Part 1
Examiner
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Candidate
Yes, I had um I had a green bicycle when I was a child food when I was a child and then my grandfather bought me and then I really like it. I always liked it to go to the park.
Examiner
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Candidate
Yes, I think so. Uh, because uh mm when I was um when I worked at the hospital, a lot of people came to the hospital as, uh, by by bicycle. Yeah, so normally in Japan a lot of people use the bicycle for the commute time.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Score: 43.0Suggestion: 質問にまず直接答え、その後に自転車の色や誰が買ってくれたか、どこで乗ったかを簡潔に説明しましょう。「my grandfather bought me」ではなく「my grandfather bought it for me」、「I always liked it to go to the park」ではなく「I liked riding it to the park」と表現します。言い直しや「um」などのフィラーを減らし、過去の話なので動詞の時制を過去形にそろえてください。
Example: Yes, I had a green bicycle when I was a child. My grandfather bought it for me, and I was very fond of it. I often rode it to the park near my house.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Score: 54.0Suggestion: 最初に「Yes, they are」と明確に答え、理由として病院で働いていたときに見た光景を述べると、回答の流れがより自然になります。「came to the hospital as, by bicycle」ではなく「came to the hospital by bicycle」とし、「for the commute time」は「to commute」または「for commuting」に直しましょう。「a lot of people use the bicycle」は一般的な話なので「a lot of people use bicycles」と複数形にし、フィラーや繰り返しを避けてください。
Example: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in Japan. When I worked at a hospital, I often saw people arriving by bicycle. Many people use bikes to commute, especially for short trips.
× My grandfather bought me.
✓ My grandfather bought it for me.
The verb bought needs an object describing what was purchased. Add it to refer to the bicycle. You can also say, My grandfather bought me a bicycle.
× And then I really like it.
✓ And then I really liked it.
The speaker is describing a childhood experience in the past, so use the past-tense form liked instead of like.
× I always liked it to go to the park.
✓ I always liked riding it to the park.
When like means enjoying an activity, follow it with a gerund. Use riding rather than to go, and specify the activity the bicycle was used for.
× A lot of people came to the hospital as by bicycle.
✓ A lot of people came to the hospital by bicycle.
By bicycle is the correct expression for describing a means of transportation. Do not add as before it.
× A lot of people use the bicycle for the commute time.
✓ A lot of people use bicycles for commuting.
After the preposition for, use a gerund such as commuting. This phrasing also expresses the general activity more naturally than for the commute time.