Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Answer directly, then explain how your father’s bicycle business meant you got the bike for free. Avoid repeating “bike” and use natural phrasing such as “I fell off a few times while learning to ride it” and “I’m confident riding now.”

Example: Yes, I had a bike as a child. My dad ran a bicycle business, so he gave me one for free. I fell off a few times while learning to ride it, but I eventually became a confident rider.

Suggestion: Give a clear opinion about how popular bikes are, rather than saying you cannot tell and then making a different point. Support your answer with a specific reason or example, and correct “go to schools on on bikes” to “cycle to school.”

Example: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular, especially among children. They’re an affordable way to get around, and in some areas students cycle to school when the distance isn’t too far.

× I cannot say popular, but every child should have a bike.

✓ I cannot say that bikes are popular, but every child should have a bike.

The phrase I cannot say popular is missing a subject and verb after say to express what is not popular. Add that bikes are to make the clause complete. You can also say I cannot say that they are popular.

× My dad used to run a business of bicycles, bikes.

✓ My dad used to run a business selling bicycles.

Of is not the natural way to describe the products a business sells in this sentence. Use selling bicycles or say a bicycle business.

× I sometimes got hurt by learning that bike and now I'm perfect in riding that.

✓ I sometimes got hurt while learning to ride that bike, but now I'm very good at riding it.

By learning suggests that learning caused the injuries; while learning describes when they happened. The natural preposition after good is at, not in. Use good at rather than perfect in to describe riding ability.

× It's a common thing and they'll go to schools on on bikes.

✓ It's a common thing, and they'll go to school on bikes.

In the general expression go to school, school is normally singular and has no article. Use the singular form when referring to school as an activity or institution generally.

× It's a common thing and they'll go to schools on on bikes.

✓ It's a common thing, and they'll go to school on bikes.

The preposition on is repeated. Use it once in the phrase on bikes. Check for duplicated words when reviewing your answer.