Art— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời tự nhiên và rõ ràng nhưng nên rút ngắn để tránh dài dòng, dùng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng rồi thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể. Nên dùng từ vựng phong phú hơn (ví dụ: sketching landscapes rather than “landscape”), và kết hợp liên từ phù hợp để mạch lạc. Tránh lặp ý (“relax” và “calm and happy” có thể gộp).

Example: Yes, I enjoy drawing because it helps me relax after a long day. For example, I often sketch landscapes and wildlife, which helps me unwind and feel more peaceful.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời trả lời trực tiếp nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp và lặp từ, cấu trúc thiếu mạch lạc. Nên mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề ngắn, sửa lỗi collocation (“find it relaxing”), tránh lặp (“seeing seeing”), và nêu một hoặc hai ví dụ cụ thể về triển lãm hoặc tác phẩm. Sử dụng liên từ đơn giản để kết nối ý.

Example: Yes, I do. I find visiting galleries relaxing because I can view beautiful works by famous artists. For instance, I enjoy exhibitions that feature historical paintings or international contemporary art.

Suggestion: Ý chính rõ nhưng câu cuối bị bỏ lửng và có lỗi nhỏ (“help me my future career”). Nên dùng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó nêu lý do ngắn gọn và kết thúc bằng ví dụ cụ thể. Tránh để câu không hoàn chỉnh; kết hợp liên từ như “but” hoặc “however” đúng vị trí.

Example: Not really — I prefer to focus on academic subjects that will help my future career. However, I do keep drawing as a hobby; for example, I sometimes make simple sketches in the evening to relax.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác (“When I were a kid”, “had we helped me”, “portions and compulsions”, “draw casual”). Cần sửa ngữ pháp ở thì quá khứ, dùng từ đúng (rules → principles, proportions, composition), nối các ý thành câu hoàn chỉnh và đưa ví dụ cụ thể về kỹ năng bạn vẫn dùng. Giữ tối đa 3-4 câu.

Example: When I was a child, I learned to draw at primary school from my art teacher. She taught me basic shapes, proportions and composition, which helped me develop simple techniques. I still use those skills when I sketch for fun.

× Yes I do, drawing helps me relax and reduce stress after a long day of studying and I enjoy sketching landscape and wildlife.

✓ Yes, I do. Drawing helps me relax and reduce stress after a long day of studying, and I enjoy sketching landscapes and wildlife.

The sentence needs commas and plural form 'landscapes' to match general activity. Also split into two sentences or join with a comma and conjunction to avoid run-on. Use plural for countable nouns when speaking generally. Suggestions: add commas after introductory yes and before conjunction, and change 'landscape' to 'landscapes'.

× It makes me feel calm and happy.

✓ It makes me feel calm and happy.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Keep adjective order 'calm and happy'.

× Absolutely yes. I enjoy going to galleries because there are many beautiful paintings and artworks by famous artists and I find it very like relaxing.

✓ Absolutely, yes. I enjoy going to galleries because there are many beautiful paintings and artworks by famous artists, and I find it very relaxing.

Remove 'like' which is unnecessary and incorrect here. Use comma before conjunction to separate clauses. 'Very relaxing' correctly modifies the experience. Suggestion: delete 'like' and add comma.

× I also like seeing seeing historical paintings and entertain international exhibition.

✓ I also like seeing historical paintings and visiting international exhibitions.

Double 'seeing' is a repetition error. 'Entertain international exhibition' is ungrammatical; use 'visit' for attending exhibitions and plural 'exhibitions' or add article. Suggestion: remove duplicate word, change verb to 'visiting' and pluralize 'exhibitions'.

× I don't really want to study more art because I prefer to focus on academic subjects that will help me my future career.

✓ I don't really want to study more art because I prefer to focus on academic subjects that will help my future career.

Remove extra pronoun 'me' which makes the phrase incorrect. The correct possessive is 'my future career'. Suggestion: delete 'me'.

× However, I sometimes enjoy making simple drawings as a hobby after a long day of studying to relax and.

✓ However, I sometimes enjoy making simple drawings as a hobby after a long day of studying to relax.

Sentence ends with dangling conjunction 'and' causing incompleteness. Remove the trailing 'and' to complete the sentence. Suggestion: finish the list or remove 'and'.

× When I were a kid, I learned to draw at primary school from my art teacher.

✓ When I was a kid, I learned to draw in primary school from my art teacher.

Use 'was' for first-person singular in past tense (subject-verb agreement). Also use preposition 'in' with 'primary school' rather than 'at' is acceptable but 'in' is more natural here. Suggestion: change 'were' to 'was' and use 'in'.

× She taught me basic shapes and simple techniques had we helped me understand rules, portions and compulsions.

✓ She taught me basic shapes and simple techniques that helped me understand rules, proportions, and compositions.

Original contains incorrect clause 'had we helped me' and wrong nouns 'portions' and 'compulsions'. Use relative pronoun 'that' and past tense 'helped'. Correct nouns are 'proportions' and 'compositions' in art. Suggestion: replace clause, use correct vocabulary and commas.

× Composition. I still use those skills when I draw casual.

✓ I still use those skills in composition when I draw casually.

Single word 'Composition.' fragments the sentence; combine into full sentence. Use adverb 'casually' not adjective 'casual' to modify 'draw'. Place 'in composition' to show context. Suggestion: merge fragments and change to adverb form.