Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Bạn trả lời đúng trọng tâm và có chi tiết cá nhân đáng nhớ về màu sắc, hình ảnh con hổ. Tuy nhiên, câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và diễn đạt thiếu tự nhiên: dùng “had” thay vì “have” khi kể về quá khứ; “four-wheel bike” và “training bike” đang bị lặp ý; “a phase of a tiger” nên là “a picture of a tiger”; và “on a seat” nên là “on the seat”. Hãy chia ý thành 2–3 câu ngắn, mạch lạc và dùng từ nối như “I remember” để dẫn vào chi tiết.

Example: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a blue bike with training wheels and a picture of a tiger on the seat. I loved it because it made me feel confident when I was learning to ride.

Suggestion: Bạn đã nêu quan điểm và giải thích bằng sự phát triển đô thị cũng như tính tiện lợi của phương tiện khác, nhưng câu trả lời có nhiều lần ngập ngừng và lặp từ “now” và “with”. Hãy nói rõ rằng xe đạp từng phổ biến nhưng hiện nay ít phổ biến hơn; dùng “urbanization” thay cho “urbanisations”, “are more likely to ride” thay cho “are more tend to ride”, và dùng danh từ số nhiều “motorbikes and cars”. Có thể bổ sung một ví dụ cụ thể, chẳng hạn tình trạng giao thông hoặc khoảng cách đi lại.

Example: No, I don’t think bikes are as popular as they used to be. As cities have become more developed and spread out, people are more likely to use motorbikes or cars because they are faster and more convenient for longer journeys. However, some people still cycle for exercise or short trips.

× Like every other child I have a four wheel bike

✓ Like every other child, I had a four-wheel bike

The sentence describes a bike the student had during childhood, so the past tense had is needed instead of have. Use a hyphen in four-wheel when it comes before a noun as a compound modifier.

× or you can say that a training bike when and I remember

✓ or you could call it a training bike, and I remember

The original phrase is incomplete and includes an extra when, which disrupts the sentence structure. Use the complete phrase call it a training bike and connect it clearly to the next clause.

× on a seat

✓ on the seat

The sentence refers to the specific seat of the bike already being described, so the definite article the is appropriate.

× It used to be popular

✓ They used to be popular

The pronoun refers to bikes, which is plural, so use they rather than it.

× the rapid development of urbanisations

✓ the rapid development of urbanisation

Urbanisation refers to a general process here and is normally an uncountable noun, so it should not be plural.

× people are now more tend to ride

✓ people are now more likely to ride

Tend cannot follow more in this construction. Use the adjective likely in the phrase be more likely to do something.

× ride on motorbike or car

✓ ride a motorbike or drive a car

Singular countable nouns such as motorbike and car need an article. Also, ride is used with a motorbike, while drive is the natural verb for a car.

× rather than using bike

✓ rather than riding a bike

Bike is a singular countable noun and needs an article. Riding also makes the comparison parallel with the earlier verb ride.