Advertisement— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammatical accuracy and clarity. Use a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms, and more precise vocabulary. Avoid minor redundancy and keep within 3–4 sentences. Add a linking phrase when giving examples.

Example: Yes, I see many ads on my phone and computer. For example, when I open some apps I have to watch a short video ad before I can continue. Also, some ads automatically redirect me to other websites, which is annoying.

Suggestion: Be more precise with vocabulary and give a clearer topic sentence. Correct unclear phrases (e.g., “chocolate conversion”) and combine short sentences to sound more natural. Keep answers concise and add a linking word to explain impact.

Example: Yes, an ad for Douglas Lee chocolate impressed me as a child. The advert showed children eating chocolate and laughing, which made the product look very appealing. As a result, I begged my parents for that chocolate and I still like it now.

Suggestion: Fix grammar and unclear phrases, and structure the answer with a clear topic sentence followed by two supporting points. Avoid asking rhetorical questions that confuse meaning. Use linking words to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, there are many advertisements on public transport, especially inside subway carriages. Often they feature celebrities, and when a favorite celebrity endorses a product I feel more tempted to buy it.

Suggestion: Good content and structure—improve natural phrasing and reduce wordiness. Start with a clear topic sentence, then provide a specific example using a linking word. Avoid repetitive adverbs.

Example: It depends, but I prefer informative and reliable ads because they save me time. For example, last month a camera ad explained its functions clearly, which helped me decide whether to research it further.

Suggestion: Answer directly instead of turning the question back. Use a clear topic sentence, correct sentence structure, and provide specific reasons and examples. Use linking words to connect reason and example.

Example: I like creative and funny advertisements because they often include unexpected twists and surprising endings. For instance, many memorable and humorous ads I’ve seen come from Thailand and stay in my memory.

× For example, when I read logos, I had to watch a few second advertisement before I can keep reading.

✓ For example, when I read blogs, I have to watch a few-second advertisement before I can keep reading.

Errors: 'read logos' is likely a word choice error (logos->blogs) but matches present participle? However the main grammatical issues: tense consistency and verb form. 'I had to' (past) conflicts with general habit; change to 'I have to' (present). 'few second' needs hyphen and plural 'seconds' when used as compound adjective: 'few-second'. Explanation: Use present tense for habitual actions, ensure noun modifiers use correct hyphenation and plurality when forming compound adjectives, and correct 'logos' to 'blogs' for intended meaning. Suggestion: Use present simple for routines and hyphenate compound adjectives.'},{