Art— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce fillers (“uh”) and avoid incomplete endings. Also correct minor grammar (e.g., “love going” → “love drawing”; “it's really creative activity” → “it’s a really creative activity”).

Example: Yes, I love drawing. I used to draw a lot at school, and although I don't draw very often now, I sometimes sketch to refresh my mind because it’s a relaxing and creative way to unwind.

Suggestion: Give a concise topic sentence and then add specific details in a logical order using linking words. Remove fillers and fix article/noun agreement (“a art gallery” → “an art gallery”) and tense consistency. Use one or two clear supporting comments about why galleries appeal to you.

Example: Yes, I enjoy visiting galleries. In fact, my graduation was held in an art gallery, and when I first visited it beforehand I was impressed by the beautiful space, which inspired me and motivated my artistic interests.

Suggestion: Answer directly then explain with specific reasons and examples. Avoid repeating phrases and be careful with phrasing (e.g., “complex art structures” → “highly abstract works”). Use linking words (however, because) to show contrast between what you like and dislike.

Example: Yes, I would like to learn more about art; however, I prefer simpler, more representational works because I find highly abstract pieces difficult to interpret. For example, I enjoy studying watercolor landscapes since their techniques and emotions are easier for me to understand.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence then one or two specific supporting details. Remove fillers and correct phrasing (“teacher used to teach us how to draw simple characters and paint them”). Add a brief example of how you developed your style to make it more specific.

Example: Yes, I learned drawing at school where our teacher showed us how to draw and paint simple characters. Later, I developed my own ideas by copying illustrations from books and observing people and nature for inspiration.

× Yes, I definitely love going.

✓ Yes, I definitely love drawing.

The verb 'love' is followed by a gerund when referring to activities, but 'going' is incorrect here because the question asked about drawing. Replace 'going' with the gerund 'drawing' to accurately express the activity. Suggestion: Use the gerund form of the activity word that matches the question (love + drawing).

× I used to draw a lot when I was in school.

✓ I used to draw a lot when I was in school.

This sentence is correct. 'Used to' correctly expresses a past habitual action. No change needed.

× Uh, currently I don't draw frequently, but I often, uh, draw to refresh my mind and it's really creative activity to do and it brings a calmness and.

✓ Currently I don't draw frequently, but I often draw to refresh my mind; it's a really creative activity and it brings calmness.

Problems: unnecessary filler words removed and punctuation fixed. 'It's really creative activity' lacks an article; add 'a'. 'Brings a calmness' is awkward; 'brings calmness' is more natural. Also remove trailing conjunction. Suggestions: Use correct articles before singular countable nouns and avoid sentence fragments; join related clauses with a semicolon or conjunction. Grammar issues covered: present tense clarity and article use.

× Yes, I do love to go to the gallery.

✓ Yes, I do love going to the gallery.

After 'love' both 'to + verb' and gerund are possible, but when talking about enjoyment of repeated activity, the gerund 'going' is more natural. Suggestion: Use 'going' for activities enjoyed in general.

× Uh, so, uh, my graduation was in a art gallery and the first time I visited art gallery was uh, before the, before my graduation to look around the place I'm graduating and it was such a stunning place.

✓ My graduation was in an art gallery, and the first time I visited the art gallery was before my graduation to look around the place where I would graduate; it was such a stunning place.

Errors: 'a art gallery' needs 'an' before a vowel sound. 'Visited art gallery' requires the definite article 'the'. 'The place I'm graduating' is awkward; use 'the place where I would graduate' or 'where I was going to graduate' to match past context. Also restructure sentence for clarity and tense consistency. Suggestion: Use correct articles and clearer relative clauses.

× It, uh, motivates and give inspiration a lot.

✓ It motivated me and gave me a lot of inspiration.

Tense inconsistency and subject-verb agreement: the earlier context is past (visited), so use past tense 'motivated' and 'gave'. 'Give' must agree with singular subject in past form 'gave'. Also add object 'me' to clarify who was inspired. Suggestion: Match verbs to the narrative past tense.

× Yes I would love to learn more about art but I don't like the complex arts like I can't understand their emotions and the complex art structures.

✓ Yes, I would love to learn more about art, but I don't like complex artworks because I can't understand their emotions and complex structures.

Stylistic and grammatical improvements: 'the complex arts' is unnatural; use 'complex artworks'. 'Like' used to list reason should be 'because'. Remove redundant 'the' before 'complex art structures'. Suggestion: Use 'because' for explanation and choose appropriate noun 'artworks'.

× But yes I do love simple and creative arts which I can easily understand so I would definitely love to learn more about.

✓ But yes, I do love simple and creative artworks that I can easily understand, so I would definitely love to learn more about them.

Use 'artworks' or 'art' instead of 'arts' for specific pieces. Relative clause 'which I can easily understand' is fine but 'that' is more natural here. 'Learn more about' needs an object—add 'them'. Suggestion: Ensure verbs have appropriate objects and choose correct noun forms.

× Yes, in school, uh, we had drawing classes and uh, teacher used to teach us, uh, how to draw a simple, a simple character, how to paint it.

✓ Yes, at school we had drawing classes and the teacher used to teach us how to draw a simple character and how to paint it.

Use 'at school' (more natural) and include the definite article 'the' before 'teacher'. Remove duplicated 'a simple'. Keep parallel structure 'how to draw ... and how to paint ...'. Suggestion: Use definite articles where appropriate and avoid repetition.

× And so I basically learned from school and then I developed my idea from uh, taking inspiration from outside.

✓ So I basically learned at school, and then I developed my ideas by taking inspiration from outside.

Use 'at school' for location. 'Idea' should be plural 'ideas' if referring to multiple concepts; keep consistent. 'Developed my idea from taking inspiration' is awkward—use 'developed my ideas by taking inspiration'. Suggestion: Use correct prepositions ('at') and natural verb patterns ('developed... by').