Sharing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Correct verb forms and word choice (e.g., "always" instead of "on way", "helps" → "help").

Example: Yes. My parents always taught me to share with others because they believed it makes you a kinder person. For example, when I was young they encouraged me to give toys to my siblings so we could learn cooperation and build stronger family bonds.

Suggestion: Organize into a clear topic sentence and one specific example. Use linking words (e.g., "for instance", "so") and correct grammar ("help them improve", "make my friends do better"). Avoid repetition.

Example: I like to share ideas and study tips with my classmates because I want everyone to do well. For instance, before exams I explain difficult topics and share my notes so my friends understand the material and improve their grades.

Suggestion: Give a clear opinion followed by a concise, specific reason. Use correct singular/plural and verb forms ("clothes are", "they may not fit"). One example is enough.

Example: I don't think clothes are suitable to share because they might not fit and it's a personal item. For example, a coat I wear may be too tight or too personal for someone else to feel comfortable wearing.

Suggestion: Be specific about what you shared and why. Use simple, clear sentences and correct tense ("I cooked a cake and shared it"). Avoid fillers like "uh" and unclear phrases like "more lover".

Example: Recently I baked a chocolate cake and shared slices with my friends. Sharing it made me happy because they enjoyed the cake and we had a nice time together.

Suggestion: State the person clearly and give one specific reason with correct vocabulary ("boyfriend", "safe"). Use linking words ("because", "so") and correct grammar ("I feel safe").

Example: The first person I would tell is my boyfriend because I trust him and he supports my plans. For example, when I get a new idea for a project I tell him first to get his opinion and encouragement.

Suggestion: Begin with a direct topic sentence and give one specific example. Use linking words and correct word forms ("school news", "exam dates"). Avoid trailing off at the end.

Example: I usually share school-related news with my friends, such as new lessons or upcoming exam dates. For instance, when the school announces an exam schedule I forward the details so everyone can prepare in time.

× Yes, my parents on way told me that I should share what I have for my friends or my siblings because this can helps me become a good person and can connect with relationships and teach me a lot of.

✓ Yes, my parents in a way taught me that I should share what I have with my friends and siblings because this can help me become a good person, build relationships, and teach me a lot.

Problems: incorrect preposition 'on way' and wrong verb form 'told' vs context, incorrect preposition 'for' before 'my friends', subject-verb agreement with 'helps' after 'can', awkward phrase 'connect with relationships'. Suggestions: Use 'in a way' for the intended meaning, 'taught' is more natural than 'told' here, use 'with' to indicate sharing 'with' someone, 'can help' uses base verb after modal 'can', and list parallel verbs 'build relationships, and teach me a lot'. Use commas to separate clauses.

× Personally I love sharing my ideas and my knowledge from my friends when I study at school and I always want my friends a better in the exam and I if I know I always share my skills for my friends helps them to improve their.

✓ Personally, I love sharing my ideas and the knowledge I get from my friends when I study at school. I always want my friends to do better in exams, and if I know something that can help, I always share my skills with them to help them improve.

Problems: run-on sentence and incorrect prepositions/phrases: 'knowledge from my friends' should be 'the knowledge I get from my friends', 'want my friends a better' missing 'to do better', 'in the exam' should be 'in exams', 'share my skills for my friends' should be 'share my skills with them', and awkward ending 'helps them to improve their'. Suggestions: Break into two sentences for clarity, use 'to do better' after 'want', use plural 'exams' for general statements, and use 'with' to indicate recipient.

× I think my clothing are not suitable for sharing because for me my clothings can be not fit with other people.

✓ I think my clothing is not suitable for sharing because my clothes may not fit other people.

Problems: 'clothing' is uncountable and takes singular verb 'is'; 'clothings' is incorrect plural—use 'clothes'. 'can be not fit with' is unnatural; use 'may not fit'. Suggestions: Use 'clothing' as uncountable or 'clothes' as countable plural, use 'may not fit' to express possibility.

× So I don't want to share my clothes for everyone else because it not suitable.

✓ So I don't want to share my clothes with everyone else because they are not suitable.

Problems: use 'with' to indicate sharing with people, not 'for'; subject-verb agreement and pronoun reference: 'it not suitable' should be 'they are not suitable' to match 'clothes'. Suggestions: Use 'with' and make pronoun agree in number and tense.

× Recently I have cooked some meals at home like I cook the cake and I share this for my friends and it can make me more uh lover and more enjoy when I can share this for my friends try to.

✓ Recently I cooked some meals at home, for example a cake, and I shared them with my friends. Sharing made me feel happier and more loved when my friends tried them.

Problems: tense inconsistency: 'I have cooked' then 'I cook' and 'I share'—use past simple 'cooked' and 'shared' for a recent completed action. Use 'shared them with my friends' (preposition and plural). Phrases 'more uh lover' and 'more enjoy' are ungrammatical; replace with 'feel happier and more loved'. Suggestions: Keep consistent past tense for past events, use correct prepositions and clearer emotion expressions.

× I think my boyfriend's because recently if I have new ideas and what I want to do, I always share the good news for my partner and I feel it's so safety and can make me more enjoyable when I want to do this.

✓ I would share them with my boyfriend because if I have new ideas or plans, I always tell my partner first. I feel safe and more excited when I share with him.

Problems: 'my boyfriend's' is incomplete (possessive without noun), 'share the good news for my partner' should be 'tell my partner' or 'share with my partner' (preposition), 'it's so safety' incorrect adjective—use 'safe', and 'can make me more enjoyable' wrong; use 'make me feel more excited' or 'happy'. Suggestions: Use full noun phrases, correct prepositions, and choose accurate adjectives for feelings.

× I think I will share the news at school such as new lessons or new exams which the school announcement for the students and I always update this news and share with my friend to know and.

✓ I think I will share news at school, such as new lessons or exams announced by the school, and I always update my friends about these announcements.

Problems: 'announcement for the students' should be 'announced by the school' (passive or preposition), 'update this news and share with my friend to know' is awkward; use 'update my friends about these announcements'. Suggestions: Use passive 'announced by' or 'from the school', make 'friends' plural for generality, and use 'update about' to indicate informing others.