Art— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations and unclear words (e.g. 'do drink' is confusing), and limit to three to four sentences. Add one specific example of what you draw and how it helps you relax, using linking words (for example, 'so' or 'therefore').

Example: Yes, I enjoy drawing, especially in the evenings. As a healthcare practitioner I do many repetitive tasks, so drawing helps me relax and regain mental energy. For example, I often sketch simple nature scenes for 30 minutes after work, which makes me feel more optimistic and less stressed.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with one or two specific reasons using linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so'). Avoid filler words and grammar errors (e.g. 'I have get chance' → 'I only have a chance'). Mention any exception if applicable. Keep to three sentences maximum.

Example: Not really — I find galleries uninteresting because the local ones I visit are poorly managed and rarely display work that inspires me. Because I only have access to small local galleries, I don't see the variety of art I enjoy. However, I would like to visit a major city gallery if I had the chance.

Suggestion: Start with a direct answer, then explain with specific details and correct grammar. Use linking words such as 'but', 'so', and 'therefore' correctly. Be specific about how you participate (e.g. 'I attend with them' or 'I help with assignments') and finish the thought in one or two supporting sentences.

Example: I don't have time for formal art classes, but I encourage my children to study art and support them actively. For example, I enroll them in online classes and join their sessions once a week to practice together, which helps me refresh my own skills and bond with them.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence, then add specific, accurate details and correct word choice (e.g. 'subject' not 'subjective'; 'rules and techniques' rather than 'role and regulation'). Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas. Keep it concise and avoid exaggerated claims.

Example: Yes, I started drawing in third grade and my teacher was excellent. She taught me rules and techniques clearly, so I improved quickly and learned to draw landscapes and birds well. Because of that early training, I still enjoy sketching nature today.

× Yes, I enjoyed drawing, especially in the evening hour.

✓ Yes, I enjoy drawing, especially in the evening hours.

The question asks about a current habit (Do you like drawing?), so present simple 'enjoy' should be used rather than past 'enjoyed'. Also 'hour' should be plural 'hours' for general times of day. Use: 'I enjoy drawing, especially in the evening hours.' Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual actions and pluralize time expressions when speaking generally.

× Uh, being a healthcare practitioner, uh, my task involved many repetitive activities and I feel my energy is drained.

✓ Being a healthcare practitioner, my tasks involve many repetitive activities and I feel my energy is drained.

Mixes past 'involved' with present context. The speaker is describing current duties, so use present 'involve'. Also 'task' should be plural 'tasks' to match 'many'. Keep present tense throughout. Suggestion: Keep verb tenses consistent and match number (singular/plural) with count words.

× So to unwind from stress and feel mentally alert, I do drink, which is my hobby too and it makes me more optimistic and enthusiastic.

✓ So to unwind from stress and feel mentally alert, I drink as a hobby; it makes me more optimistic and enthusiastic.

'Do drink' is unnecessary emphatic and sounds unnatural; simple present 'I drink' is correct. Also 'which is my hobby too' is awkward; rephrase for clarity. Use a semicolon or separate clauses. Suggestion: Use simple present for habits and avoid unnecessary auxiliary 'do' unless making emphasis.

× I really don't enjoy exploring the gallery, I feel the place umm, boring and uh, uh, uninspiring because uh, I have get chance only to visit a local galleries which are not managed well by the local authority, uh, because I don't see that kind of artwork.

✓ I really don't enjoy exploring galleries; I find the places boring and uninspiring because I only get a chance to visit local galleries that are not well managed by the local authority, so I don't see that kind of artwork.

Multiple issues: use present simple 'don't enjoy' and 'find' (not 'feel' for boring). 'I have get chance' is incorrect—use 'I only get a chance'. 'A local galleries' mixes article and plural; use 'local galleries' or 'a local gallery'. 'Which are not managed well' should be 'that are not well managed' for restrictive clause. Keep tense and number consistent. Suggestion: Simplify sentences, correct article-number agreement, and use appropriate relative pronoun and word order.

× I hardly have time to take any classes on art, but I am really encourage my kids to learn more about art.

✓ I hardly have time to take any art classes, but I really encourage my kids to learn more about art.

'Am really encourage' is incorrect auxiliary/verb form. Use simple present 'encourage' for habitual action. Also 'classes on art' is more naturally 'art classes'. Suggestion: Use base verb form after adverbs of frequency for habitual actions: 'I really encourage'.

× That's why I help them to join some online classes and I also take part in the activity so that I can feel them that we are learning together and enjoying together.

✓ That's why I help them join some online classes and I also take part in the activities so that they can feel that we are learning and enjoying together.

'Help them to join' can be 'help them join' (omit 'to'). 'Take part in the activity' -> plural 'activities' if referring to classes. 'So that I can feel them' is incorrect pronoun and intention; should be 'so that they can feel' or 'so they feel'. Remove repeated 'together'. Suggestion: Use correct pronouns and verb patterns with 'help', and make subjects clear.

× This not only help me to strengthen.

✓ This not only helps me to strengthen.

Missing auxiliary and subject-verb agreement: 'This' singular requires 'helps' (third person singular). Also sentence is incomplete—'to strengthen' what? Likely 'my skills' or 'my bond with them'. Provide the object. Suggestion: Ensure subject-verb agreement and complete the idea: 'This not only helps me strengthen my skills'.

× Yes, the drawing subjective was introduced to me at third grade and my teacher was excellent.

✓ Yes, drawing as a subject was introduced to me in third grade and my teacher was excellent.

'Drawing subjective' is incorrect word choice; use 'drawing as a subject'. Use preposition 'in third grade' not 'at third grade'. Past tense 'was introduced' is fine for a past event. Suggestion: Use correct noun phrases and prepositions for school grades.

× She taught me many role and regulation and all other details clear and concisely.

✓ She taught me many rules and regulations and explained all other details clearly and concisely.

'Role' should be 'rules' and 'regulation' should be plural 'regulations'. Adverb placement: 'clear and concisely' is incorrect; use 'clearly and concisely' and include verb 'explained'. Suggestion: Use correct plural nouns and adverbs; place adverbs after the verb when modifying it.

× So I mastered this skill at very early age.

✓ So I mastered this skill at a very early age.

Missing article 'a' before 'very early age'. Past tense 'mastered' is appropriate for a completed past achievement. Suggestion: Include required articles with expressions of age: 'at a very early age'.

× I could draw many natural scenes as well as birds and I was applauded by all.

✓ I could draw many natural scenes as well as birds, and I was applauded by everyone.

'By all' is unnatural; use 'by everyone'. Comma added for sentence flow. Past modal 'could' and passive 'was applauded' are acceptable to describe past ability and reaction. Suggestion: Use natural expressions like 'everyone' and appropriate punctuation.