Science— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn, dùng cấu trúc câu chuẩn và tránh lặp từ. Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sau đó nêu lý do cụ thể với liên từ (because, so). Sửa ngữ pháp (I am keen on, I did a master's degree) và rút gọn để không quá 5 câu.

Example: Yes, I am very keen on science because I find it full of mysteries about life. For example, studying biology helped me understand how the body heals, which inspired me to pursue a master's degree in science to deepen my knowledge.

Suggestion: Cần dùng thì đúng (past tense) và trình bày mạch lạc: nêu thời điểm, nguyên nhân và kết quả ngắn gọn. Tránh lỗi như '3 grades' (sử dụng 'third grade') và sửa cấu trúc 'science scientist'.

Example: I started learning about science in the third grade when I watched a TV program about space. Because I found it fascinating, I wanted to become a scientist at that time.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời lặp từ và sai trật tự từ; nên nói rõ môn học bằng từ đúng ('computer science') và nêu lý do cụ thể liên quan đến sở thích, kèm liên từ để nối ý. Giữ dưới 5 câu.

Example: I find computer science the most interesting subject because I love playing video games, and learning programming helped me understand how games work. As a result, I could create simple games and improve my problem-solving skills.

Suggestion: Trình bày rõ hành động, dùng thì quá khứ đúng (I created), sửa từ vựng ('cooker' OK but 'from rubbish materials' better). Nêu chi tiết hơn: vật liệu dùng, cách hoạt động, kết quả. Giữ tối đa 5 câu.

Example: When I was in eighth grade I created a simple cooker for my family using recycled metal and a solar reflector. It was able to boil water slowly, and my family used it during a camping trip, which made me very proud.

Suggestion: Cần rõ ràng, tránh lặp và sửa ngữ pháp ('science TV programs', 'mental health'). Nêu trực tiếp lợi ích (knowledge, broaden horizons) và liên kết nguyên nhân bằng 'because' hoặc 'so'.

Example: Yes, I love watching science TV programs because they broaden my horizons and teach me new facts. For instance, documentaries about space inspired me to read more about astronomy instead of spending excessive time on games.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời mang tính chủ quan và có lỗi ngữ pháp ('often visit museums', 'the country they belong to'). Nên tránh đoán chung chung; nếu nêu ý kiến, dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng và cho ví dụ hoặc thừa nhận không chắc chắn. Giữ câu ngắn gọn.

Example: I'm not Chinese, but I think many people in China visit science museums because museums offer interactive exhibits that educate visitors about technology and history. For example, school trips often take students to museums to learn hands-on.

× I really keen on science because I find it's very it has many mysteries, questions about my life.

✓ I am really keen on science because I find it has many mysteries and questions about life.

The student omitted the auxiliary verb 'am' for the adjective 'keen', and used redundant words ('it's very it has'). Use present simple 'find' and 'has' for general truths; remove unnecessary 'my' before 'life' to make it natural. Suggestion: Add the correct form of 'to be' with adjectives (I am keen), remove redundant phrases, and use 'has many mysteries' for present simple facts.

× So I went to the masters of science to discover everything for me, which I never understand it.

✓ So I studied for a Master of Science to discover everything I never understood.

Mixed tense and incorrect wording: 'went to the masters of science' is unnatural; use 'studied for a Master of Science'. The relative clause used past meaning, so change 'understand' to past 'understood' and remove redundant pronoun 'it'. Suggestion: Use proper degree/course names (a Master of Science), maintain consistent past tense, and avoid redundant pronouns in relative clauses.

× In my recollection, I start to learn about science when I study at 3 grades when I watching a TV program about science and space and I find it interesting for me.

✓ In my recollection, I started to learn about science when I was in 3rd grade when I watched a TV program about science and space, and I found it interesting.

Tense consistency errors: 'start' should be past 'started' and 'study' should be 'was in' to indicate past time. 'watching' should be past 'watched' and 'find' should be 'found'. Also '3 grades' should be '3rd grade'. Suggestion: Keep past tense for past events and use correct ordinal for grade level; use 'was in 3rd grade' and past verbs for actions.

× So at this time I want to become science scientist.

✓ So at that time I wanted to become a science scientist.

Article and tense errors: 'at this time' referring to past should be 'at that time' or 'then' and verb should be past 'wanted'. Missing article 'a' before 'science scientist'. Suggestion: Use correct article 'a' before singular countable nouns and match time expressions to tense.

× Umm, for me the science subject is interesting for me is science computer because you know, I really, I really keen on playing in games.

✓ For me, the science subject that is interesting is computer science because I really enjoy playing games.

Awkward word order and wrong word forms: 'science computer' should be 'computer science'; 'keen on' is fine but requires 'am keen on' or use 'enjoy'. 'playing in games' is incorrect; use 'playing games'. Suggestion: Use correct noun order 'computer science', and use verbs like 'enjoy' or include 'am' with 'keen on'; say 'playing games'.

× So science computer is very good for me to improve my game.

✓ So computer science is very good for me to improve my gaming skills.

Word order and noun form: 'science computer' incorrect order; 'game' should be 'gaming skills' for clarity. Use present simple 'is' is fine. Suggestion: Use correct noun order and more precise noun phrases like 'gaming skills'.

× Umm, to be honest and, and interesting things I done with science is, uh, I have create a cooker for my families.

✓ To be honest, an interesting thing I did with science was that I created a cooker for my family.

Tense and form errors: 'done' should be past 'did' or present perfect 'have done'; 'I have create' should be 'I created' or 'I have created'. 'families' should be 'family' for singular family unit. Suggestion: Use correct past tense or present perfect consistently and correct noun singular/plural.

× You know, when I study at eight grade, I create a cooker from the rubbish mantels.

✓ You know, when I was in eighth grade, I created a cooker from rubbish materials.

Preposition and noun choice: 'study at eight grade' should be 'was in eighth grade'. 'rubbish mantels' is incorrect; likely meant 'rubbish materials'. Use past tense 'created'. Suggestion: Use 'in eighth grade' for grade level and choose the correct word 'materials'.

× So I'm very proud of them.

✓ So I'm very proud of it.

Pronoun reference error: 'them' refers to plural items, but context suggests the cooker (singular), so use 'it'. Suggestion: Ensure pronouns agree with the noun number they refer to.

× Hmm to be honest I really love watching science TV program because is I I can avoid playing games which make me become addicted and decrease my health mental and I find and I can put in my horizon and gain more knowledge from science.

✓ To be honest, I really love watching science TV programs because I can avoid playing games that can make me become addicted and harm my mental health, and I can broaden my horizons and gain more knowledge from science.

Multiple errors: 'science TV program' should be plural 'science TV programs' or 'a science TV program'. Removed extra 'is I I'. Use 'that can make me become addicted' and 'harm my mental health' instead of 'decrease my health mental'. 'put in my horizon' should be 'broaden my horizons'. Suggestion: Use plural when generalizing, correct relative clauses with 'that', use 'harm my mental health', and use idiomatic phrase 'broaden my horizons'.

× Umm, to be honest, I know I'm not Chinese.

✓ To be honest, I know I'm not Chinese.

This sentence is correct; no grammatical change needed. It is kept for completeness. Suggestion: None.

× So in my opinion, Chinese people are often visit museum because they want to see how the country they belong and they want to understand the things they never understand before.

✓ So in my opinion, Chinese people often visit museums because they want to see the country they belong to and they want to understand things they did not understand before.

Verb form and preposition errors: 'are often visit museum' should be 'often visit museums' (remove 'are' and pluralize); 'how the country they belong' needs preposition 'to' after 'belong'; 'the things they never understand before' should be past 'did not understand before'. Suggestion: Use correct verb patterns for frequency adverbs (often visit), pluralize countable nouns when generalizing (museums), add 'to' after 'belong', and keep past tense for past lack of understanding.