Advertisement— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more direct and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, and give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Correct simple grammar (e.g., "they give money to them" or better explanation of purpose). Keep answers to under five sentences.

Example: Yes, I see many ads on my phone and computer. For example, short video ads of one or two minutes often appear before or between videos. Also, banner ads pop up on websites, and these ads usually help companies promote new products or earn revenue.

Suggestion: Give a clear answer about a specific childhood ad and explain why it impressed you. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "when") and concrete details (product, characters, feelings). Avoid vague statements and reduce hesitations.

Example: Yes. A cereal commercial with a friendly cartoon mascot impressed me when I was a child because it showed the mascot having fun and sharing the cereal with friends. As a result, I associated the brand with happiness and wanted to try it.

Suggestion: Begin with a direct sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific examples and a linking word for clarity. Correct grammar (e.g., "I see many ads on buses and trains") and avoid repeated words.

Example: Yes, I often see advertisements on public transport. For instance, buses often have large posters on the sides and inside, and trains have ads above the seats, which makes them very visible to commuters.

Suggestion: State directly whether you like ads and give reasons with specific examples. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "so") and clearer vocabulary ("story-based ads", "emotional"). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, I like story-based advertisements because they tell a short story and connect emotionally with the viewer. For example, a commercial that shows a family reuniting makes me feel calm and interested in the product because of the emotional message.

Suggestion: Give a concise topic sentence naming the types of ads you prefer, then explain why with specific details and examples. Replace unclear words (e.g., "soap" possibly means "soap opera-style" or "short videos") and avoid fillers.

Example: I prefer short video ads and travel advertisements because they are visually appealing and tell a brief story. For instance, a 30-second travel clip showing beautiful scenery can inspire me to visit a place and is enjoyable to watch between videos.

× Yusuf yes, of course. Uh, mostly I think, uh, a good video for a good short films.

✓ Yes, of course. Mostly, I think short videos or short films are good.

The original has awkward word order and incorrect plural usage ('a good short films'). This is a sentence structure error: articles and nouns must agree and the phrase should be rearranged for clarity. Suggestion: remove the extraneous name, use 'short videos or short films', and place adjectives before nouns with correct article agreement.

× Uh, I think it it give a money to their.

✓ I think it gives money to them.

The verb 'give' needs third person singular form 'gives' to agree with the subject 'it'. 'Their' is a possessive adjective and incorrect here; use the object pronoun 'them'. Also drop the article 'a' before 'money'.

× Yes, I think a child is very, uh very acceptable mind.

✓ Yes, I think a child is very impressionable.

The phrase 'acceptable mind' is not natural English. This is a sentence structure/vocabulary issue. Use the adjective 'impressionable' to convey that children easily accept impressions. Also remove the unnecessary article 'a' before 'child' when speaking generally or say 'a child is' and keep singular properly.

× So the child have very leastly accept the advertisement and uh, uh, and they are uh.

✓ So children very easily accept advertisements, and they are affected by them.

'Child' vs 'children' and 'have' vs 'has' show subject-verb agreement issues. The adverb 'leastly' is not correct; use 'easily'. Also pluralize 'advertisements' for general meaning and complete the sentence with a clear predicate.

× Mostly I, I saw on the transportation, public transportation such as bus and in the bus, uh, outside, outside the, uh, outside, there are lot of umm, advertisement attached on the buses and.

✓ Mostly I saw public transportation, such as buses, with many advertisements attached to their exteriors.

The original repeats words and mixes tenses and number forms. 'In the bus' vs 'on the transportation' is awkward. Use past tense 'saw' correctly and plural 'buses' with 'many advertisements'. Use 'attached to their exteriors' for clarity; this corrects sentence structure and pluralization.

× I like a story type and advertisement.

✓ I like story-type advertisements.

The article 'a' is unnecessary and 'story type and advertisement' is awkward. Combine into 'story-type advertisements' using a hyphenated adjective phrase. This fixes quantifier/article usage and makes the phrase concise.

× Nowadays, most of the Nujen uh, nujen students are making some advertisement like a story that we feel, uh, a calm and uh, energetic to watch the advertisement.

✓ Nowadays, most students make advertisements like stories that make us feel calm and energetic when we watch them.

The original has unclear noun 'Nujen' and incorrect word order. Use present simple 'make' for habitual action. Change 'making some advertisement like a story' to 'make advertisements like stories' and use 'make us feel calm and energetic' for correct adjective placement and clearer meaning.

× I like it, uh, soap, uh, videos or a soap or, uh, travelers, uh, advertisement screen on the, uh, phone when we are go through the reads, uh, in between the advertisement came and that we can interested to watch uh, so.

✓ I like soap videos or travel advertisements that appear on the phone when we scroll through feeds; they can be interesting to watch.

This sentence has multiple article and noun errors: 'a soap' should be 'soap videos', 'travelers advertisement' should be 'travel advertisements'. Use 'scroll through feeds' instead of 'go through the reads'. Use present simple 'appear' for habitual occurrences. 'Interested' should be 'interesting' to describe the ads. Overall restructure the sentence for clarity and correct article usage.