Sharing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答は明確で自然ですが、語彙や表現の多様性を増やし、文法の誤り（install → instill）を直すとさらに良くなります。また、Supporting detailとして具体例（何をどのように共有したか）を一つ追加すると説得力が増します。文は3〜4文に収め、過度に長くしないでください。

Example: Yes, they did. I grew up with a younger sister, so our parents taught us to share toys and clothes to avoid fights. For instance, we took turns playing with each other’s favorite dolls, which taught us patience and consideration.

Suggestion: 良い回答です。理由と具体例が含まれており自然です。さらに良くするには、linking wordsを追加して文のつながりを明確にし、別の具体的な場面（友人とのランチなど）を短く加えるとバランスが良くなります。

Example: I prefer to share food with others because meals bring people together. For example, during family dinners or local festivals we often pass dishes around, and even with friends I enjoy sharing snacks to make conversations more lively.

Suggestion: 内容は妥当ですが、答えが途中で終わっている印象があります（文が未完成）。また具体性を増すために衛生上の例（歯ブラシ、タオル）やプライバシー例（銀行情報）を短く述べ、linking wordで理由を明確にしてください。

Example: Although sharing is common, some items are unsuitable to share for hygiene or privacy reasons. For example, I wouldn’t share a toothbrush or towel for health reasons, nor my smartphone or laptop because they hold private messages and banking information.

Suggestion: 回答は具体的で理由も述べられており良いです。改善点は時制や語順を自然にし、個人的感想を一文でまとめることです。また別の利点（安全性や時間短縮）を短く付け加えると説得力が増します。

Example: Yes. Two weeks ago I used a ridesharing service because it was much cheaper than a regular taxi. I find it especially useful for young people since it’s affordable, quick to book via an app, and often saves time.

Suggestion: とても自然で感情も伝わる良い回答です。細かい文法（an university → a university）を直すだけで完璧です。さらに短いlinking phraseを入れて結論を強調するとより効果的です。

Example: I would share good news with my family. For instance, when I received a university offer two weeks ago, I immediately told my husband because I was so excited and he’s always very supportive.

Suggestion: 意図は明確ですが、口語表現（wanna）はフォーマルな場面では避けてください。また“personal special events”は曖昧なので具体例を最初に置き、理由を簡潔に述べると良いです。語数は2〜3文に収めましょう。

Example: I usually share personal milestones with my close friends, such as engagements or job promotions. I do this because I want to celebrate together and get their emotional support.

× This advice helped to install a sense of generosity and consideration in us from a young age.

✓ This advice helped to instill a sense of generosity and consideration in us from a young age.

The verb 'install' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'instill' meaning to gradually impart an idea or feeling. 'Install' usually means to set up equipment. Use 'instill' for abstract qualities. Suggestion: Replace 'install' with 'instill' and note spelling difference.

× In Japan, it's common to eat together because sharing a meal helps us bond with loved ones and enjoy the same flavors and conversations, for example, during family dinners or festivals.

✓ In Japan, it's common to eat together because sharing a meal helps us bond with loved ones and enjoy the same flavors and conversations, for example during family dinners or festivals.

The sentence is grammatically correct but contains an unnecessary comma before 'for example'. Remove the comma to improve flow. Suggestion: Omit the comma before 'for example' when it introduces a short phrase.

× Well, a sharing culture is common in Japan, but some things are not suitable to share because of hygiene or privacy concerns.

✓ Well, a culture of sharing is common in Japan, but some things are not suitable to share because of hygiene or privacy concerns.

'A sharing culture' is understandable but 'a culture of sharing' is more natural in English. Suggestion: Use 'a culture of sharing' for natural phrasing.

× For example, I wouldn't share my personal computer or smartphone with others since they contain private data and.

✓ For example, I wouldn't share my personal computer or smartphone with others since they contain private data.

The sentence ends with an extra conjunction 'and' leaving it incomplete. Remove the final 'and' to complete the sentence. Suggestion: Ensure sentences do not end with dangling conjunctions; finish the list or remove the conjunction.

× Yes I do, I used a ride sharing service 2 weeks ago because it was much cheaper than a normal taxi.

✓ Yes, I did. I used a ride-sharing service two weeks ago because it was much cheaper than a regular taxi.

Several issues: missing comma after 'Yes' and wrong past auxiliary ('do' vs 'did') because the question asked about recent activity in past. 'Ride sharing' should be hyphenated as 'ride-sharing' when used as a compound noun. Use 'two weeks ago' in words in formal speech. 'Normal taxi' is better as 'regular taxi'. Suggestion: Use correct past auxiliary 'did' and hyphenate compound nouns; write small numbers in words in formal contexts.

× I think this service is especially useful for younger people because it's affordable and easy to book via an app.

✓ I think this service is especially useful for younger people because it's affordable and easy to book via an app.

This sentence is correct. No change needed. Suggestion: N/A.

× Well, I would like to share good news with my family. For example, I received an offer from an university 2 weeks ago and I immediately shared the news with my husband because I was so excited and he always supports my decisions.

✓ Well, I would like to share good news with my family. For example, I received an offer from a university two weeks ago and I immediately shared the news with my husband because I was so excited and he always supports my decisions.

Use 'a university' not 'an university' because 'university' begins with a consonant sound 'yoo'. Also '2 weeks ago' should be 'two weeks ago' in formal speech. Suggestion: Choose 'a' or 'an' based on the initial sound of the following word; write small numbers in words.

× For example, I received an offer from an university 2 weeks ago and I immediately shared the news with my husband because I was so excited and he always supports my decisions.

✓ For example, I received an offer from a university two weeks ago and I immediately shared the news with my husband because I was so excited and he always supports my decisions.

The rest of the sentence is fine; ensure pronoun 'he' clearly refers to 'my husband' which is correct. No change needed beyond the article and number. Suggestion: Maintain clear antecedents for pronouns.

× I would like to share good news with my friends about my personal special events like marriage and promotion because I wanna share the thoughts and feelings with my close friends.

✓ I would like to share good news with my friends about personal events like marriage and promotion because I want to share my thoughts and feelings with my close friends.

Multiple issues: 'personal special events' is redundant—use 'personal events'. 'Wanna' is informal; use 'want to' in formal speech. 'the thoughts and feelings' should be 'my thoughts and feelings' to show possession. Suggestion: Avoid colloquial contractions like 'wanna' in formal contexts, remove redundancy, and include possessive pronouns when referring to one's own thoughts/feelings.