Art— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, um), correct grammar (e.g. "isn't that simple" → "isn't easy"), and give one brief supporting detail. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Example: To be honest, I prefer looking at other people's art rather than drawing myself because I’m not very confident with my technique. However, I still appreciate and learn from studying different styles and compositions.

Suggestion: Reduce hesitation and redundancy: use linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so') and avoid repeating similar phrases. Make the reason specific (what inspires you, how it helps your creativity). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, visiting galleries is one of my favorite pastimes because seeing different artworks broadens my taste and inspires new ideas. For example, a recent exhibition gave me ideas for color combinations I later tried in my own sketches.

Suggestion: Make the answer direct and grammatically accurate: begin with a clear statement, correct phrasing (e.g. 'bachelor's degree'), and add one specific reason or goal. Keep it concise and avoid awkward connectors like 'as even currently'.

Example: Yes, I do. I’m planning to apply to several leading art schools in Europe for my bachelor’s degree because I want to study art history and develop my practical skills under experienced tutors.

Suggestion: Clarify and correct grammar and vocabulary: use a clear past description, avoid incorrect phrases ('I still can', 'reminisce remedies some of the bulletin moments'). Give one concrete memory or example. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, we had a dedicated art class in primary school, and I remember spending hours making paintings and collages. I especially recall a project where we painted landscapes, which made school a very creative and enjoyable place.

× Uh, honestly, I usually enjoy observing uh, other people's art rather than creating something by myself because drawing for me, uh, isn't that simple as I'm a little bit clumsy.

✓ Uh, honestly, I usually enjoy observing other people's art rather than creating something myself, because drawing, for me, isn't that simple since I'm a little clumsy.

Use of 'by myself' is acceptable but 'something myself' is more natural; replace 'as' with 'since' to show reason. Also remove filler 'uh' and extra commas for clarity. Use 'a little clumsy' without 'bit' is optional but keep 'a little clumsy' or 'a bit clumsy'. Suggestions: remove unnecessary fillers, use 'myself' after 'something', and use 'since' or 'because' to introduce reasons.

× Yes, that's one of my favorite pastimes ever cause visiting, uh, various galleries can, uh, fulfill my aesthetic needs.

✓ Yes, that's one of my favorite pastimes because visiting various galleries can fulfill my aesthetic needs.

Use 'because' for formal writing/speaking instead of informal 'cause'. Remove filler 'uh' and extra commas. 'Ever' is unnecessary and awkward after 'favorite pastimes'. Suggestions: use 'because', omit fillers, and avoid redundant words like 'ever'.

× And by going there I usually get really inspired and afterwards can create something, some piece of art.

✓ By going there I usually get really inspired and can later create a piece of art.

Original has awkward word order and redundancy ('afterwards can create something, some piece of art'). Place auxiliary 'can' before verb and use 'later' or 'afterwards' in proper position. Remove duplicate words. Suggestions: use clear sequence 'get inspired and can later create a piece of art'.

× Yes, actually, as even currently I'm planning to apply to some of the biggest art schools in Europe for my bachelors degree and I think that's a great chance to explore the history of art and this field.

✓ Yes, actually, I'm currently planning to apply to some of the biggest art schools in Europe for my bachelor's degree, and I think that's a great chance to explore the history of art and the field.

Use present continuous 'I'm currently planning' without 'even' which is awkward. Add apostrophe in 'bachelor's'. Use 'the field' rather than 'this field' for natural reference. Punctuation: add comma before conjunction joining clauses. Suggestions: use 'currently' with present continuous, correct possessive form 'bachelor's degree', and use 'the field' for clarity.

× Yes, back in my primary school we had a special subject for this, and I still can.

✓ Yes, back in primary school we had a special subject for this, and I still can.

Remove article 'my' before 'primary school' (both are possible; 'primary school' is idiomatic without 'my' but 'my primary school' is also acceptable — here original is slightly odd with later clause). However 'and I still can' is incomplete; it needs an object or clearer verb: 'and I still can draw' or 'and I still remember it.' Suggestions: complete the clause: 'and I still can draw' or 'and I still remember it'.

× I still sometimes reminisce remedies some of the bulletin moments from there because it was such an incredible place to create your own art and I still miss.

✓ I still sometimes reminisce about some of the memorable moments from there because it was such an incredible place to create your own art, and I still miss it.

Original contains incorrect words 'reminisce remedies' and 'bulletin moments' which are wrong collocations. Use 'reminisce about' and 'memorable moments'. Add object 'it' after 'miss'. Use commas and conjunctions to join clauses properly. Suggestions: replace incorrect words with correct collocations, use 'reminisce about', 'memorable moments', and include the object after 'miss'.