Dreams— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cải thiện cấu trúc và rõ ràng: trả lời trực tiếp, dùng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và tiếng ồn (uh, umm). Mô tả chi tiết cụ thể hơn về giấc mơ (ví dụ: muốn trở thành giáo viên, dạy môn gì, vì sao). Sử dụng liên từ đơn giản để nối ý (because, so, and).

Example: Yes, I can. As a child I dreamed of becoming a teacher because I admired my teachers and wanted to help others learn. For example, I imagined teaching young children in a small classroom, which made me feel proud and motivated.

Suggestion: Làm rõ thời gian và lý do: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn (Yes, I often share my dreams). Tránh lặp từ và âm thanh ngắt quãng, nêu rõ với ai, khi nào và tại sao (ví dụ: với mẹ khi cần lời khuyên). Dùng liên từ để nối lý do (because, so).

Example: Yes, I often share my dreams with my mother because she supports me and gives practical advice. For instance, when I told her I wanted to study teaching, she encouraged me to take a teaching course and helped me find resources.

Suggestion: Làm rõ ý chính và dùng từ chính xác: tránh từ không rõ nghĩa ('the singer'). Trả lời trực tiếp, giải thích quan điểm với ví dụ cụ thể hoặc lý do. Sử dụng cấu trúc hợp lý: topic sentence + supporting detail. Tránh nhiều ngập ngừng và dùng từ phù hợp (meaningful, connected, inspired).

Example: Yes, I believe dreams can have special meanings because they often reflect our feelings or desires. For example, dreaming of meeting people I admire makes me feel inspired and more confident about pursuing my goals.

Suggestion: Mở rộng câu với lý do và kế hoạch cụ thể: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn, sau đó nêu lý do tại sao và một hoặc hai bước bạn đang làm để biến giấc mơ thành hiện thực. Giữ dài không quá 5 câu và dùng liên từ để nối ý.

Example: Yes, I do. I always want to make my dreams come true because they give my life direction. For example, I am studying education and practicing speaking in front of people so I can become a confident teacher in the future.

× I remember that when I was child.

✓ I remember that when I was a child.

The noun 'child' requires the article 'a' when referring to one child in this context; this is an article/singular noun usage tied to present recollection. Use 'a child' for correctness and clarity.

× I, I have dreams uh like sister, uh, like umm teacher, because I see it is very powerful and I wanna teach everyone.

✓ I used to have dreams about being a sister or a teacher, because I saw they were very powerful and I wanted to teach everyone.

The original mixes tenses and incorrect verb forms. 'Have dreams' about something should be 'have dreams about' or 'used to have dreams about'. To express past habitual dreams, use 'used to' or past tense. 'Like sister' should be 'about being a sister' and verbs describing past feelings should be past tense ('saw', 'wanted'). Also 'they' agrees with plural 'dreams'. Suggestion: choose consistent tense and use 'about' + noun or 'about being' + role.

× Yes I do, when I was trying I always share share my dream with my mom because umm I want to say about my dream with other people I feel comfortable.

✓ Yes I do. When I was young I always shared my dreams with my mom because talking about my dreams with other people made me feel comfortable.

The sentence mixes tenses and repeats words. Use past tense 'shared' for past habit. 'When I was trying' is incorrect; likely 'when I was young'. Use 'talking about' instead of 'want to say about'. Maintain consistent past tense for past habits and use singular/plural agreement ('dreams'). Suggestion: avoid repeating words and keep tense consistent.

× Yes, I do. I think that, uh, the singer is have special meaning with other peoples who can attach, meet with other people.

✓ Yes, I do. I think that the dream of being a singer has a special meaning related to meeting or connecting with other people.

The original uses 'singer' and 'is have' incorrectly; 'has' is needed. 'Other peoples' should be 'other people'. 'Attach' is wrong in this context; use 'connect' or 'meet'. Also clarify that it's the dream that has meaning. Suggestion: use correct verb 'has' with singular noun and choose appropriate verbs like 'connect'.

× It's make me, uh, it's make me feel comfortable and awake and powerful with my life.

✓ It made me feel comfortable, awake, and powerful in my life.

Wrong verb form 'make' should be past 'made' to match previous past context. Repetition 'it's make me' is incorrect. Use parallel structure for adjectives and preposition 'in my life' rather than 'with my life'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use proper prepositions.

× Yes I do. I always want to make my dreams come true.

✓ Yes, I do. I always want to make my dreams come true.

This sentence is acceptable as is. It correctly uses present tense to express a current desire. No grammatical correction needed.