Advertisement— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more direct and accurate: start with a clear topic sentence, correct word choices and simple grammar. Limit to 2–3 sentences. Use linking words if you add detail. For example, say you see many ads on social media and give a specific platform and situation. Fix verbs (use present simple) and prepositions.

Example: Yes, I see a lot of advertisements on my phone, especially on Facebook and Instagram. For example, when I browse my feed I often notice sponsored posts and video ads that interrupt what I am doing.

Suggestion: Clarify the story with a clear topic sentence and specific details. Use past simple for childhood experiences and avoid unclear words like 'retirement' if you mean something else. Give one concrete example and a reason why it impressed you. Keep to 2–3 sentences and use linking words (because, for example).

Example: Yes. When I was a child, a TV commercial for a toy store impressed me because it showed colourful toys and happy children. For example, I watched that ad in a shopping mall with my mother, and it made me want to buy the toys because they looked fun.

Suggestion: Make your answer natural and grammatically correct: start with a clear topic sentence and add one specific detail about where ads appear. Use linking words like 'for example' and correct noun phrases (advertising on public transport). Keep it concise.

Example: Yes, I see a lot of advertising on public transport. For example, there are posters and digital screens inside trains and buses, and ads on the sides of taxis and buses.

Suggestion: Give a clearer opinion and concrete reasons. Use correct articles and plural forms (advertisements, products). Provide one specific example and explain its effect on you using linking words (because, for instance). Keep sentences precise and avoid hesitations.

Example: Yes, I like some advertisements because they explain how to use a product and what benefits it offers. For instance, a shower gel ad showed ingredients and benefits for the skin, which helped me decide to try that product.

Suggestion: Be specific about the category and why you like it. Use better vocabulary (beauty adverts or cosmetic ads) and explain the reason with one supporting detail. Structure: topic sentence + one supporting sentence with example. Eliminate filler words.

Example: I prefer beauty or cosmetic advertisements because they are colourful and make me feel excited about new products. For example, I often see lipstick ads on buses, and their bright images make me want to try the shade.

× Well honestly I have to see the advertisement on my phone because when I pay my phone I have to see on the Facebook.

✓ Well, honestly I often see advertisements on my phone because when I use my phone I see them on Facebook.

The original sentence has awkward structure and incorrect verbs ('have to see' and 'pay my phone'). Change to 'often see' to match frequency question and use 'use my phone' and 'see them on Facebook' for clarity. Use plural 'advertisements' to match context. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× Yes, when I was a child I have to see as retirement and make me like to buy umm something on at retirements.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I used to see advertisements about retirement that made me want to buy things related to retirement.

The sentence mixes past simple ('was') with present 'have to see'. Use 'used to see' for habitual past. 'Make me like to buy' should be 'made me want to buy'. Remove unclear prepositions like 'on at'. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× For example I go to shopping mall with my mother and I have to see advertisements on the TV show like the umm adore.

✓ For example, when I went to the shopping mall with my mother, I would see advertisements on the TV, such as one for Adore.

Tense should be past ('went', 'would see') to match childhood context. 'Shopping mall' needs an article. 'TV show like the umm adore' is unclear; clarify as 'an advertisement for Adore'. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× Yes, many transport. I have to see a lot of the advertising on the transport such as train, bus and taxi.

✓ Yes, a lot of advertising appears on transport, such as trains, buses and taxis.

'Many transport' is ungrammatical; use 'transport' or 'transport systems'. Use plural forms 'trains, buses and taxis'. Remove unnecessary articles: 'a lot of advertising' not 'a lot of the advertising'. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× Yes, I do like advertisement because the advertisement show how to go with that product.

✓ Yes, I do like advertisements because the advertisements show how to use those products.

Use plural 'advertisements' for general statements. 'Show how to go with that product' is incorrect; use 'show how to use those products'. Also ensure subject-verb agreement ('advertisements show'). Grammar problem type ID: 22

× For example in the umm, the charging gel, the body showering gel, that's one explain like how good for your body and how good for your.

✓ For example, the charging gel or the shower gel explains how it is good for your body and what benefits it gives.

'Charging gel' may be intended as 'cleansing' or 'charging' unclear; assume 'shower gel'. 'That's one explain like' is incorrect; use 'explains how it is good'. Avoid repeating 'your' without noun. Ensure verb agrees with singular subject 'gel explains'. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× Well, I would say the advertising I do like the most is the beauty because the beauty is make me happy and make me umm, joy with umm, the advertising.

✓ Well, I would say the type of advertising I like most is beauty advertising because it makes me happy and brings me joy.

The phrase 'the advertising I do like the most is the beauty' is awkward; rephrase to 'type of advertising I like most is beauty advertising'. Use correct verb form 'makes me happy' and 'brings me joy'. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× For example, I saw the, uh, advertising on the public transport like lipstick that.

✓ For example, I saw an advertisement for lipstick on public transport.

Use 'an advertisement for lipstick' rather than 'advertising on the public transport like lipstick that'. 'On public transport' is the correct prepositional phrase. Simplify word order for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 11