Advertisement— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 「digging apps」は文脈上不自然なので、意図に合う「dating apps」や「gaming apps」などに置き換えてください。また、「smartphone and my computer」は「my smartphone or computer」のほうが自然です。内容は直接的で、広告の対象や特徴にも触れられているため良いですが、2文目がやや長いので、理由を別文に分けると明確になります。

Example: Yes, I often see advertisements when I use my smartphone or computer. On my phone, I frequently get ads for dating apps and online shopping. They seem to target people my age because they focus on current trends and convenience.

Suggestion: 「advertisem」「Toy Curs」などの誤りを避け、「advertisement」「Tomica toy cars」と発音・表現を明確にしてください。最後の「I remember something」は未完のため削除し、広告が印象に残った理由を簡潔にまとめましょう。「catchy jingle」「bright, fast-moving scenes」は具体的で良いので、その効果を1文で締めくくると自然です。

Example: Yes. When I was a child, I remember an advertisement for Tomica toy cars that made a strong impression on me. It had a very catchy jingle, something like “Tomica, Tomica,” as well as bright, fast-moving scenes. The commercial made me want the toys immediately, and I still remember it today.

Suggestion: 「elder advertisements」「the distal others」「car carriages」は不自然または誤認識と思われるため、「a lot of advertisements」「digital screens」「inside train carriages」に直してください。質問には十分答えていますが、電車・駅・空港の例を一度に詰め込みすぎています。主な交通手段を電車に絞り、広告の種類と見る頻度を明確にすると、より効果的です。

Example: Yes, I see a lot of advertisements on trains and other forms of transport. I usually take the train to university and work, so I often notice posters and digital screens inside the carriages and on station platforms. At the airport, I also see many advertisements for tours and airlines.

Suggestion: 可算名詞なので「advertisement」ではなく「advertisements」とし、「advertisements on trying words」は「ads using insulting language」などに直すと自然です。賛成と反対の両面を示しており、構成は良いです。ただし「But there is an exception」はやや不自然なので、「However, I dislike...」と直接つなぎ、具体例を簡潔に説明してください。

Example: Yes, I generally like advertisements because some of them are creative and informative. However, I dislike ads that are disrespectful to certain people or groups. For example, some advertisements use insulting language to mock certain lifestyles, and that kind of tone really annoys me.

Suggestion: 「video advertisement」は複数形の「video advertisements」、「the visuals」は「visuals」、「our product」は一般論なので「a product」にしてください。「while denounced explain」は誤りのため、「while clearly explaining its benefits」と表現します。好みを述べた後に理由と例を加える構成は良いので、長い1文を2〜3文に分けると、より自然で聞き取りやすくなります。

Example: Personally, I prefer video advertisements because they combine audio and visuals, which makes the message easier to understand and remember. For example, a short video can show how a product works while clearly explaining its benefits. This makes the advertisement more engaging than a simple poster.

Suggestion: 「Autumn was cunning」は意味が通らないため、広告が「autumn was coming」または「autumn was approaching」と伝えていた、という形に直してください。また、「promotes」は過去の出来事なので「promoted」にし、「reasonable price」は自然ですが、「the style and the reasonable price」を「their style and reasonable price」とすると滑らかです。購入理由を明確に示しており、具体的な経験として良い回答です。

Example: Yes, I bought a pair of shoes a few weeks ago because of an advertisement. It said that autumn was approaching and promoted shoes that were suitable for the season. I liked their style and reasonable price, so I decided to buy them.

× Yes, I often see advertisements when I'm using my smartphone and my computer. Especially on my phone, I frequently get advertisements for digging apps and online shopping, which seems to be targeted at people of my generation because they focus on trends and convenience.

✓ Yes, I often see advertisements when I'm using my smartphone and my computer. Especially on my phone, I frequently get advertisements for digging apps and online shopping, which seem to be targeted at people of my generation because they focus on trends and convenience.

The relative pronoun which refers to advertisements, which is plural. Therefore, the verb should be seem, not seems. Make sure the verb agrees with the noun that the relative pronoun refers to.

× Yes, I see elder advertisements on trains and other transport.

✓ Yes, I see many advertisements on trains and other forms of transport.

Elder is normally used to compare people, especially family members, and is not suitable for advertisements. Use an adjective such as many, different, or eye-catching to describe advertisements.

× I usually take the train to university and work, so I notice posters and the distal others in the car carriages and on station platforms, and at the airport there were many advertisements for tours and airlines I noticed.

✓ I usually take the train to university and work, so I notice posters and other advertisements in the carriages and on station platforms. At the airport, I also notice many advertisements for tours and airlines.

The sentence describes a regular habit using the present tense, so there were and I noticed should be changed to there are and I notice. Use the present tense consistently when describing things that happen regularly.

× Yes, I generally like advertisement because some are creative and informative.

✓ Yes, I generally like advertisements because some are creative and informative.

The statement refers to advertisements in general, so the plural form advertisements is needed. Use a plural noun when discussing a whole category or multiple examples.

× For example, I often see advertisement on trying words that mock certain lifestyles and that kind of tone makes me annoyed.

✓ For example, I often see advertisements with insulting words that mock certain lifestyles, and that kind of tone makes me annoyed.

With is the appropriate preposition for describing words contained in an advertisement. Use advertisements with insulting words rather than advertisements on insulting words.

× For me personally, I prefer video advertisement because they combine audio and the visuals which make it much easier to understand and remember the information they have.

✓ For me personally, I prefer video advertisements because they combine audio and visuals, which makes it much easier to understand and remember the information they contain.

The speaker is referring to video advertisements in general, so advertisement should be plural. Also, information is contained in advertisements, so contain is more appropriate than have in this context.

× For me personally, I prefer video advertisement because they combine audio and the visuals which make it much easier to understand and remember the information they have.

✓ For me personally, I prefer video advertisements because they combine audio and visuals, which makes it much easier to understand and remember the information they contain.

The subject video advertisements is plural, so the pronoun they correctly refers to it. In the relative clause, which refers to the combination of audio and visuals as one feature, so makes is appropriate. Check whether a relative clause refers to a singular idea or a plural noun.

× For example, a short video can show how our product works while denounced explain it benefits and so the message is more engaging.

✓ For example, a short video can show how a product works while an announcer explains its benefits, making the message more engaging.

The original sentence contains an unclear and incomplete clause: denounced explain it benefits. The sentence needs a clear subject, an announcer, and a correctly formed verb phrase, explains its benefits. Use a complete subject-verb structure in every clause.

× For example, a short video can show how our product works while denounced explain it benefits and so the message is more engaging.

✓ For example, a short video can show how a product works while an announcer explains its benefits, making the message more engaging.

A singular countable noun such as announcer requires an article. Use an before announcer because the word begins with a vowel sound. Also, a product is suitable when referring to a product in general.

× For example, a short video can show how our product works while denounced explain it benefits and so the message is more engaging.

✓ For example, a short video can show how a product works while an announcer explains its benefits, making the message more engaging.

The possessive form its is required before the noun benefits. It is a subject or object pronoun, whereas its shows possession. Use its benefits to mean the benefits of the product.

× For example, a short video can show how our product works while denounced explain it benefits and so the message is more engaging.

✓ For example, a short video can show how a product works while an announcer explains its benefits, making the message more engaging.

The subject announcer is singular, so the present-tense verb must be explains, with -s. Remember to add -s or -es to the verb when the subject is he, she, it, or another singular noun.

× The advertisement mentioned that Autumn was cunning and promotes shoes suitable for the season and I liked the style and the reasonable price so I decided to buy them.

✓ The advertisement mentioned that Autumn was cunning and promoted shoes suitable for the season, and I liked the style and the reasonable price, so I decided to buy them.

The sentence describes an advertisement in the past. Therefore, promotes should be changed to promoted to maintain consistent past-tense narration. Use the past tense for actions that occurred at the time of the advertisement.