Science— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific reason and a short example. Avoid repetition (e.g., 'I can use it, I can apply it') and unnatural phrasing ('I just know that you would learn a lot').

Example: Yes, I do. I enjoy science because it explains how things work in everyday life; for example, learning about nutrition helped me understand how diet affects health.

Suggestion: Good structure and clarity. Improve by using a linking word and one brief specific detail (a memory or topic) to make the answer more vivid.

Example: I started learning science in elementary school. For instance, I remember doing simple experiments with plants, which sparked my curiosity about biology.

Suggestion: Make the topic sentence smoother and avoid grammatical errors: use consistent capitalization and correct article use. Add one specific reason why these subjects interest you and complete the sentence without trailing off.

Example: I'm most interested in biology, especially anatomy and physiology, because they explain how the human body works; during my nursing degree I used that knowledge to perform clinical assessments effectively.

Suggestion: Be more direct: begin with a clear topic sentence about what you've done, then include a brief specific example of a task or procedure. Use linking words (for example, such as) to connect ideas and correct small errors (e.g., 'especially').

Example: I've applied science in clinical practice; for example, my knowledge of anatomy helped me correctly locate veins when inserting IVs during my hospital placements.

Suggestion: Avoid filler sounds ('uh') and unclear fragments ('helped me E my quizzes'). Keep answers concise: state whether you still watch them and give one specific benefit or example from watching as a child.

Example: Yes. As a child I often watched educational science programs, which helped me remember facts and do better in school science quizzes.

Suggestion: Good honest response. Improve by briefly explaining why you don't know and offering a general observation or how you would find out—this shows communicative ability instead of stopping abruptly.

Example: I'm not sure because I'm from the Philippines and don't live in China; however, I imagine many people there visit science museums, especially families and school groups, to learn about technology and nature.

× I have learned that with science I can use it, I can apply it in different aspects of life, and I just know that you would learn a lot from it.

✓ I have learned that with science I can use it, apply it in different aspects of life, and I know that you can learn a lot from it.

The original sentence mixes modal forms inconsistently: 'I just know that you would learn a lot from it' uses 'would' which implies conditional or hypothetical meaning not intended here. Replace 'would' with 'can' to express general ability. Also 'I can use it, I can apply it' is repetitive; removing the second 'I can' improves style. The error relates to incorrect choice of verb/modal form; use present modal 'can' for general statements of ability. Suggestion: Use consistent modal verbs for ability (can/could) and avoid unnecessary repetition.

× Well, I started to learn science when I was in elementary.

✓ Well, I started learning science when I was in elementary school.

'Started to learn' is acceptable but 'started learning' is more natural. Also the noun 'elementary' should be 'elementary school' in this context. This is a tense/aspect and word-choice issue: use the progressive form after 'start' for natural phrasing and include the full noun for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'started learning' and add 'school' after 'elementary'.

× Particularly biology and anatomy and Physiology.

✓ Particularly biology, anatomy, and physiology.

List items should be lowercased (common nouns) and separated by commas. 'Physiology' does not require capitalization. This is an article/capitalization and punctuation issue; correct casing and use commas to list subjects. Suggestion: Use lowercase for subject names and include commas between list items.

× I actually graduated Bachelor of Science in nursing and my foundation in those specific subjects really helped me have a good scores and.

✓ I actually graduated with a Bachelor of Science in Nursing, and my foundation in those subjects really helped me get good scores.

Problems: missing preposition 'with' after 'graduated', incorrect capitalization 'nursing' as part of a degree should be capitalized ('Nursing') in formal degree titles, 'have a good scores' is ungrammatical—use 'get good scores' or 'achieve good grades'. Remove the trailing 'and'. This is a sentence structure and article/preposition error. Suggestion: Use 'graduated with a Bachelor of Science in Nursing' and 'helped me get good scores'.

× one of my favorite aspects or sub topics of science would be anatomy and Physiology and I use that as my foundation in my immersion and my clinical duties specially when handling different cases in the hospital.

✓ One of my favorite aspects or subtopics of science is anatomy and physiology, and I use that as my foundation during my immersion and clinical duties, especially when handling different cases in the hospital.

Errors: 'sub topics' should be 'subtopics' (compound noun), 'would be' is unnecessary—use present 'is' for a general preference, 'Physiology' should be lowercase, preposition 'in my immersion' is awkward—use 'during my immersion', 'specially' should be 'especially'. Also punctuation to separate clauses improves clarity. This is primarily incorrect preposition use and word choice. Suggestion: Use 'is' for general statements, 'during' for time periods, and 'especially' for emphasis.

× Yes, when I was little I would always sit in the living room while eating and watching, uh, educational videos in the television and definitely that helped me E my quizzes and exams.

✓ Yes, when I was little I would always sit in the living room while eating and watching educational videos on television, and that definitely helped me on my quizzes and exams.

Problems: 'in the television' should be 'on television'; preposition use is incorrect. 'helped me E my quizzes' seems to contain a typo 'E'—interpret as 'on' or 'with' quizzes and exams; use 'on my quizzes and exams'. Also remove filler 'uh' and fix word order. This is an error with verb+ing phrasing and preposition choice. Suggestion: Use 'watching educational videos on television' and 'helped me on my quizzes and exams'.

× Well, I do not have any idea because I'm not Chinese and I'm from the Philippines.

✓ Well, I do not have any idea because I'm not Chinese; I'm from the Philippines.

The sentence is understandable but better punctuation and clause connection improve clarity. Using a semicolon or separate sentence is clearer. This is an issue with sentence structure/pronoun clarity rather than pronoun choice; keep pronouns consistent. Also 'any idea' can be 'any idea about that' for specificity. Suggestion: Add 'about that' if you want to be specific: 'I do not have any idea about that because I'm not Chinese; I'm from the Philippines.'