Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 어린 시절에 관한 질문이므로 과거 시제를 일관되게 사용하세요. “when I'm a child”는 “when I was a child”로, “My first riding experience is like”는 “I first learned to ride”처럼 자연스럽게 표현할 수 있습니다. 마지막 문장은 “without” 뒤에 목적어가 없어 미완성입니다. 아버지가 도와주었는지, 무엇이 무서웠는지 구체적으로 설명하고 문장을 완성해 보세요.

Example: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I first learned to ride it with my dad in our backyard. I was nervous about riding without training wheels, but he helped me until I felt confident.

Suggestion: 질문에 먼저 직접 답한 뒤, 자전거가 인기 있는 이유나 관찰한 장면을 한두 가지로 설명하세요. “because I my university”처럼 중복되거나 잘못 연결된 표현은 피하고, 대학 이름은 정확히 말하거나 생략해도 됩니다. “a lot”을 반복하지 말고 “many people cycling”처럼 구체적인 표현을 사용하세요. “in Seoul”이 자연스러우며, “bikes”는 복수형으로 써야 합니다.

Example: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in Korea, especially in Seoul. I study at a university there, and I often see people cycling along the riverside paths. Many people use bikes for exercise or to get around when the weather is nice.

× Yes, I had a bike when I'm a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence refers to childhood, a time in the past, so use the past form was rather than the present form am. Keep the verb tense consistent with had.

× My first riding experience is like with my dad in the backyard.

✓ My first riding experience was with my dad in the backyard.

The experience happened in the past, so use was instead of is.

× My first riding experience is like with my dad in the backyard.

✓ My first riding experience was with my dad in the backyard.

The phrase is like with is not a grammatical construction here. To say who was with you during the experience, use was with.

× I was scared of riding a bike without.

✓ I was scared of riding a bike without my dad.

Without needs an object in this sentence; it cannot be left at the end without saying who or what was absent. Add the person or thing you mean, such as my dad.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in Korea, especially in Seoul city, because I my university is in Seoul, the Honk University and I saw a lot of bike and I saw a lot.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in Korea, especially in Seoul, because my university is in Seoul, at Honk University, and I saw a lot of bikes.

The clause because I my university is in Seoul contains an extra subject pronoun: use because my university is in Seoul. The ending I saw a lot repeats the idea and makes the sentence unnecessarily incomplete-sounding; state the object once to make the sentence clearer.

× I saw a lot of bike.

✓ I saw a lot of bikes.

Bike is a countable noun, and a lot of refers to multiple bikes here, so use the plural form bikes.