Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Answer directly, then give one or two clear details. Use “when I was in 10th grade,” “my father gave me,” and “I told my friend.” The reference to your 25th birthday seems inconsistent with being in 10th grade, so clarify the age or leave it out. Avoid repeated words and fillers, and say “went to college” rather than “went to the college.”

Example: Yes, I had a bike when I was in 10th grade. My father gave it to me as a birthday present, and I was thrilled. I remember showing it to my friend, and we went for a ride together.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer and specify whether you mean bicycles or motorbikes. Explain the popularity with a clear reason, using natural phrases such as “people who work regular hours” and “public transport.” Complete your final thought instead of ending with “So if,” and avoid fillers and unsupported generalizations.

Example: Yes, motorbikes are very popular in my country, especially among people who commute to work. They are often more convenient than public transport, which can be slow or crowded. They also make it easier to travel between places that are not well connected by bus or train.

× I barely remember uh, that time it's my 25th birthday and my father gave me a bike bike.

✓ I barely remember that time. It was my 25th birthday, and my father gave me a bike.

The events happened in the past, so use the past-tense form was rather than the present-tense form it's. The repeated bike is a speech repetition, not a grammar error.

× I told to my friend

✓ I told my friend

Tell takes a direct object without to when naming the person who receives the information. Say I told my friend, not I told to my friend.

× I and my friend went to the college.

✓ My friend and I went to college.

Use the subject pronoun I as part of the compound subject, and conventionally place the other person first. When referring to attending college in general, omit the.

× mostly people working from 9:00 to 5:00

✓ most people work from 9:00 to 5:00

Use most before a noun to mean the majority of people. Mostly is an adverb and does not correctly modify people in this sentence.

× mostly people working from 9:00 to 5:00 in a daytime

✓ Most people work from 9:00 to 5:00 during the day.

Working is a participle and does not function as the main verb of this statement. Use the finite present-tense verb work to make the clause complete.

× in a daytime

✓ during the day

Daytime is not used with a in this expression. Say during the day or in the daytime.

× they need a their own transportation rather than using a public transport

✓ They need their own transportation rather than using public transport.

Do not use a before the possessive determiner their. Public transport is used as an uncountable noun in this general meaning, so it does not take a.