Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 질문에 직접 답하고 어린 시절의 경험을 덧붙인 점은 좋습니다. 다만 과거의 경험을 말하고 있으므로 현재형인 “come back”과 “try”를 과거형으로 바꾸세요. “So”로 시작하기보다 “After school”을 사용하면 더 자연스럽고, 실제로 자전거를 탔던 장소나 느낌을 구체적으로 덧붙이면 답변이 더 풍부해집니다.

Example: Yes, I did. I loved riding my bike when I was a little girl. After school, I often rode around my neighborhood with my friends, especially when the weather was nice.

Suggestion: 질문에 답하고 아들의 사례를 들려주려 한 점은 좋지만, “won wanted”, “about three … about a couple of couple of years ago”처럼 반복과 말 고침이 많고 문장이 끝나지 않아 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 한 가지 표현으로 간결하게 정리하고, 사례를 완결된 문장으로 말하세요. 또한 자전거가 인기 있는 이유나 주변에서 자전거를 타는 사람들의 모습을 덧붙이면 답변이 더 구체적입니다.

Example: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people ride them for exercise or to get around nearby areas. For example, my son asked for a new bike a couple of years ago, so we bought one for him.

× So whenever I come back from school, I try to ride a bike with my friends around my town.

✓ So whenever I came back from school, I would ride a bike with my friends around my town.

The speaker is describing a childhood habit, so the present-tense verbs come and try do not match the past-time context. Use came and would ride to describe a repeated action in the past.

× For example, my son really won wanted to buy a new bike about three uh about a couple of couple of years ago so we bought

✓ For example, my son really wanted to buy a new bike about a couple of years ago, so we bought one.

The phrase won wanted contains an incorrect verb form; wanted is the correct past-tense verb for an event that happened a couple of years ago. The repeated words are disfluencies, so they have been removed for clarity. One completes the final clause by specifying what was bought.