Advertisement— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details. Avoid repetition and correct grammar (tense, articles). Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

Example: A clear answer: “Yes. When I was in eighth grade I remember a Coca‑Cola TV ad that really impressed me. It showed friends having fun together, and because the music and visuals were cheerful, I wanted to try it. That positive image stayed with me.”

Suggestion: Begin directly with your position, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles) and avoid redundant phrases like “also has also.”

Example: A clear answer: “Not really on trains. I see most ads on TV and social media such as Facebook, Instagram and TikTok. As digital technology grows, advertisers use different platforms to target people, so online ads are much more common now.”

Suggestion: Give a direct opinion sentence, then provide a specific reason and an example. Correct grammar and vocabulary (e.g., “give people information,” “distinguish,” “trustworthy”). Avoid vague claims and repetition.

Example: A clear answer: “Yes, I like some advertisements because they give people useful information about products. For example, a clear product demo helps me decide if a phone’s camera is good. However, I avoid ads that seem dishonest or misleading.”

Suggestion: Start with a topic sentence naming the type you prefer, then give one or two clear reasons or examples. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., “informative,” “promotional offers,” “credible”) and avoid repetition.

Example: A clear answer: “I prefer informative ads or those offering promotions. For instance, I like ads that give clear product details or a free sample because they let me try something before I buy, and they feel more trustworthy.”

Suggestion: Answer briefly then explain with a specific example and a reason. Correct grammar and word choice (e.g., “YouTube,” “pop up,” “disrupted my concentration”) and avoid informal words like “disgusted” unless clarified.

Example: A clear answer: “Yes, I often see ads on my phone. For example, YouTube videos usually have product ads that pop up before or during the video, and they disrupt my concentration when I am studying or watching something important.”

× Yes, when I was in 8th grade at the time I had seen advertisement about Coca-Cola in the while I was watching TV.

✓ Yes, when I was in 8th grade, I saw an advertisement for Coca-Cola while I was watching TV.

Singular/plural and article: 'advertisement' needs an article 'an' because it is a singular countable noun. 'in the while' is incorrect; use 'while'. Also past simple 'saw' is appropriate rather than past perfect 'had seen' because events are in simple past sequence. Use 'for Coca-Cola' to indicate the advertisement's subject. Suggestions: add 'an' before 'advertisement', replace 'had seen' with 'saw', remove 'in the', and use 'for'.

× So at that time I really wanted to try Coca-Cola and I wanted to feel how it tasted like.

✓ So at that time I really wanted to try Coca-Cola and to see how it tasted.

Redundant 'wanted' and incorrect ending 'tasted like'. Use parallel infinitive structure 'wanted to try... and to see...'. Also 'how it tasted' is correct; 'tasted like' is used for comparisons (e.g., 'tasted like chicken'). Suggestion: use parallel infinitives and remove 'like'.

× So it has impressed me, impressed all.

✓ So it impressed me; it left a strong impression on me.

'Has impressed me' (present perfect) is unnecessary when referring to a past childhood event; use simple past 'impressed'. 'Impressed all' is ungrammatical; use expressions like 'left a strong impression on me'. Suggestion: use simple past and clearer phrasing.

× Will rather than on trains or other transport, I see a lot of advertisement in the televisions or social media platforms like a Facebook, Instagram and Tiktok.

✓ Rather than on trains or other transport, I see a lot of advertisements on television or on social media platforms like Facebook, Instagram and TikTok.

Incorrect use of 'Will' at sentence start; 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' for general statement. Use 'on television' not 'in the televisions', and omit article before platform names. Capitalize 'TikTok'. Suggestion: remove 'Will', pluralize 'advertisement', use correct prepositions 'on television' and 'on social media'.

× So as the digital technology are emerging day by day, thus the ways of advertising is also has also been different from one platform to another platform.

✓ As digital technologies emerge day by day, the ways of advertising have also become different from one platform to another.

Subject-verb agreement and tense: 'digital technology are' incorrect—use plural 'technologies' with 'emerge' (present simple). 'The ways of advertising is also has also been' mixes forms; use 'have also become' (present perfect/simple present depending on meaning). Avoid repeating 'also' and redundant 'thus'. Remove repeated 'platform'. Suggestion: use correct subject-verb agreement and simpler tense.

× Yes, I like advertisement because it will give it will gives the people about the knowledge of the product or about the knowledge of the world.

✓ Yes, I like advertisements because they give people information about a product or about the world.

'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' for general statements. Remove duplicated verbs 'will give it will gives'. Use 'they give' for plural subject and 'information' is the correct noun instead of 'knowledge' in this context. 'the people' -> 'people'. Suggestion: use plural noun, correct verb form, and clearer noun choice.

× So people can district against what is right or what is wrong, which product is useful and which is not from the advertisement.

✓ So people can distinguish between what is right and what is wrong, and which product is useful and which is not from the advertisement.

Word choice error: 'district' should be 'distinguish'. Preposition use: 'distinguish between' is correct. Also add 'and' to connect clauses for clarity. Suggestion: replace 'district' with 'distinguish' and use 'between'.

× So a good advertisement and trusted.

✓ So a good advertisement is trustworthy.

Sentence lacks a verb and correct structure. 'and trusted' is grammatically incomplete. Use 'is trustworthy' to form a complete predicate. Suggestion: add a linking verb and use correct adjective.

× The advertisement with with gift or accurate information and which will provide the people some experience and meaningful knowledge, information and like those type of advertisement because nowadays many fake advertisement are emerging in the country so.

✓ I like advertisements that offer gifts or accurate information and that provide people with experience and meaningful knowledge, because nowadays many fake advertisements are appearing in the country.

Multiple errors: duplicate 'with with', noun forms and agreement ('advertisement' -> 'advertisements'), sentence run-on and missing prepositions ('provide people with'). Use 'appearing' or 'emerging' properly and remove trailing 'so'. Suggestion: simplify and break into clearer clauses, fix plural forms and prepositions.

× Yes, when I watch videos in YouTube, the advertisement of like products or different shows popped up suddenly in my YouTube.

✓ Yes, when I watch videos on YouTube, advertisements for products or different shows pop up suddenly on my YouTube.

Tense inconsistency: 'watch' is present but 'popped up' is past; use present 'pop up' for habitual action. Preposition: 'on YouTube' not 'in YouTube'. 'advertisement of like products' is incorrect—use 'advertisements for products'. Suggestion: maintain present tense for habitual actions and correct prepositions.

× So I feel really disgusted by that activities because I cannot concentrate on my orgo what I was doing.

✓ So I feel really annoyed by those activities because I cannot concentrate on what I was doing.

'That activities' should be 'those activities' (plural demonstrative). 'Disgusted' is strong and unnatural here; 'annoyed' is more appropriate. 'orgo' seems to be a typo—replace with 'work' or 'task'. Keep tense consistent: 'cannot concentrate on what I am doing' or 'what I was doing' depending on context; for present habit use 'what I am doing'. Suggestion: use correct demonstrative pronoun, choose appropriate emotion verb, fix typo, and keep tense consistent.