Advertisement— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct grammar and avoid redundancy. Add one or two specific details (what the ad showed and how it affected children) and a linking word to connect ideas.

Example: Yes. One ad from my childhood really stuck with me because it showed frightening, adult-oriented images of masked figures and flashing lights. As a result, many parents, including mine, complained to the broadcaster because they felt it was likely to scare young children. I remember schools discussing it the next week, which shows how widely it was noticed.

Suggestion: Good structure and relevant detail. Improve by correcting minor grammar (show→show/singular agreement) and adding a linking word to improve coherence. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and include a brief specific example of an ad type.

Example: Definitely. I notice many ads on public transport in every country I visit, especially in the underground. For example, digital screens run short video ads while station walls and carriage interiors display large posters, so advertising is hard to avoid.

Suggestion: Clear and concise response with reasons—good. Slightly improve cohesion by adding a linking word and a short contrast or qualifier. Use one specific example to illustrate intrusiveness.

Example: No, I don't like advertisements because they often interrupt YouTube videos and seem mainly designed to make money. For instance, mid-roll ads break the flow of a video, so many viewers skip them and the ads add little value to the viewing experience.

Suggestion: Improve grammar and sentence cohesion. Start with a clear topic sentence, then use linking words and complete sentences for supporting details. Avoid sentence fragments and be specific about what you like and why.

Example: Generally I don't like ads, but I prefer educational ones because they teach me something useful. For example, short videos about science or history catch my attention and often inspire me to learn more, so I find them more valuable than commercial ads.

Suggestion: Good content and specific examples. Improve by combining sentences for flow, fixing grammar (rely on), and using linking words for coherence. Keep it concise and natural.

Example: Yes, I see many ads on my phone and computer because companies rely on online advertising to earn money. For instance, video ads before YouTube clips and pop-up banners on news sites are very common and can be quite distracting.

× I remember it advertisement from my childhood that I found very inappropriate.

✓ I remember an advertisement from my childhood that I found very inappropriate.

The sentence uses the demonstrative 'it' incorrectly before 'advertisement' and lacks the appropriate indefinite article. Use 'an' before a singular countable noun starting with a vowel sound. Also remove the incorrect 'it'. Suggestion: Use 'an advertisement' or 'that advertisement' depending on emphasis.

× It used disturbing and provocative images that seemed aimed at adults and my parents were so worried they even filed A complaint with the broadcaster because they thought it might frighten young children.

✓ It used disturbing and provocative images that seemed aimed at adults, and my parents were so worried they even filed a complaint with the broadcaster because they thought it might frighten young children.

Sentence had capitalization error ('A complaint') and missing comma before the coordinating conjunction joining two independent clauses. Correct punctuation and lowercase 'a' improve readability. Suggestion: Use comma before 'and' when joining two independent clauses and keep common nouns lowercase.

× The underground is especially full of ads, including digital screens that shows short video ads and traditional paper posters on station walls and carriage interiors.

✓ The underground is especially full of ads, including digital screens that show short video ads and traditional paper posters on station walls and carriage interiors.

The relative clause 'that shows' refers to plural noun 'digital screens', so the verb should be the base form 'show' to agree with plural subject. Suggestion: Ensure verb agrees with the noun immediately before the relative pronoun.

× I find them intrusive and unnecessary, and many people usually skip or ignore them so they don't add value to the viewing experience.

✓ I find them intrusive and unnecessary, and many people usually skip or ignore them, so they don't add value to the viewing experience.

The sentence needs a comma before 'so' when connecting two clauses to clarify the result. This improves flow and prevents a run-on feel. Suggestion: Use punctuation to separate clauses that express cause and effect.

× I would definitely prefer educational as because they teach me something useful.

✓ I would definitely prefer educational ads because they teach me something useful.

The word 'as' is incorrect here and 'educational' needs to modify 'ads' (noun). Remove 'as' and add the noun 'ads'. Suggestion: Match adjectives with appropriate nouns: 'educational ads'.

× For instance, documentary trailers or short informative videos about science or history. Catch my attention, inspire me to learn more.

✓ For instance, documentary trailers or short informative videos about science or history catch my attention and inspire me to learn more.

Original has sentence fragments ('For instance...' and 'Catch my attention...') and incorrect punctuation. Combine into one complete sentence with a subject and verbs. Suggestion: Avoid sentence fragments by ensuring each sentence has a subject and a verb.

× I see a lot of advertisements when I use my phone or computer. Because companies rely online ads to earn money, they are much more common than in the past.

✓ I see a lot of advertisements when I use my phone or computer because companies rely on online ads to earn money, so they are much more common than in the past.

The second sentence begins with the subordinating conjunction 'Because' but was written as a separate sentence, creating a fragment. Also missing preposition 'on' after 'rely'. Combine into one sentence and add 'on'. Suggestion: Use 'rely on' and avoid starting a sentence with 'Because' unless followed by main clause.

× Because companies rely online ads to earn money, they are much more common than in the past.

✓ Because companies rely on online ads to earn money, they are much more common than in the past.

The verb 'rely' requires the preposition 'on' when indicating what is depended upon. Add 'on' after 'rely'. Suggestion: Learn verb+preposition collocations such as 'rely on'.

× For instance, I often see video ads before YouTube clips and banner pop up ads on news websites, which can be quite distracting.

✓ For instance, I often see video ads before YouTube clips and banner pop-up ads on news websites, which can be quite distracting.

The compound adjective 'pop-up' should be hyphenated when modifying 'ads'. Also this sentence is acceptable otherwise. Suggestion: Use hyphenation for compound modifiers: 'banner pop-up ads'.