Part 1
Examiner
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Candidate
MMM actually no, because my family isn't so so much rich so that I didn't get a bike or something electric twice and in my childhood.
Examiner
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Candidate
Umm yes, in my country we have a sharing bicycles like Mobike and Oi fo nowadays is a mid twin and I think this popular and popular and people always takes this write write these go there destinations and.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Score: 38.0Suggestion: 先直接回答“没有”,再用自然、准确的表达说明原因。把“my family isn't so so much rich”改为“my family wasn’t very well-off”;“electric twice”含义不清,若想表达电动车,可说“an electric bike”。避免重复词语,并补充一个具体细节即可。
Example: No, I didn’t. My family wasn’t very well-off, so we couldn’t afford a bike when I was a child. I usually walked to school instead.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Score: 32.0Suggestion: 开头直接表明自行车是否受欢迎,并用“bike-sharing services”描述共享单车。可以举 Mobike 或 Ofo 为例,再说明人们使用它们的原因或场景。注意主谓一致(people take/ride),避免重复“popular”和不完整的句子。
Example: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially shared bikes such as Mobike and Ofo. People often use them for short trips because they’re convenient and inexpensive. You can see them near subway stations and on busy streets.
× My family isn't so so much rich
✓ My family wasn't very rich
这里是在回忆童年时的家庭情况,应使用过去时“wasn't”,而不是现在时“isn't”。描述过去的状态时,注意将 be 动词改为过去式。
× my family isn't so so much rich
✓ my family wasn't very rich
“rich”是形容词,不能用“much”直接修饰。可以用“very rich”或“so rich”。描述程度时,注意选择能修饰形容词的副词。
× because my family isn't so so much rich so that I didn't get a bike
✓ My family wasn't very rich, so I didn't get a bike.
“because”已经引出原因,后面不应再用“so”重复连接结果;“so that”通常表示目的,不适合表达这里的因果关系。可以用“Because ..., ...”或“..., so ...”表达原因和结果。
× we have a sharing bicycles like Mobike and Oi fo
✓ we have shared bicycles like Mobike and Ofo
“bicycles”是复数名词,不能与表示单数的冠词“a”连用。这里可直接说“shared bicycles”。使用名词前的冠词时,要检查它与名词的单复数是否一致。
× I think this popular
✓ I think they are popular
这里的“they”指前面提到的复数“bicycles”,因此比单数指示代词“this”更合适。代词应与它所指代的名词在数上保持一致。
× I think this popular
✓ I think they are popular
“popular”是形容词,不能独自充当谓语;它前面需要系动词。此处应使用“are”,构成“they are popular”。
× people always takes this
✓ people always take them
主语“people”是复数,因此一般现在时的谓语动词应使用原形“take”,不能加“-s”。主语为复数时,谓语动词也要使用相应的复数形式。
× these go there destinations
✓ they go to their destinations
表示“去某个目的地”时,通常用“go to”。“destinations”前也需要合适的限定词;这里用“their”表示这些人自己的目的地。