Science— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Clarify vocabulary, correct grammar, and be more concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting points. Replace unclear term "motorbiology" with "molecular biology" or "developmental biology," and fix verb forms and articles.

Example: Yes, I enjoy science, especially developmental biology. I find it fascinating because it explains how humans develop from pregnancy to adulthood and how early development can influence the risk of disease later in life.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer with correct timing and simplify the sentence. Use a clear topic sentence stating age or school level, then add one supporting detail about what you learned. Correct the inconsistency: primary school at seventeen is unlikely — state correct age or school type.

Example: I started learning science at primary school when I was about seven years old. At that time we studied basic biology, physics and chemistry together, which gave me a good overview of how science affects everyday life.

Suggestion: Use correct terminology and grammar, and avoid unclear phrases like "cell phone difference organo function." Provide one clear reason with a specific example of what you find interesting in physiology.

Example: I am most interested in biology, particularly physiology, because it explains how organs and cells work together to keep the body functioning. For example, studying how the heart and lungs coordinate during exercise helps me understand responses like increased heart rate and breathing.

Suggestion: Be specific about the research project and use correct vocabulary: "plant products" and "pathogens" instead of "planted" and "biotics." Give one or two concise details about methods or findings.

Example: I have done scientific research during my master's degree. For example, I investigated how certain plant extracts can protect against bacterial infections and found that one extract reduced bacterial growth in vitro.

Suggestion: Answer directly and improve fluency by removing repetition. Give a clear reason and a condition for watching. Use correct phrases such as "I haven't had access" and "in-depth explanations" instead of "explain diligence."

Example: Not really, because I haven't had access to many science programs. However, I would watch one if it offered in-depth explanations rather than superficial overviews.

Suggestion: Avoid guessing and be honest and concise. Start with a direct response and then give a reasonable opinion with one specific reason or example. Correct grammar and remove filler phrases.

Example: I'm not sure because I don't know their habits personally. However, I imagine science museums are popular in China, especially in big cities, because of growing interest in technology and education.

× Yes, I like science and now I do like biology, especially motorbiology because it teaches me how human beings develop from pregnancy to adulthood and involve all the things which are important for development of some disease later in life.

✓ Yes, I like science and now I particularly like biology, especially motor biology, because it teaches me how human beings develop from pregnancy to adulthood and involves all the things that are important for the development of some diseases later in life.

The student used 'do like' awkwardly and 'now' with 'do' is unnecessary; replace with adverb 'particularly' for clarity. 'Motorbiology' should be two words 'motor biology'. 'Involve' is incorrect for the singular subject 'biology' (or 'it'): use 'involves'. 'Which' is better as 'that' in restrictive clauses, and 'some disease' should be plural 'some diseases'. Suggest using precise adverbs and ensuring verb agrees with its subject. Suggestion: Use 'particularly' instead of 'do like', split compound academic terms correctly, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use 'that' for restrictive clauses.

× When maybe when I was seventeen in primary school when we were studying science as a single subject including biology, physics and chemistry in general, I think it's where I got the general idea of how science is important in our life.

✓ When I was seventeen in primary school, we were studying science as a combined subject including biology, physics, and chemistry, and I think that is where I got the general idea of how science is important in our lives.

The original repeats 'when' and mixes past events with present tense in a confusing way. Use past tense 'was' and 'were studying' for the time frame, and 'is where I got' should be 'that is where I got' or keep past 'was where I got'. 'Single subject' is better 'combined subject' if meant to include multiple sciences. 'Life' should be plural 'lives'. Suggest removing redundant words, maintaining consistent tense, and fixing count nouns.

× Currently I think is biology, especially physiology where we study how the body works.

✓ Currently, I think biology is the most interesting, especially physiology, where we study how the body works.

The original lacks a clear subject for the verb 'is' ('I think is biology' is ungrammatical). Reorder to 'I think biology is the most interesting' to make a full clause. Add commas to set off 'currently' and 'especially physiology'. Suggest ensuring each clause has a subject and verb in correct order.

× So in this study we learn how the body coordinates cell phone difference organo function to produce the way that we respond now.

✓ So in this subject we learn how the body coordinates cellular, organ and functional differences to produce the responses we have now.

The sentence uses incorrect terms ('cell phone', 'organo') and wrong word forms. 'Cell phone' should be 'cellular' or 'cells'; 'organo' should be 'organ', and 'function' should be an adjective 'functional' or 'functions'. 'Produce the way that we respond now' is awkward; better 'produce the responses we have now'. Suggest using correct scientific vocabulary and appropriate participle/adjective forms.

× I guess doing some research was very important thing.

✓ I guess doing some research was a very important thing.

The phrase lacks the indefinite article 'a' before 'very important thing'. In English, singular countable nouns generally require an article. Suggest adding 'a' or rephrasing to 'was very important' without 'thing'.

× So in my masters for example, I did study about how we can use animal products, I mean planted products to protect us from different biotics.

✓ So in my master's, for example, I studied how we can use animal products, I mean plant products, to protect us from different biotics.

Use past simple 'studied' rather than 'did study' for natural past narration. 'Masters' should be possessive 'master's'. 'Planted products' is incorrect; use 'plant products'. The phrase 'different biotics' is unclear—perhaps 'various pathogens' or 'diseases'. Suggest using correct noun forms and clearer technical terms.

× I think I think no because I didn't have access for that but sure I would like to have a try if I can get a good science program especially with explain diligence about things not just superficial things.

✓ I don't think so because I didn't have access to that, but I would certainly like to try if I can find a good science program that explains things in depth, not just superficially.

'I think I think no' is redundant. Use 'I don't think so'. 'Access for' is incorrect; use 'access to'. 'Have a try' is informal; 'try' or 'have a try' can be 'try'. 'If I can get' is better 'if I can find'. 'Explain diligence' is incorrect — use 'explains things in depth'. 'Superficial things' should be 'superficially'. Suggest simplifying modal constructions and using appropriate prepositions and adverb forms.

× No, I'm not so sure because I don't have interaction with Chinese and I don't know that history, but I think based on the advancement in science and technology I think they are so popular in visiting this museum which are which is all sized added.

✓ No, I'm not so sure because I don't have interaction with Chinese people and I don't know their history, but I think, based on the advancement in science and technology, that visiting these museums is very popular.

Several preposition and noun errors: 'interaction with Chinese' should be 'interaction with Chinese people'. 'I don't know that history' should be 'their history'. 'Based on' is okay but needs commas. 'They are so popular in visiting this museum' is ungrammatical; better 'visiting these museums is very popular'. Remove unclear phrase 'which are which is all sized added'. Suggest using correct prepositions, possessives, and clear subject-verb structures.