Advertisement— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details. Avoid filler and repetition, and correct tense and article use (e.g., "I don't remember the exact words"). Use a linking word when adding the detail.

Example: Yes. One advertisement that stuck with me as a child was for a medicine. I don’t remember the exact slogan, but it repeated a catchy jingle that everyone could sing along to, so it stayed in my head.

Suggestion: Give a clear direct answer and support it with one or two specific reasons. Fix grammar (say "the underground" or "on the subway") and avoid vague phrases like "good pay." Use linking words like "because" and complete the thought.

Example: Yes, I often see advertisements on the underground. I think it’s an effective place for ads because many people use public transport every day, so companies can reach a large audience.

Suggestion: Answer directly with correct grammar and give one or two specific reasons. Remove hesitations and repeated words. Use linking words such as "because" or "so" to connect your reason.

Example: To be honest, I don’t like most advertisements because they interrupt my activities and can be repetitive, which I find annoying.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence and then add a specific example and reason. Use correct phrasing (e.g., "instead of just putting a slogan") and linking words like "for example" to make it coherent.

Example: I prefer creative advertisements rather than ones that only show a slogan. For example, short, interesting videos or interactive ads catch my attention because they tell a story and are more engaging than static posters.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer, correct grammar and complete the final thought. Be specific about how ads appear (pop-ups, banners, etc.) and why they are intrusive. Use linking words to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I see ads on almost every app and website, such as banners and pop-ups. Many feel intrusive because they interrupt what I’m doing, and some even slow down my device or make web pages load more slowly.

× Absolutely yes there is. I but I didn't remember the exact word but I remember the advertisement is about a kind of medication and it kept repeating a slogan over and over. It's very catchy.

✓ Absolutely yes, there was. I don't remember the exact words, but I remember the advertisement was about a kind of medication and it kept repeating a slogan over and over. It was very catchy.

Pronoun and tense issues: 'I didn't remember' is incorrect for past memory; use 'I don't remember' for present lack of memory or use past continuous consistently. Also 'the advertisement is' should be past tense 'the advertisement was' because the speaker refers to a childhood ad. 'Exact word' should be plural 'exact words'. Ensure pronouns and tense agree and maintain past reference for events that happened in childhood.

× I usually see advertisements in underground. I think it is a good pay, good place to to have a advertise advertisement because they are.

✓ I usually see advertisements in the underground (or on the underground). I think it is a good place to advertise because they reach many people.

Preposition and word choice errors: Use 'in the underground' or 'on the underground' rather than 'in underground'. 'Good pay' is incorrect contextually; use 'good place to advertise'. Remove duplicate words and use 'reach many people' to complete the idea.

× And to be honest, I not really I don't like many frequent advertisement. I think they disrupt my my routine and it and sometimes I feel.

✓ To be honest, I don't really like frequent advertisements. I think they disrupt my routine and sometimes I feel annoyed.

Present tense and pronoun contraction: Use 'don't really like' instead of 'not really I don't like'. 'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' for general reference. Remove duplicated words and complete the clause 'sometimes I feel' with an adjective such as 'annoyed' to make the sentence grammatical.

× I like some interesting advertisements instead of only put their slogan on it. Like or some interesting short video is better than a poster.

✓ I like interesting advertisements instead of ones that only put their slogan on them. For example, interesting short videos are better than posters.

Verb form and pronoun agreement: Use a relative clause 'ones that only put' rather than 'only put their slogan on it'. Match plural 'videos are' with 'posters'. Use 'for example' to introduce an example and keep noun/pronoun agreement.

× Yes, I think advertisement is anywhere in every app I can see an advertisement. Some I think they I they feel they feel intrusive and sometimes make me first.

✓ Yes, I think advertisements are everywhere; in every app I can see ads. I think they often feel intrusive and sometimes make me frustrated.

Article and plurality: Use plural 'advertisements are everywhere' rather than singular 'advertisement is anywhere'. 'Ads' is a natural short form. Remove repeated words and replace 'make me first' with 'make me frustrated' or 'annoyed' to convey intended meaning. Ensure subject-verb agreement with plural noun.