Sharing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make your answer more direct with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition.

Example: Yes, my parents taught me to share when I was a child. They often reminded me that sharing helps maintain friendships, so I learned to lend toys or snacks to classmates. For example, I used to share my crayons at school, which helped me make friends.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence and use precise vocabulary (e.g., food, dishes). Give a specific example and a linking word to explain why you share.

Example: I like to share food with my friends, especially dishes we order at restaurants. For instance, when we order several plates, I often offer my portion of a starter because I enjoy them and want my friends to try different flavors.

Suggestion: Provide a direct topic sentence, correct grammar, and a brief explanation with a linking word. Mention a few examples and give a reason for each.

Example: Personal hygiene items should not be shared. For example, you should never share a toothbrush or razor because they can transfer germs and cause infections.

Suggestion: Make the answer clearer and more natural: start with a topic sentence, explain what you shared and why, and correct the vocabulary and grammar (e.g., subscription fee).

Example: Yes, recently I shared my Netflix account with my husband because subscription fees are expensive. Sharing one account helps us save money while still watching our favourite shows.

Suggestion: Combine sentences to avoid repetition, use a clear topic sentence, and give a specific reason or a short example of their reaction.

Example: I would share good news first with my husband and my mother because they always support and encourage me. For example, when I got a promotion, they were the first people I told and they celebrated with me.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence and explain clearly. Use linking words to contrast ideas (e.g., however) and correct grammar. Specify what work-related news you share and why.

Example: I usually share work-related news with my friends, such as project successes or interesting assignments. However, we don't talk very often, so I only update the closest friends about important events at work.

× Yes I did, I don't remember as well but my parents said to me it is important to share with your friends and you should think about friends feelings.

✓ Yes, I did. I don't remember well, but my parents told me it was important to share with my friends and that I should think about my friends' feelings.

Mix of past and present tense and word choice: use past tense 'told' to match 'said to me' and 'it was important' to report past advice. Use 'remember well' instead of 'remember as well'. Use possessive 'friends\'' and include 'my' for clarity. Also add punctuation for clarity.

× For me, I like to share cuisine with my friends because I ate a bunch of cuisine in the restaurant.

✓ For me, I like to share food with my friends because I have eaten a lot of dishes at restaurants.

Word choice and tense: 'cuisine' is uncountable and awkward here; use 'food' or 'dishes'. Use present perfect 'have eaten' to relate past experience to present preference. 'A bunch of' is informal; 'a lot of' fits better. Use plural 'restaurants' or 'at a restaurant'.

× I in my Chinese. I came up with toothbrush because it's dirty and it's not share with friends or family.

✓ I'm Chinese. I thought of a toothbrush because it's unhygienic and should not be shared with friends or family.

Grammar and pronoun errors: 'I in my Chinese' is ungrammatical; 'I'm Chinese' expresses nationality. 'I came up with toothbrush' should be 'I thought of a toothbrush'. Use 'it's unhygienic' and 'should not be shared' (passive) instead of 'it's not share'.

× Yes, recently I shared with my husband on Netflix accounts because Netflix accounts get to higher substitutes subscription fee.

✓ Yes, recently I shared my Netflix account with my husband because subscription fees for Netflix have increased.

Preposition and noun phrase errors: 'shared with my husband on Netflix accounts' is awkward; use 'shared my Netflix account with my husband'. 'Get to higher substitutes subscription fee' is incorrect; use 'subscription fees have increased' to explain reason. Maintain present perfect for recent change.

× I'd like to share the news with my husband and my mother because they are definitely happy. Because they encouraged me always, so I share.

✓ I'd like to share the news with my husband and my mother because they are always encouraging and will definitely be happy, so I share it with them.

Sentence fragments and redundancy: avoid starting consecutive clauses with 'Because'. Combine into one coherent sentence. Use 'are always encouraging' and 'will definitely be happy' for clarity. Include object 'it' after 'share'.

× I would like to share with my friends about work because I work as an editor at the company, but we rarely talk with others so I don't talk with.

✓ I would like to share work-related news with my friends because I work as an editor at a company, but I rarely talk about work with others, so I don't discuss it much.

Awkward structure and missing object: 'share with my friends about work' should be 'share work-related news with my friends'. 'At the company' is vague; 'at a company' is better. 'I don't talk with' is incomplete; specify 'I don't discuss it much'. Use commas to link clauses.