Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 질문에 먼저 “Yes”라고 직접 답하세요. “Yesterday”는 문맥에 맞지 않으므로 빼고, 자전거를 탄다는 뜻으로 “ride”를 사용하세요(“write”가 아님). 같은 표현인 “ride a bike”가 반복되므로, 아버지에게 배운 경험과 여동생과 함께 탔던 기억을 자연스럽게 연결해 간결하게 말하면 좋습니다.

Example: Yes, I did. My dad taught me how to ride a bike when I was young, and I really enjoyed it. I often rode around with my sister, which was a lot of fun.

Suggestion: “Yes, they are”처럼 자전거가 인기 있는지에 직접 답하고, “electric electricity bikes” 대신 “electric bikes”라고 하세요. 자전거 관련 법규가 인기의 이유라는 점은 설명이 불분명하므로, 전기자전거의 편리함이나 교통 체증·주차 문제처럼 구체적인 이유를 제시하세요. “I think”와 비교 표현을 반복하지 말고, 연결어를 사용해 생각을 간결하게 정리하세요.

Example: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Electric bikes are especially convenient because people can travel longer distances without getting too tired. They are also easier to park than cars, particularly in busy cities.

× Yesterday I used to ride a bike when I was a child.

✓ When I was a child, I used to ride a bike.

Yesterday refers to a specific day, but used to describes a repeated or habitual action in the past. Remove yesterday so the time reference matches the childhood habit. Use used to + base verb for past habits.

× Riding a bike with my sister, it was fun to ride it.

✓ Riding a bike with my sister was fun.

The opening -ing phrase should function as the subject of the sentence. In the original, it is followed by it, which creates a dangling and redundant structure. Make Riding a bike with my sister the subject.

× There are also electric electricity bikes.

✓ There are also electric bikes.

Electric is the adjective that describes bikes. Electricity is a noun and is not needed here. Use electric bikes.

× Yes, I think it is because there are also electric electricity bikes and there are also bicycle laws so and it is comfortable to ride it.

✓ Yes, I think they are popular because there are electric bikes and bicycle laws, and they are comfortable to ride.

So and are incorrectly joined together in this sentence. Use one suitable conjunction instead of combining both. Here, and connects the related ideas clearly.

× Yes, I think it is because there are also electric electricity bikes and there are also bicycle laws so and it is comfortable to ride it.

✓ Yes, I think they are popular because there are electric bikes and bicycle laws, and they are comfortable to ride.

The sentence refers to bikes, which is plural, so the pronouns referring to them should also be plural. Use they and them rather than it when referring to multiple bikes.