Advertisement— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more natural and precise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct word choice (e.g. "browser", "products"), avoid redundancy, and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep under five sentences.

Example: Yes, I see a lot of ads on my phone and computer. For example, when I use my web browser or social media apps, banner and video ads often interrupt what I’m doing. Because of this, I sometimes use an ad blocker to focus on my work.

Suggestion: Provide a clearer topic sentence and accurate details. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct grammar (e.g. "there was a perfume ad" rather than "dear fragrance"). Mention why it was memorable beyond the celebrity to add depth.

Example: Yes, one ad that stayed with me was a perfume commercial starring Johnny Depp. It was memorable because of the atmospheric music and striking visuals, and also because I admired the actor, which made the ad feel special to me.

Suggestion: Give a direct, grammatically correct response and use specific examples. Avoid vague or incorrect phrases like "transport energy" and "introduced a lot of politics." Explain briefly how advertising has changed and link ideas coherently.

Example: Yes, there used to be many ads inside trains and on station walls, especially a few years ago. However, recently local authorities have restricted commercial posters on public transport, so there are fewer advertisements now.

Suggestion: Answer directly and use present-tense consistency. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g. "companies", "exaggerate product benefits"). Give one clear reason and a concise example, linked with a connective word.

Example: No, I don’t like most advertisements today because companies often exaggerate product benefits. For example, sellers may airbrush photos of fruit to make them look fresher, which makes me distrust their claims.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence and give specific reasons why you prefer public service ads. Use linking words to explain change over time and provide a short concrete example of a memorable public service ad.

Example: I prefer public service advertisements because they often tell moving stories and promote positive social messages. For instance, an old campaign about road safety used real families’ stories, which made the message memorable and emotional.

× Yes, I find that various advertisements fill my mobile phones up, especially when I use a bruise browser.

✓ Yes, I find that various advertisements fill up my mobile phone, especially when I use a browser.

The sentence uses incorrect vocabulary ('bruise browser') and a plural noun 'mobile phones' that doesn't match context. This is a sentence structure/vocabulary issue (ID 26). Use 'mobile phone' for singular possession and 'browser' instead of the incorrect word. Place 'fill up' before the object for natural word order. Suggestion: replace incorrect word with correct vocabulary and keep singular 'mobile phone' if referring to the speaker's device.

× They're different.

✓ They are different.

Contraction 'They're' is acceptable in speech but writing should expand to 'They are' for clarity; this is primarily a minor sentence structure/formality issue (ID 22 and 26). If intending contrast, consider 'They are all different.' Suggestion: be explicit about what 'they' refers to for clarity.

× Advertisement of productions troubled me a lot when I work.

✓ Advertisements for products troubled me a lot when I worked.

Multiple errors: wrong noun ('productions' should be 'products'), incorrect singular/plural and article usage, and wrong tense ('work' should be past 'worked') so this is a sentence structure error (ID 26) and past tense issue (ID 5). Also use 'advertisements for products' or 'product advertisements'. Suggestion: use correct nouns and match tense to 'when I worked.'

× Yes, when I was a child there is a dear fragrance.

✓ Yes, when I was a child there was a perfume called 'Dear' that I liked.

The sentence uses incorrect tense with 'there is' instead of past 'there was' (ID 3) and unclear noun 'dear fragrance.' I interpreted it as a perfume name. Suggestion: use past tense 'there was' and clarify the noun (perfume/fragrance) and any name.

× He advertisement impressed me a lot because it was acted by Johnny Depp and I'm a big fan of him.

✓ That advertisement impressed me a lot because it featured Johnny Depp, and I'm a big fan of his.

Errors include wrong pronoun 'He', incorrect article use, incorrect passive phrasing 'acted by' for an advertisement (ID 12 and 22). Also typical English prefers 'featured' rather than 'was acted by' for ads, and 'a big fan of his' is natural. Suggestion: use 'that advertisement' and 'featured Johnny Depp.'

× Yes, there are a lot of advertising in trains many years ago, but nowadays the transport energy in my country has introduced a lot of politics to solve these problems.

✓ Yes, there was a lot of advertising on trains many years ago, but nowadays the transport authorities in my country have introduced many policies to solve these problems.

Multiple issues: tense/there-be (ID 3 and 5), incorrect noun 'advertising' used as countable (should be 'advertising' as uncountable or 'ads') and preposition 'in trains' should be 'on trains' (ID 11). 'Transport energy' is incorrect; likely 'transport authorities' or 'transport sector.' 'Politics' should be 'policies.' Suggestion: use past tense 'there was', 'on trains', and correct nouns 'authorities' and 'policies.'

× No, I didn't like advertisement nowadays because I find that traders always tend to exaggerate the production and boast the functional of them.

✓ No, I don't like advertisements nowadays because I find that sellers often tend to exaggerate the products and boast about their functions.

Tense mismatch: 'didn't like' is past but 'nowadays' requires present tense (ID 6 vs ID 5). Use present 'don't like'. Also plural/article issues: 'advertisement' should be 'advertisements'; 'traders' better as 'sellers'; 'production' should be 'products'; 'boast the functional of them' is incorrect—use 'boast about their functions.' Suggestion: match tense to time adverbials and use correct noun forms and collocations.

× For example, some fruit traders may embellish them the photo of their fruit by Photoshop or other.

✓ For example, some fruit sellers may embellish photos of their fruit using Photoshop or other software.

Errors: incorrect pronoun placement 'embellish them the photo' (ID 12 and 26), wrong preposition/verb pattern—use 'embellish photos' and 'using Photoshop' (ID 11 and 8). 'Other' alone is vague; use 'other software.' Suggestion: use correct verb-object order and prepositions: 'embellish photos using Photoshop.'

× I'd like to watch public service advertising, and it is a special advertising in China many years ago, it can hard to find nowadays.

✓ I'd like to watch public service advertisements; they were a special form of advertising in China many years ago, and they are hard to find nowadays.

Problems: singular/plural and article issues ('advertising' vs 'advertisements'), tense mismatch ('many years ago' requires past 'were'), and incorrect modal/structure 'it can hard to find' should be 'they are hard to find' (ID 7 and 6 and 22). Suggestion: keep nouns consistent in number, match verb tense to time expressions, and use correct copula 'are' with 'hard to find.'

× They always contain the moving and touching stories, which impressed me a lot.

✓ They always contain moving and touching stories, which impress me a lot.

Tense inconsistency: 'contain' is present but 'impressed' is past (ID 6 and 5). Keep present tense 'impress' to match 'always contain.' Also article 'the' is unnecessary before 'moving and touching stories' (ID 22 and 13). Suggestion: maintain consistent tense and omit unnecessary articles for plural general nouns.