Part 1
Examiner
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Candidate
I did. My cousin gave me a yellow bike when I was a child. Every afternoon my cousins and I would ride it on a covered court near our house while some people played basketball. Those rides were one of my favorite childhood activities.
Examiner
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Candidate
I wouldn't say it's popular but a lot of people do biking just for a hobby. But when you say it would be transportation, it is not that popular in here.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Score: 91.0Suggestion: Your answer is direct, natural, and supported with vivid personal details. To make it slightly more concise, avoid repeating “when I was a child,” since the question already establishes the time frame. You could also use “riding it” to refer more directly to the activity.
Example: Yes, I did. My cousin gave me a yellow bike, and my cousins and I would ride it every afternoon on a covered court near our house. It was one of my favorite childhood activities.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Score: 63.0Suggestion: You give a clear contrast between cycling as a hobby and cycling for transportation, but several phrases are unnatural. Say “cycling is popular” or “people cycle,” rather than “people do biking.” Replace “when you say it would be transportation” with “as a means of transport,” and use “here” instead of “in here.” Join the contrast smoothly with “although” or “however.”
Example: I wouldn’t say bikes are very popular as a means of transport in my country. A lot of people cycle for fun, though, especially in parks or on weekends. However, most people rely on cars or public transportation for their daily commute.
× I wouldn't say it's popular but a lot of people do biking just for a hobby.
✓ I wouldn't say they are popular, but a lot of people do biking just for a hobby.
The question asks about bikes, which is plural, so the pronoun should be they rather than it. Make sure pronouns agree in number with the nouns they refer to.
× I wouldn't say it's popular but a lot of people do biking just for a hobby.
✓ I wouldn't say it's popular, but a lot of people go biking just for a hobby.
Do biking is not the usual verb phrase in English. Use go biking to describe biking as an activity. You can also say ride bikes as a hobby.
× But when you say it would be transportation, it is not that popular in here.
✓ But when you say it would be transportation, it is not that popular here.
In is not used before here when here refers to a place where the speaker is. Say popular here, not popular in here.