Advertisement— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Replace vague phrases like "most of the time" and "breaks the flow of my momentum" with clearer expressions.

Example: Yes — I often see ads on my phone or laptop. For example, video ads frequently appear before or during videos, which interrupts my viewing and distracts me from my work.

Suggestion: Provide a clearer topic sentence and add a specific detail about why it was memorable (e.g., the visuals, slogan, or how it influenced you). Use linking words to make the reason explicit and avoid repeating phrases like "up to this day" twice.

Example: Yes — one ad that stayed with me was for a nutritious soup. It featured children singing a very catchy jingle, and because the melody and simple lyrics repeated several times, I can still sing it today.

Suggestion: Begin with a clear topic sentence and refine grammar and word choice (e.g., "transport vehicles" rather than "transportation cars"). Use a linking word to explain why it's effective and give a specific example or statistic if possible.

Example: Yes — I see many ads on buses and trains. Because commuters spend a long time travelling, advertisers can reach a large audience, for example with full-car posters or digital screens.

Suggestion: Soften absolute language and provide a balanced view with one clear reason. Improve coherence by using linking words and correct small grammar errors (e.g., "a pop-up ad appears and breaks my concentration"). Keep it to two or three sentences.

Example: I don't like most advertisements because they are often disruptive. For instance, pop-up ads that appear while I'm studying break my concentration and make it hard to get back to work.

Suggestion: Use correct subject–verb agreement and be slightly more specific about why these ads work (e.g., emotional appeal, clear message). Link your points with a connector and avoid repeating similar phrases.

Example: I prefer short adverts with a catchy jingle and striking visuals because they grab my attention quickly and convey the message memorably.

× Yes, most of the time I see advertisements on my phone or laptop, especially when I'm watching a video and it's very annoying since it interrupts what I'm doing and breaks the flow of my momentum.

✓ Yes, most of the time I see advertisements on my phone or laptop, especially when I'm watching a video, and they are very annoying since they interrupt what I'm doing and break the flow of my momentum.

Plural and subject consistency: 'advertisements' is plural so pronouns and verbs referring to it should be plural ('they are', 'they interrupt', 'break' not 'breaks'). This is a subject-verb agreement issue (present tense) where verbs must match the plural subject. Suggestion: ensure pronouns and verbs agree with the number of the noun. ID:6

× There was 1 advertisement that stuck to me up to this day.

✓ There was one advertisement that has stuck with me up to this day.

Tense and preposition use: 'stuck to me up to this day' is unnatural. Use present perfect 'has stuck' to connect past event with present relevance, and preposition 'with' after 'stuck'. Also write numbers as words in formal speech. Suggestion: use present perfect for effects continuing to present and use correct preposition. ID:5

× It was about a nutritious soup and children were singing it and it was a very catchy melody that up to this day I still know how to sing it.

✓ It was about a nutritious soup and children were singing it; it had a very catchy melody that I still remember and can sing up to this day.

Tense consistency and redundant pronoun: original mixes past and present awkwardly and repeats 'it'. Use past tense 'had' for melody and present modal 'can sing' to show ability now; move 'up to this day' to natural position. Also remove redundant 'how to'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and avoid unnecessary repetition. ID:6

× Yes, I do see a lot of advertisements posted on transportation cars and I think it's a great way to advertise something, especially a lot of commuters spend an ample amount of time during commute.

✓ Yes, I do see a lot of advertisements posted on transport vehicles and I think it's a great way to advertise something, especially since many commuters spend a lot of time commuting.

Preposition and word choice: 'transportation cars' is odd; use 'transport vehicles' or 'on public transport'. 'Spend an ample amount of time during commute' is incorrect; use 'spend a lot of time commuting' or 'during their commute'. Also use 'many' instead of 'a lot of' before noun. Suggestion: use natural collocations and correct gerund for 'commuting'. ID:11

× I absolutely hate advertisements. Although companies utilize them to promote their products, I personally find them very disruptive, especially when I'm trying to study and a pop up advertisement shows it breaks my momentum.

✓ I absolutely hate advertisements. Although companies use them to promote their products, I personally find them very disruptive, especially when I'm trying to study and a pop-up advertisement appears and breaks my momentum.

Verb choice and clause structure: 'utilize' is formal; 'use' is more natural. 'a pop up advertisement shows it breaks my momentum' is ungrammatical: use 'appears and breaks my momentum' or 'appears, breaking my momentum'. Also hyphenate 'pop-up'. Suggestion: simplify verbs and use correct clause conjunctions or participle forms. ID:6

× I like those advertisements that are short and has a catchy melody and striking visuals.

✓ I like those advertisements that are short and have a catchy melody and striking visuals.

Subject-verb agreement/pronoun reference: 'advertisements' is plural so verb should be 'have' not 'has'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue affecting verb form. Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with plural subjects. ID:27

× Those advertisements usually grab my attention fast and those kinds really are memorable.

✓ Those advertisements usually grab my attention quickly and those kinds are really memorable.

Adverb choice and word order: use 'quickly' (adverb) instead of colloquial 'fast' in this context. 'those kinds really are memorable' slightly awkward; move 'really' after 'are' or remove for natural flow. Also avoid repeating 'those'; could say 'That kind is really memorable' or 'Such ads are really memorable'. Suggestion: prefer 'quickly' for actions and tighten phrases for natural speech. ID:6