Part 1
Examiner
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Candidate
I didn't have a bike when I was a child as I didn't know how to cycle, so bike was unuseful for me.
Examiner
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Candidate
Frankly speaking, I think that parks are not popular in our country because my country is very small and people can even attend the places they want to go by. The places they want to go are within walking distance, so there is no need in bikes.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Score: 65.0Suggestion: Ответ дан прямо и причина понятна, но выражение «bike was unuseful» звучит неестественно: лучше сказать «I didn’t have much use for a bike» или «a bike wouldn’t have been useful to me». Добавьте артикль перед «bike» и при желании поясните, почему вы не научились кататься. Старайтесь формулировать ответ естественно и избегать неуместного слова «unuseful».
Example: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child because I never learned how to ride one. So, I didn’t really have any use for a bike back then.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Score: 35.0Suggestion: Ответьте именно о велосипедах: слово «parks» не соответствует вопросу. Объясните, насколько велосипеды популярны, и подкрепите мнение конкретной причиной или примером. Вместо «attend the places they want to go by» используйте «get to the places they want to go», а вместо «there is no need in bikes» — «there is no need for bikes». Избегайте повторения мысли о небольшой стране и расстояниях.
Example: Bikes aren’t very popular in my country, mainly because most places are within walking distance. People often prefer to walk rather than ride a bike, especially in the city centre. However, some people use bikes for exercise or short commutes.
× I didn't have a bike when I was a child as I didn't know how to cycle, so bike was unuseful for me.
✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child as I didn't know how to cycle, so a bike was unuseful for me.
Bike is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article here. Use a before bike when referring to a bike in general.
× Frankly speaking, I think that parks are not popular in our country because my country is very small and people can even attend the places they want to go by.
✓ Frankly speaking, I think that parks are not popular in our country because my country is very small and people can easily get to the places they want to go.
The preposition by at the end is left without an object and does not express the intended destination. Use get to the places to describe reaching them. The word attend is also unnatural in this context, but that is a word-choice issue rather than one of the listed grammar types.
× The places they want to go are within walking distance, so there is no need in bikes.
✓ The places they want to go are within walking distance, so there is no need for bikes.
The correct preposition after need in this expression is for, not in. Use no need for something.