Art— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Clarify vocabulary and stay on topic. The student confused “drawing” with “driving,” produced many grammatical errors, and gave an unclear, rambling response. To improve: 1) Use the correct keyword from the question (drawing) in your topic sentence. 2) Keep answers concise (1–3 clear sentences). 3) Use linking words (for example, when I was a child; recently) and provide specific examples (what you drew). 4) Correct basic grammar: past habits (“I used to draw”), present habits (“I enjoy drawing”), and simple explanations of why. Practice short rehearsed answers and record yourself to spot word choice errors.

Example: Yes, I like drawing. When I was a child I used to draw my favorite cartoon characters, and I still enjoy sketching them now. For example, last weekend I spent two hours drawing a character from a show I like.

Suggestion: Good basic response and relevant content, but language accuracy and conciseness need improvement. Fix grammar (plural/singular agreement: “galleries,” “my friends don’t”), remove fillers (“uh”), and avoid repetition. Use one or two linking words to add a reason or example (for example, because, so). Be specific about frequency or a recent visit to make the answer more vivid.

Example: Yes, I enjoy visiting art galleries. I try to visit every exhibition in my city, usually once a month, and I often go alone because my friends don’t really appreciate visual art.

Suggestion: Stay focused and use accurate vocabulary. Again “driving” should be “drawing.” Avoid long hesitations and redundant phrasing (“as I’ve said earlier,” “just”). Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I want to learn more), a reason, and a brief recent example. Use correct article use (“enrolled in an art club”) and tense consistency (“I stopped pursuing” / “I have recently expanded”).

Example: Yes, I would like to learn more about art. I stopped drawing for a while because of my studies, but recently I enrolled in an art club to improve my painting and drawing skills.

Suggestion: Provide a clearer, more concise account. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes, I was mostly self-taught), then give a specific detail or example (what you practiced and what you learned). Correct grammar: “I was mostly self-taught,” “I enrolled in an art club,” and avoid fillers. Use linking words (but, however, since) to show contrast and be specific about techniques learned (shading, perspective).

Example: Yes, I was mostly self-taught as a child. I practised drawing cartoon characters and simple landscapes, and recently, after enrolling in an art club, I learned techniques like shading and perspective to draw distant objects more realistically.

× Yes, I love driving.

✓ Yes, I love drawing.

The student used the pronoun 'driving' instead of the correct verb 'drawing' (a lexical choice error affecting meaning). Replace with 'drawing' to answer the question correctly and maintain coherence with the topic.

× I used to drive a lot of things like my favorite cartoon characters when I was a child.

✓ I used to draw many things, such as my favorite cartoon characters, when I was a child.

Sentence structure and word choice are incorrect: 'drive' is wrong and 'a lot of things like' is awkward. Use 'draw' and restructure with 'such as' to introduce examples. Also change 'a lot of things' to 'many things' for natural phrasing.

× But as I grow older I've expanded my driving experience for like making some issues on nature modes which drows which perceives a thing in the nature and you should copy and paste it on your.

✓ But as I grew older I've expanded my drawing experience, exploring natural subjects and trying to reproduce what I see in nature.

Tense and word choice errors: 'grow' should be 'grew' when contrasting past growth with present perfect 'I've expanded'. 'Driving' is wrong; use 'drawing'. The original sentence contains many unclear phrases ('making some issues on nature modes', 'drows', 'you should copy and paste it on your'). Replace with a clear description: 'exploring natural subjects and trying to reproduce what I see in nature.' Ensure tense consistency and clearer vocabulary.

× I actually, uh, try my best to go and look at the every galleries being held in my city.

✓ I actually try my best to go and see every gallery exhibition held in my city.

Tense and article use: 'try' is acceptable present simple for habitual action. Remove extra article 'the' before 'every galleries' and correct plural agreement: 'every gallery exhibition' or 'every gallery'. Use 'see' instead of 'look at' for natural collocation. Change 'galleries' to singular 'gallery exhibition' or keep plural 'galleries' with 'every' requires singular, so corrected to 'every gallery exhibition'.

× And I usually go there alone because most of my friends doesn't really appreciate, most of my friends don't really appreciate some visual arts.

✓ And I usually go there alone because most of my friends don't really appreciate visual art.

Subject-verb agreement: 'friends' is plural, so use 'don't' not 'doesn't'. The original repeats the clause; remove redundancy and use 'visual art' (uncountable) instead of 'some visual arts' for natural phrasing.

× Yeah, umm, when I was a child I really enjoyed driving, as I've said earlier, but I've just stopped, uh, chasing my artistic dreams due to my studies.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I really enjoyed drawing, as I said earlier, but I stopped pursuing my artistic dreams because of my studies.

Tense and verb choice: Use past simple 'said' (or 'have said' is possible but 'said' is clearer) and 'stopped pursuing' is the correct collocation. Replace 'driving' with 'drawing'. 'Due to my studies' is acceptable but 'because of my studies' is more natural here. Avoid 'I've just stopped' when referring to a past interruption long ago.

× But recently I expanded my, uh, knowledge on arts and just enrolled a art club.

✓ But recently I expanded my knowledge of art and just enrolled in an art club.

Article and preposition errors: Use 'knowledge of art' (not 'on arts'). Use the article 'an' before 'art club' and the preposition 'enrolled in' rather than 'enrolled a'.

× Umm, yeah, but it's more likely to say that I, it's just self-taught.

✓ Um, yes, but it is more accurate to say that I'm self-taught.

Verb form and sentence structure: 'it's just self-taught' is incorrect because 'self-taught' describes the subject 'I'. Use contraction 'I'm' or 'I am' + adjective 'self-taught'. 'More likely to say' is awkward; 'more accurate to say' is clearer.

× And as I said earlier, I've just enrolled a art club and I learned a lot of things about uh, art, like how to draw, draw or paint the, uh, objects in the, in the far.

✓ And as I said earlier, I joined an art club and learned a lot about art, like how to draw or paint objects in the distance.

Article and verb tense: Use 'joined an art club' or 'enrolled in an art club' (include 'in' and 'an'). Use past simple 'learned' for completed past actions. Remove duplicate 'draw, draw' and correct 'in the far' to 'in the distance'. Also simplify 'a lot of things about art' to 'a lot about art' for natural phrasing.