Relax— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct tense and articles, avoid awkward words like "salt trees" (if you mean a specific tree name say it) and "profound" in this context. Use linking words to connect details (e.g., "because", "so", "also") but keep sentences shorter and precise. Add one specific sensory detail to make the answer vivid.

Example: Lately I relax in my backyard because I designed it to suit my needs. It has several mature trees about 10–15 years old, and I like sitting in their shade to read or have a cup of tea. I’ve even hung a swing from one branch, which my children love, so it’s a pleasant place for the whole family to unwind.

Suggestion: Make your topic sentence direct and fix grammar (tenses, articles, plural/singular). Replace vague or awkward words like "rapid task" and "profoundly" with clearer phrases. Use one linking phrase (e.g., "because"/"so") and give a specific example of an activity to illustrate how your family relaxes together.

Example: I usually relax with my family because my job in healthcare is stressful and drains my energy. For example, we often sit together after dinner and chat about everyday things, which helps me forget work and feel mentally refreshed. It’s a simple but very therapeutic routine.

Suggestion: Be concise and avoid filler words like "uh". Use grammatically correct structures (e.g., "resonates with my innermost feelings"). Complete your example—don’t leave sentences unfinished. Mention the type of music and a concrete situation when it helps you relax.

Example: Definitely. Music often resonates with my feelings and helps me relax, although it depends on personal taste. For instance, when I go for a walk I listen to calming acoustic music, and after 20 minutes I feel refreshed and less stressed.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and separate activities into short sentences. Correct grammar (articles, verb forms, singular/plural). Replace vague phrases like "processing my all emotions" with clearer descriptions. End with a complete thought and one specific example for each activity.

Example: To relax, I usually sit in my garden or go for a walk, because the steady pace helps me unwind from daily stress. I also listen to my favourite playlist — upbeat songs lift my mood — and spend time with my family, for example playing board games on Sunday evenings, which helps me feel calmer.

× I always relaxed in my backyard because I designed it myself so it is tailored to my need.

✓ I always relax in my backyard because I designed it myself, so it is tailored to my needs.

The student used past tense 'relaxed' which conflicts with 'always' indicating a habitual present action; use present simple 'relax' (Grammar Problem Type 5). Also 'need' should be plural 'needs' (Article/word form but fits typical error handling). Use a comma before 'so' to join clauses.

× It has many salt trees which are about 10 to 15 years old and I love to enjoy sitting in the shade.

✓ It has many salt trees that are about 10 to 15 years old, and I enjoy sitting in the shade.

The phrase 'love to enjoy sitting' is awkward and uses both verb phrases redundantly; replace with 'enjoy sitting' (Grammar Problem Type 13). Also use 'that' or 'which' with comma depending on restrictive clause; here 'that' is appropriate. Add comma before 'and' to join independent clauses.

× I have also some swings hanging to these trees where my children also enjoy so I feel profound.

✓ I also have some swings hanging from these trees where my children enjoy playing, so I feel content.

Word order is incorrect ('have also some' should be 'also have some') and wrong preposition 'hanging to' should be 'hanging from' (Grammar Problem Type 26 and 11). 'Enjoy' needs an object or gerund: 'enjoy playing'. 'Feel profound' is incorrect adjective choice; use 'content' or 'happy'.

× I relax with my family because being in a healthcare profession I'm dealing with lots of rapid task which drained my energy.

✓ I relax with my family because, being in a healthcare profession, I deal with lots of rapid tasks that drain my energy.

Mixed tenses: 'being' and 'I'm dealing' suggest continuous present but 'drained' is past; use present simple 'deal' and 'drain' for habitual situations (Grammar Problem Type 6). Also plural 'task' should be 'tasks' and add commas around the participial phrase.

× So being with family discussing on simple matter make my mind profoundly relaxed and mentally rejuvenated.

✓ So being with my family and discussing simple matters makes my mind feel profoundly relaxed and mentally rejuvenated.

Preposition 'discussing on' is incorrect; 'discuss' does not take 'on' (Grammar Problem Type 11). 'Family' needs possessive 'my family'; 'matter' should be plural 'matters' and subject-verb agreement: 'discussing... makes' (Grammar Problem Type 27). Add 'feel' to make 'relaxed' appropriate.

× I also found it therapeutic.

✓ I also find it therapeutic.

The student used past tense 'found' but context describes a habitual or general present feeling; use present simple 'find' (Grammar Problem Type 8 and 6).

× Definitely yes, because the music resonate with innermost.

✓ Definitely, yes, because the music resonates with my innermost feelings.

Subject-verb agreement: 'music' is singular, so verb should be 'resonates' (Grammar Problem Type 13/27). 'Innermost' is incomplete and needs a noun like 'feelings' and possessive 'my'.

× It also depends upon person's own preference and personality.

✓ It also depends on a person's preferences and personality.

Use 'depends on' not 'depends upon' (both possible but 'on' is more natural) and include an article 'a' before 'person's' and pluralize 'preference' to 'preferences' for general meaning (Grammar Problem Type 12).

× But from my personal view, I feel incredibly refreshed and mentally rejuvenated after having a favorite music on.

✓ But from my personal view, I feel incredibly refreshed and mentally rejuvenated after playing my favorite music.

'Having a favorite music on' is awkward; use 'playing my favorite music' or 'listening to my favorite music' for correct verb and object structure (Grammar Problem Type 26).

× For example, when I go for.

✓ For example, when I go for a walk, I listen to music that relaxes me.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a verb and object; complete the idea to match context (Grammar Problem Type 26 and 23).

× I sit in my garden or go for walk, the gentle rhythm of walking really unwind me from daily stress.

✓ I sit in my garden or go for a walk; the gentle rhythm of walking really unwinds me from daily stress.

'Go for walk' needs article 'a walk'. Subject-verb agreement: 'the gentle rhythm' is singular, so verb should be 'unwinds' (Grammar Problem Type 8 and 27). Use semicolon or period to separate clauses.

× Beside this, I love to listen my favorite playlist which uplift my mood and make me emotionally stronger after processing my all emotions and I also spend time with my family to feel.

✓ Besides this, I love to listen to my favorite playlist, which uplifts my mood and makes me emotionally stronger after processing all my emotions, and I also spend time with my family to feel better.

Use 'Besides' not 'Beside' for transition (Grammar Problem Type 11). 'Listen' requires the preposition 'to' (listen to). Subject-verb agreement: 'playlist' (singular) takes 'uplifts' and 'makes' (Grammar Problem Type 27). Word order 'my all emotions' should be 'all my emotions'. Sentence end 'to feel' is incomplete; use 'to feel better' to complete thought.