Dreams— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammatical accuracy, coherence and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct pronoun use, and concise supporting detail. Use linking words like "however" or "although" to show contrast, and avoid repetition.

Example: Yes, I can. My main dream is to move to the United States and work on Wall Street. Although it will be difficult, I am determined to improve my finance skills and gain relevant experience. If I work hard and network effectively, I believe I can achieve this goal.

Suggestion: Make the response direct and grammatical. Give a clear reason and one or two specific supporting details rather than vague phrases. Use linking words like "because" and "so" correctly and avoid unrelated adjectives.

Example: No, I usually do not share my dreams with others because I prefer to work quietly toward my goals. For example, I focus on studying and gaining practical experience rather than discussing plans. However, I sometimes ask close family for advice when I need support.

Suggestion: Answer the question directly with a clear opinion and explain why. Avoid filler words and unclear expressions. Provide a specific example or reason to support your view, and use a linking phrase such as "for example" or "because".

Example: Yes, I think dreams can have special meanings because they often reflect our hopes and fears. For example, dreaming about exams might show anxiety about performance. In my view, interpreting dreams can help people understand their feelings and set goals.

Suggestion: Give a focused, grammatical answer with a clear plan or motivation. Use linking words like "because" and "so" to explain reasons and include specific, realistic steps. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms.

Example: Absolutely. I want to make my dreams come true because I want to support my family and start my own business. To achieve this, I plan to study business administration, save money, and gain work experience in a company first. With persistence and careful planning, I hope to succeed.

× I have a big dream, but he is not easy.

✓ I have a big dream, but it is not easy.

The pronoun 'he' refers to a person; the sentence needs the neutral pronoun 'it' to refer to 'dream'. This is a sentence structure and pronoun use error. Use 'it' for things or ideas: 'it is not easy.'

× So I aspire to live in United States and work in Wall Street.

✓ So I aspire to live in the United States and work on Wall Street.

Use the definite article with country names that require it ('the United States'), and use the preposition 'on' with 'Wall Street' when referring to working in that financial district. This fixes preposition and article use.

× I can do it.

✓ I can do it.

This sentence is grammatically correct in present ability modal form; no change needed. Included for completeness: no tense correction required.

× No, I don't share my dream with other because I believe in if you keep your dream you can do it.

✓ No, I don't share my dream with others because I believe that if you keep your dream to yourself, you can achieve it.

Use plural 'others' rather than 'other' to mean other people. Add 'that' to introduce the clause and 'to yourself' clarifies keeping it private. Replace 'do it' with 'achieve it' for clarity and correctness. This fixes pronoun, conjunction/structure, and word choice.

× So I believe in a successful person.

✓ So I believe in becoming a successful person.

The original is unclear: 'believe in a successful person' suggests belief in an external person. To express a personal goal, use 'believe in becoming a successful person.' This corrects sentence structure and meaning.

× Always driven by wisdom, intelligence, external work and relaxing live outside.

✓ I am always driven by wisdom and intelligence; I enjoy external work and relaxing outdoors.

Grammatical problems: missing subject and verb, incorrect noun form 'relaxing live outside'. 'Outdoors' is the correct adverbial noun, and 'external work' was clarified as 'work outside' or 'external work' with context. Added subject 'I am' to form a complete sentence and corrected word forms.

× Absolutely any, any person can find a good dream.

✓ Absolutely, anyone can find a meaningful dream.

Use 'anyone' rather than 'any, any person' for natural English. 'Good dream' is vague; 'meaningful dream' is clearer. This fixes word choice and sentence structure.

× Uh, I believe in this advice.

✓ I believe in that advice.

Use 'that' rather than 'this' to refer back to a previously mentioned proverb; both can be correct but 'that advice' is more natural after quoting a saying. This adjusts demonstrative usage and sentence flow.

× Uh, if you don't, uh, pin again, no pain, no gain.

✓ If you don't try again, remember: no pain, no gain.

'Pin again' is incorrect; likely intended 'try again.' Added 'remember:' to introduce the proverb. This corrects word choice and clarifies sentence structure.

× You need to help my family and build my own business.

✓ I need to help my family and build my own business.

Subject is 'I' not 'you'; using 'you need' changes meaning. Correct the subject to match speaker's intention. This fixes subject-verb/modal reference.

× When I was young, I wanted to build my own business and determined it too successful.

✓ When I was young, I wanted to build my own business and was determined to make it successful.

Use 'was determined to make it successful' rather than 'determined it too successful.' The original misused 'determined' and 'too.' This corrects verb structure and infinitive use and clarifies meaning.