Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Answer the question directly first, then briefly explain your interest in the RX 200. The answer is difficult to follow because of repeated fillers and unclear phrases such as “one of the vehicle at which I was most fond of.” Use a clear phrase like “I was a big fan of…” and avoid repeating the same idea.

Example: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. However, I was very interested in vehicles, especially the RX 200 motorcycle. I was a big fan of it when I was young.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer and clarify whether you mean bicycles or motorbikes. Your reason is relevant, but it is repetitive and the sentence structure is unclear. Use one specific reason and connect it with a linking word such as “because” or “for example.”

Example: Yes, motorbikes are very popular in my country because they are convenient for daily travel. For example, many people use them to commute to work or get around busy streets. They are often quicker and easier to park than cars.

× I had one of the vehicle at which I was most fond of was the uh, RX 200.

✓ One of the vehicles I was most fond of was the RX 200.

After 'one of the,' the noun must be plural, so use 'vehicles.' Check noun number after expressions such as 'one of the' to make sure it is plural.

× I had one of the vehicle at which I was most fond of was the uh, RX 200.

✓ One of the vehicles I was most fond of was the RX 200.

The original sentence has two competing sentence structures: 'I had one of the vehicle' and 'was the RX 200.' The phrase 'at which I was most fond of' is also incorrectly formed. Use the clear structure 'One of the vehicles I was most fond of was the RX 200.'

× Yeah, I believe that bikes are very much popular in my, in our country

✓ Yeah, I believe that bikes are very popular in our country.

'Very' is the appropriate adverb to modify the adjective 'popular.' 'Very much' does not normally modify an adjective in this construction. Use 'very popular.'

× because, uh, most of the people rely on uh, vehicles for going to the, uh, places more uh, and uh, it is mainly uh, you see in among the people for uh, easy travelling for their transportation, Most of the people use.

✓ Most people rely on vehicles to travel, and bikes are commonly used because they are convenient for transportation.

The original is difficult to follow because the clause beginning 'it is mainly' has no clear grammatical connection to the rest of the sentence, and 'Most of the people use' is left without an object. Form complete clauses with clear subjects and verbs, and make sure that a verb such as 'use' has an object.