Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 質問には直接答えられており、公園で練習したという具体的な情報もあります。ただし、最後の文が途中で終わっているため、理由を最後まで説明しましょう。また、「the color of bike」ではなく「the color of the bike」と言います。自転車の色や、それが印象に残った理由を加えると、より自然でまとまりのある回答になります。

Example: Yes, my father bought me a bike when I was about three or four. I used to practice riding it in the park near our house. I still remember it because it was bright red, and I was so proud of it.

Suggestion: 「Partially, yes」はやや不自然なので、「Yes, to some extent」などを使いましょう。また、「offshore transportation」はこの文脈に合わない表現です。都市部で自転車が使われる理由を、交通渋滞や車の維持費などから一つ選び、接続表現を使って簡潔に説明してください。「the cost of maintaining a car」のように冠詞も補いましょう。

Example: Yes, to some extent. In urban areas, many people use bicycles because they are cheaper to maintain than cars. They are also convenient for short trips, especially when the roads are congested.

× It was very memorable for me because the color of bike was

✓ It was very memorable for me because the color of the bike was

The singular countable noun bike needs a determiner here. Use the because you are referring to the specific bike mentioned earlier.

× This is because um urban area many people use this bicycle or offshore transportation because the cost of maintaining car is very expensive or high.

✓ This is because, um, in urban areas, many people use this bicycle or offshore transportation because the cost of maintaining car is very expensive or high.

Use the preposition in to show where people use bicycles or other transportation. A natural pattern is in urban areas.

× This is because um urban area many people use this bicycle or offshore transportation because the cost of maintaining car is very expensive or high.

✓ This is because um urban areas many people use this bicycle or offshore transportation because the cost of maintaining car is very expensive or high.

Urban area refers to a general setting, so the plural form urban areas is more appropriate when speaking about cities in general.

× This is because um urban area many people use this bicycle or offshore transportation because the cost of maintaining car is very expensive or high.

✓ This is because um urban area many people use this bicycle or offshore transportation because the cost of maintaining a car is very expensive or high.

Car is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article. Use a when referring to cars in general.

× This is because um urban area many people use this bicycle or offshore transportation because the cost of maintaining car is very expensive or high.

✓ This is because um urban area many people use this bicycle or offshore transportation because the cost of maintaining car is very high.

A cost is usually described as high, not expensive. Expensive describes the thing that costs money, such as a car.