Part 1
Examiner
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Candidate
When I was six years old, my mom brought out for me and my dad told me how to ride it in a path in our house. I felt most nervous and excited but after a few tries I could ride it by myself.
Examiner
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Candidate
I think maybe not because the car industry in our country has developed very size and Our countries transportation.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Score: 62.0Suggestion: 先直接回答“有”,再补充具体经历。注意用词和语法:如果妈妈给你买了自行车,应说“my mom bought me a bike”,而不是“brought out for me”;“在家附近的小路上”可说“on a path near our house”。描述感受时用“nervous but excited”更自然。
Example: Yes, I did. When I was six, my mom bought me my first bike, and my dad taught me how to ride it on a path near our house. I was nervous but excited at first, but after a few tries, I was able to ride it by myself.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Score: 30.0Suggestion: 先明确表达自行车是否流行,再给出清楚、具体的原因。原句中的“developed very size”不符合英语表达;可以说“the car industry has grown rapidly”。“Our countries transportation”也不完整,可改为“public transportation has improved”。注意使用完整句子,并用“because”连接理由。
Example: I think bikes are still fairly popular in my country, especially in smaller cities. However, in large cities, many people prefer cars because the car industry has grown rapidly and public transportation has improved. Bikes are still convenient for short trips.
× When I was six years old, my mom brought out for me and my dad told me how to ride it in a path in our house.
✓ When I was six years old, my mom brought a bike out for me, and my dad told me how to ride it in a path in our house.
“brought out for me”后缺少被带出来的物品,导致句子结构不完整。可以在“brought”和“out”之间补充宾语,例如“a bike”。
× When I was six years old, my mom brought out for me and my dad told me how to ride it in a path in our house.
✓ When I was six years old, my mom brought a bike out for me, and my dad told me how to ride it on a path in our house.
表示在小路上骑车时,通常用介词“on”,而不是“in”。可以记住搭配“ride on a path/road”。
× I felt most nervous and excited but after a few tries I could ride it by myself.
✓ I felt very nervous and excited, but after a few tries I could ride it by myself.
“most nervous”是最高级形式,通常用于多个对象或情况之间的比较。这里是在描述当时的感受程度,应使用“very nervous”。
× I think maybe not because the car industry in our country has developed very size and Our countries transportation.
✓ I think maybe not because the car industry in our country has developed significantly, and our country's transportation system has developed as well.
“very size”不能用来修饰动词“developed”;“size”是名词。此处需要副词表达发展程度,例如“significantly”或“considerably”。
× I think maybe not because the car industry in our country has developed very size and Our countries transportation.
✓ I think maybe not because the car industry in our country has developed significantly, and our country's transportation system has developed as well.
这里指“我们国家的交通”,应使用单数“country”,并加所有格形式“country's”。“countries”是复数形式,不能直接表达“我们国家的”。
× I think maybe not because the car industry in our country has developed very size and Our countries transportation.
✓ I think maybe not because the car industry in our country has developed significantly, and our country's transportation system has developed as well.
“and our countries transportation”只是名词短语,缺少谓语动词,因此不是完整句子。可以补充谓语,例如“has developed”,并将名词短语写成“our country's transportation system”。