Advertisement— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct countable nouns and tense, avoid filler sounds, and give one or two specific details with linking words. For example, say you liked a specific campaign, explain why (storyline, actors), and give a brief result or personal reaction.

Example: A clear example answer: “Yes. I remember a ‘Milk & Egg’ TV advert from my childhood that impressed me. It told a humorous story using talented actors, which made the product memorable, and as a result my family talked about it for weeks.”

Suggestion: Be specific and organize ideas: start with a direct answer, then give one clear reason with a linking word. Avoid vague phrases and incorrect word forms (e.g., ‘advise’ instead of ‘advertise’, ‘transportations’). Mention a concrete example and its effect on viewers.

Example: A clear example answer: “Yes, I often see advertisements in trains and stations. For example, posters featuring a dog campaign are common, and because thousands of commuters pass by each day, these ads attract a lot of attention.”

Suggestion: Answer directly and avoid hesitation. State your opinion clearly, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words (e.g., 'because', 'however'). Use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'annoying', 'persuade', 'promote') and finish with a concise concluding sentence.

Example: A clear example answer: “Generally I don't like advertisements because they can be intrusive and often pressure people to buy more. However, I understand their purpose since they inform consumers about new products and help companies grow.”

Suggestion: Be specific and use correct grammar. Start with a topic sentence naming the type of adverts you prefer, then give 1–2 clear reasons using linking words and a concrete example. Avoid awkward phrasing and redundancy.

Example: A clear example answer: “I prefer adverts that tell a compelling story or use creative visuals because they capture my attention. For instance, a short cinematic video that highlights a product’s benefits would make me more curious and likely to try it.”

Suggestion: Start with a clear direct answer and avoid unclear words (e.g., '2 orphans' is irrelevant). Explain briefly why and give one specific example with linking words. Use correct grammar for number agreement and smoother phrasing.

Example: A clear example answer: “Yes, I see many ads on my phone and computer because everyone uses smart devices. For example, after I search for headphones, I often see related adverts on Instagram and other social media.”

× Yeah, there are fews, especially the ones about the Milk Egg advertisements and that is super creative and then using an interesting story combined with the, uh, fantastic actors with their good performance.

✓ Yeah, there are a few, especially the ones about the Milk Egg advertisements; those are super creative and use interesting stories combined with fantastic actors and good performances.

The student used 'fews' which is incorrect pluralization. Use 'a few' for a small number of countable items. Also 'that is' should agree with plural 'ones' so use 'those are.' Parallel structure: change 'using an interesting story combined with the...actors with their good performance' to 'use interesting stories combined with fantastic actors and good performances' for clear plural agreement and grammatical flow.

× Yeah, I see a dog on the MRT Rd. train stations.

✓ Yeah, I see ads on the MRT road train stations.

The original sentence used 'a dog' which seems to be a wrong word choice; likely 'ads' was intended. Also 'MRT Rd.' is inconsistent article/capitalization. 'Train stations' is plural so no article needed. Correct word choice and remove incorrect definite/indefinite use.

× They contain another type of ads.

✓ They contain another type of ad.

'Type' is singular, so the noun after it should be singular: 'type of ad.' Alternatively use 'types of ads' if plural. The prepositional structure 'type of' requires agreement between 'type' and the noun following it.

× As long as you have enough budget to do that, I think it's a good way to advise your product since there's always a lot of people using those public transportations.

✓ As long as you have a sufficient budget to do that, I think it's a good way to advertise your product since there are always a lot of people using public transportation.

'Enough budget' is acceptable but 'a sufficient budget' is more natural. 'Advise your product' is wrong collocation; use 'advertise your product.' 'There's always a lot of people' has subject-verb agreement issue with 'there are.' Use 'there are always a lot of people.' 'Public transportations' is uncountable; use 'public transportation.'

× MMM usually I don't like to because I think it's sometimes annoying.

✓ Usually I don't like them because I think they are sometimes annoying.

The student omitted an object for 'like' and used 'it' incorrectly to refer to plural 'advertisements.' Use plural pronoun 'them' or 'ads' and ensure modal/auxiliary structure 'don't like' followed by object.

× It's like people always want you to buy new stuff and spend more money on their product.

✓ It's like people always want you to buy new stuff and spend more money on their products.

Mismatch between plural 'people' and singular 'their product.' Use 'their products' to match plural possessors or rephrase to 'a product.'

× But I, I know they have, uh, reason why it exists because you can make the benefits and also make the things.

✓ But I know there is a reason they exist: advertising can show benefits and explain products.

Original has awkward structure and article errors ('reason' needs 'a' and 'it exists' mismatches plural 'they'). Also 'make the benefits and also make the things' is unclear; clarify to 'show benefits and explain products.' Fix subject-verb agreement and improve coherence.

× Uh, I'd like to add advertising with more interesting stories or creative way to express or showing up their products.

✓ I'd like ads with more interesting stories or creative ways to present their products.

Incorrect verb forms: 'creative way to express or showing up' mixes infinitive and gerund awkwardly. Use parallel nouns: 'creative ways to present.' 'Add advertising' is odd; 'I'd like ads' is natural.

× Let those kind of interesting, uh, movie or videos will raise my curiosities and maybe really will go to buy this stuff.

✓ Those kinds of interesting movies or videos will arouse my curiosity and might make me want to buy the product.

'Let' is unnecessary; use declarative form. 'Those kind' should be 'those kinds' (plural). 'Movies or videos' plural require plural agreement. 'Raise my curiosities' is unidiomatic; use 'arouse my curiosity.' Also rephrase 'maybe really will go to buy this stuff' to 'might make me want to buy the product.'

× Yes, 2 orphans.

✓ Yes, a lot.

'2 orphans' is nonsensical in context; likely the student meant 'a lot' or 'too often.' Replace with appropriate quantifier 'a lot.'

× I think right now everyone have their own portable devices and it's full of the advertisements.

✓ I think right now everyone has their own portable device and it's full of advertisements.

'Everyone' is singular and needs singular verb 'has.' 'Their' is acceptable as singular gender-neutral but match singular noun 'device' rather than plural 'devices' for clarity. 'Full of the advertisements' should be 'full of advertisements' (no definite article).

× I always think they are listening to us And then once as I say some some relevant stuff, that's all the ads on my Instagram or social medias are those products.

✓ I always think they are listening to us, and once I mention something relevant, the ads on my Instagram or social media show those products.

Capitalized 'And' mid-sentence is incorrect; use lowercase and comma. Remove duplicate 'some.' 'Once as I say' is ungrammatical; use 'once I mention.' 'Social medias' should be 'social media.' Reorder to natural clause flow and correct verb forms ('show' instead of 'are those products').