Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 질문은 어린 시절에 자전거가 있었는지를 묻고 있으므로, 어린 시절의 경험에 초점을 맞추세요. 현재 시제인 “we ride”와 현재 아들과 함께 공원에 간다는 내용은 어린 시절 이야기와 시점이 섞여 답변이 혼란스럽습니다. 과거 시제를 일관되게 사용하고, 누구와 어디에서 탔는지 등 구체적인 내용을 한두 가지 덧붙이세요. “with it with my son”처럼 의미가 겹치는 표현도 피하세요.

Example: Yes, I did. I loved riding my bike when I was a child, and I usually went to the nearby park with my friends. We rode there a few times a week, especially during the summer.

Suggestion: 자전거가 인기 있는지 먼저 직접 답한 점은 좋지만, “try to think their health is quite important”는 부자연스러운 표현입니다. “people are becoming more health-conscious” 또는 “people want to stay fit”처럼 자연스럽게 바꿔 보세요. 또한 건강에 관한 내용이 반복되므로, 자전거 이용이 늘어난 구체적인 이유나 예시를 하나 덧붙이면 더 효과적입니다.

Example: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. More people are cycling because they want to stay fit and enjoy exercising outdoors. In some cities, bike-sharing services have also made cycling more convenient.

× I really liked riding a bike when I was young so I usually We ride on a bike about three times a week and I went to the nearby park with it with my son.

✓ I really liked riding a bike when I was young, so I usually rode my bike about three times a week and went to the nearby park with my son.

The question asks about your childhood, so the activities in this part of the answer should be in the past tense. Use rode instead of ride. Also, usually We ride contains an interrupted or incorrectly formed clause; usually rode is the appropriate past-tense phrasing here.

× I really liked riding a bike when I was young so I usually We ride on a bike about three times a week and I went to the nearby park with it with my son.

✓ I really liked riding a bike when I was young, so I usually rode my bike about three times a week and went to the nearby park with my son.

In this context, ride a bike is the natural construction; the preposition on is unnecessary. To avoid the awkward repetition in with it with my son, say went to the nearby park with my son.

× I think nowadays it's quite popular in my country because many people try to think their health is quite important in their life. So compared to before people are more interested in keeping their health.

✓ I think nowadays it's quite popular in my country because many people think their health is quite important in their lives. So, compared to before, people are more interested in keeping their health.

People is plural, so the matching noun should also be plural: lives, not life. Use lives when referring to the lives of many people.