสมบัติ หรือรุ่นต่าง ๆ ได้ ควรใช้ linking word เช่น “For example” และหลีกเลี่ยงวลี “some other phone” ที่ไม่ชัดเจน

Example: Yes, I do, but only when they are informative. Advertisements can help me compare different phones, especially their prices and features. For example, I recently watched an ad that helped me choose a phone with a better camera.

Suggestion: ควรตอบด้วยชื่อประเภทโฆษณาที่ชัดเจน เช่น “skincare advertisements” และแก้ “protect my skincare in my face” เป็น “take care of my skin” หรือ “protect my skin” ควรใช้คำเชื่อมอย่าง “because” หรือ “Also” อย่างเป็นธรรมชาติ และอธิบายให้เฉพาะเจาะจงว่าโฆษณาที่ชอบมีข้อมูลอะไร เช่น ส่วนผสม วิธีใช้ หรือผลลัพธ์ คำว่า “makes me confident for it” ควรแก้เป็น “makes me feel more confident about choosing a product”

Example: I like skincare advertisements because I am interested in taking care of my skin. I especially enjoy ads that explain the ingredients and show how the product works. They make me feel more confident about choosing the right product.

× Yes, I see some in the applications for example shoppes and lazaras they show the things that I want to buy it for for me is like shoes, book or skincare.

✓ Yes, I bought some things after seeing advertisements in shopping applications such as Shopee and Lazada. They showed me things that I wanted to buy, such as shoes, books, or skincare products.

The question asks whether the student has ever bought something, so the past tense bought is more appropriate for a specific past experience. The past forms showed and wanted also make the time reference consistent.

× Yes, I see some in the applications for example shoppes and lazaras they show the things that I want to buy it for for me is like shoes, book or skincare.

✓ Yes, I bought some things after seeing advertisements in shopping applications such as Shopee and Lazada. They showed me things that I wanted to buy, such as shoes, books, or skincare products.

Shoes and books refer to more than one item, so they need plural forms. Product is also added after skincare because skincare is usually an uncountable noun describing a category of products.

× Yes, I see some in the applications for example shoppes and lazaras they show the things that I want to buy it for for me is like shoes, book or skincare.

✓ Yes, I bought some things after seeing advertisements in shopping applications such as Shopee and Lazada. They showed me things that I wanted to buy, such as shoes, books, or skincare products.

The pronoun it is unnecessary after buy because the object is already expressed by things. Use they to refer to the advertisements or applications, and use them only when referring to plural objects.

× Yes, I see some in the applications for example shoppes and lazaras they show the things that I want to buy it for for me is like shoes, book or skincare.

✓ Yes, I bought some things after seeing advertisements in shopping applications such as Shopee and Lazada. They showed me things that I wanted to buy, such as shoes, books, or skincare products.

The original sentence joins several complete ideas without clear punctuation or connectors. Separate the ideas into two sentences and use such as to introduce examples.

× Um Yes I rarely see adverbs when I use on my phone because I didn't like adverbs because I want to see them when I want really want to buy it. Yes.

✓ Um, yes, I rarely see advertisements when I use my phone because I do not like seeing them unless I really want to buy something.

This question asks about a regular habit, so the present tense do not like is needed instead of the past tense did not like. Use use my phone, not use on my phone.

× Um Yes I rarely see adverbs when I use on my phone because I didn't like adverbs because I want to see them when I want really want to buy it. Yes.

✓ Um, yes, I rarely see advertisements when I use my phone because I do not like seeing them unless I really want to buy something.

The correct expression is use my phone because use takes a direct object. The preposition on is not needed in this structure.

× Um Yes I rarely see adverbs when I use on my phone because I didn't like adverbs because I want to see them when I want really want to buy it. Yes.

✓ Um, yes, I rarely see advertisements when I use my phone because I do not like seeing them unless I really want to buy something.

Something is more suitable than it because the speaker is referring generally to an item that they may want to buy. Also, seeing them is used for advertisements, which is a plural noun.

× Yes for me when I was twelve I saw the advertisement at the shop at More yes and I really like it because it's made me feel bred and better for me to I want to buy and I tell my mom

✓ Yes, when I was twelve, I saw an advertisement at a shop called More. I really liked it because it made me feel happy and encouraged me to buy the product, so I told my mom.

Because the experience happened when the student was twelve, the verbs should be in the past tense: liked, made, encouraged, and told. The past tense keeps all events in the same time frame.

× Yes for me when I was twelve I saw the advertisement at the shop at More yes and I really like it because it's made me feel bred and better for me to I want to buy and I tell my mom

✓ Yes, when I was twelve, I saw an advertisement at a shop called More. I really liked it because it made me feel happy and encouraged me to buy the product, so I told my mom.

Use an advertisement because the advertisement is being mentioned for the first time. Use a shop because it is also an unspecified singular countable noun.

× Yes for me when I was twelve I saw the advertisement at the shop at More yes and I really like it because it's made me feel bred and better for me to I want to buy and I tell my mom

✓ Yes, when I was twelve, I saw an advertisement at a shop called More. I really liked it because it made me feel happy and encouraged me to buy the product, so I told my mom.

The original sentence contains several clauses joined together without a clear structure. Divide it into two sentences and connect the final result with so.

× Yes, I usually saw a lot of advertisement on their trains or an airplane because I think they want to support about the things for the people to want to buy it. Yes.

✓ Yes, I usually see a lot of advertisements on trains or airplanes because I think companies promote things that people want to buy.

The question asks about a current routine, so use the present tense see rather than the past tense saw. The adverb usually also commonly introduces a present simple habit.

× Yes, I usually saw a lot of advertisement on their trains or an airplane because I think they want to support about the things for the people to want to buy it. Yes.

✓ Yes, I usually see a lot of advertisements on trains or airplanes because I think companies promote things that people want to buy.

After a lot of, use the plural countable noun advertisements. Trains and airplanes are plural because the answer refers to transport in general.

× Yes, I usually saw a lot of advertisement on their trains or an airplane because I think they want to support about the things for the people to want to buy it. Yes.

✓ Yes, I usually see a lot of advertisements on trains or airplanes because I think companies promote things that people want to buy.

Use on trains and on airplanes when referring to advertisements displayed inside or on public transport. The phrase support about is incorrect; promote is the appropriate verb here.

× Yes, I usually saw a lot of advertisement on their trains or an airplane because I think they want to support about the things for the people to want to buy it. Yes.

✓ Yes, I usually see a lot of advertisements on trains or airplanes because I think companies promote things that people want to buy.

The pronoun it incorrectly refers to things, which is plural. The sentence can avoid this problem by using the plural noun things without an unnecessary pronoun.

× Yes, I do. I like Edwards because I think it's hard to support me when I want to buy something. For example for the phone, I usually see some other phone.

✓ Yes, I do. I like advertisements because I think they are helpful when I want to buy something. For example, when I am looking for a phone, I usually see advertisements for different phones.

Helpful is the correct adjective to describe advertisements that assist the speaker. Hard to support me does not express this meaning naturally, so use are helpful instead.

× Yes, I do. I like Edwards because I think it's hard to support me when I want to buy something. For example for the phone, I usually see some other phone.

✓ Yes, I do. I like advertisements because I think they are helpful when I want to buy something. For example, when I am looking for a phone, I usually see advertisements for different phones.

The pronoun they correctly refers to advertisements, which is plural. The pronoun it cannot refer to advertisements in this sentence.

× Yes, I do. I like Edwards because I think it's hard to support me when I want to buy something. For example for the phone, I usually see some other phone.

✓ Yes, I do. I like advertisements because I think they are helpful when I want to buy something. For example, when I am looking for a phone, I usually see advertisements for different phones.

Use for a phone or when I am looking for a phone to describe the purpose or situation. The phrase for the phone is incomplete and unclear in the original sentence.

× I like some skincare because firstly I like to protect my skincare in my face and I like some advertising for this because it makes me confident for it.

✓ I like skincare advertisements because, firstly, I like to protect the skin on my face. I also like these advertisements because they make me feel confident about the products.

Use on my face, not in my face, because the skin is located on the surface of the face. Use confident about when describing confidence related to something.

× I like some skincare because firstly I like to protect my skincare in my face and I like some advertising for this because it makes me confident for it.

✓ I like skincare advertisements because, firstly, I like to protect the skin on my face. I also like these advertisements because they make me feel confident about the products.

The singular countable noun skin needs the definite article the when referring to the skin on the speaker's face. Skincare is generally uncountable, so it does not need some in this context.

× I like some skincare because firstly I like to protect my skincare in my face and I like some advertising for this because it makes me confident for it.

✓ I like skincare advertisements because, firstly, I like to protect the skin on my face. I also like these advertisements because they make me feel confident about the products.

These advertisements correctly refers back to the plural noun advertisements. The original pronoun it is singular and cannot refer to plural advertisements.