Science— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting points using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g. "I can use it, I can apply it").

Example: Yes, I do. I find science fascinating because it explains how things work in everyday life; for example, understanding basic chemistry helps me cook better. Moreover, science develops critical thinking, which I use in problem-solving at work.

Suggestion: Open with a direct time reference then add one specific supporting detail. Use a linking word to connect the main point and the reason.

Example: I began learning science in elementary school. Because it was my favorite subject, it sparked my curiosity about nature and encouraged me to read more books about animals and plants.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence and complete the supporting detail without grammar errors; avoid trailing off. Use linking words to explain why these subjects interest you and give a concrete example from your studies.

Example: I'm most interested in biology, especially anatomy and physiology, because they explain how the human body functions. For instance, learning about the cardiovascular system during my nursing degree helped me understand how to monitor patients more effectively.

Suggestion: Start with a direct statement of what you've done, then give one specific example with a linking word. Be precise about your role and the result of applying scientific knowledge.

Example: I have applied my knowledge of anatomy and physiology during clinical placements. For example, I used my understanding of respiratory physiology to assist in caring for a patient with breathing difficulties, which improved their treatment plan.

Suggestion: Be concise and avoid fillers like "uh". Use a topic sentence and one specific benefit of watching programs, and correct any unclear phrases (e.g. "helped me with my quizzes").

Example: Yes, I enjoyed watching science programs as a child. Watching documentaries helped me understand concepts visually and improved my performance in school quizzes.

Suggestion: Answer directly and briefly, then offer a reasonable guess if necessary. Use a linking word to show you are giving an opinion rather than a fact.

Example: I'm not sure because I'm from the Philippines, but I would guess some Chinese people do visit science museums, especially families and students interested in educational outings.

× I have learned that with science I can use it, I can apply it in different aspects of life, and I just know that you would learn a lot from it.

✓ I have learned that with science I can use it, apply it in different aspects of life, and I know that you can learn a lot from it.

The original sentence uses 'would learn' which is conditional and not needed; 'can' or 'could' fits better for general ability. Also the repeated 'I can' is redundant; parallel structure improves clarity. Use of present modal 'can' matches the general statement about science's usefulness. Suggestion: Maintain parallel verbs and use 'can' for general ability rather than 'would'.

× Well, I started to learn science when I was in elementary.

✓ Well, I started learning science when I was in elementary school.

Native usage prefers 'started learning' rather than 'started to learn' for ongoing activities; adding 'school' completes the noun phrase. The tense (past) is correct but the verb form and missing word needed correction. Suggestion: Use 'started + -ing' for activities that began in the past and continue for a time: 'started learning.'

× Particularly biology and anatomy and Physiology.

✓ Particularly biology, anatomy, and physiology.

This fragment lacks sentence structure and uses inconsistent capitalization. 'Physiology' should be lowercase unless at start. Use commas to list subjects and make a complete phrase; ideally integrate into a full sentence: 'I am particularly interested in biology, anatomy, and physiology.' Suggestion: Make the fragment a full sentence and use consistent capitalization and punctuation.

× I actually graduated Bachelor of Science in nursing and my foundation in those specific subjects really helped me have a good scores and.

✓ I actually graduated with a Bachelor of Science in Nursing, and my foundation in those subjects really helped me get good scores.

Missing preposition 'with' after 'graduated' and incorrect article/capitalization: 'Bachelor of Science in Nursing' should be a degree name with capitalization for Nursing as part of the degree. 'Helped me have a good scores and' is ungrammatical: use 'helped me get good scores.' The trailing 'and' is unnecessary. Suggestion: Use 'graduated with a Bachelor of Science in Nursing' and 'helped me get good scores.'

× Well just like what I said, one of my favorite aspects or sub topics of science would be anatomy and Physiology and I use that as my foundation in my immersion and my clinical duties specially when handling different cases in the hospital.

✓ Well, just like I said, one of my favorite subtopics of science is anatomy and physiology, and I use that as my foundation during my immersion and clinical duties, especially when handling different cases in the hospital.

Use 'is' instead of conditional 'would be' for a general fact (present tense). 'Sub topics' should be one word 'subtopics.' 'Physiology' lowercase. 'In my immersion' is awkward; 'during my immersion' or 'during clinical placement' is better. 'Specially' is incorrect; use 'especially.' Also ensure commas for clarity. Suggestion: Use present simple for general statements and correct prepositions and adverbs: 'is,' 'subtopics,' 'during,' 'especially.'

× Yes, when I was little I would always sit in the living room while eating and watching, uh, educational videos in the television and definitely that helped me E my quizzes and exams.

✓ Yes, when I was little I would always sit in the living room while eating and watching educational videos on the television, and that definitely helped me on my quizzes and exams.

Use 'on the television' or 'on television'; 'in the television' is incorrect. 'Helped me E my quizzes' appears to be a transcription error; likely 'helped me on my quizzes and exams.' Also remove filler 'uh' and add comma for clause separation. Suggestion: Use 'watching educational videos on television' and 'helped me on my quizzes and exams.'

× Well, I do not have any idea because I'm not Chinese and I'm from the Philippines.

✓ Well, I have no idea because I'm not Chinese; I'm from the Philippines.

'Do not have any idea' is acceptable but 'have no idea' is more natural. Use a semicolon or period to separate the two independent clauses. This corrects style rather than grammar, but improves clarity. Suggestion: Use 'I have no idea' and separate clauses: 'I'm not Chinese; I'm from the Philippines.'