Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答切题，个人经历也比较具体，能让答案更生动。建议把事故经过稍微精简，并用连接词清楚地串联经历；“Once I was riding too fast”可以改为更自然的“Once, I was riding too fast”。

Example: Yes, I had a bike as a child, and I often rode it with my friends after school. Once, I was going too fast and fell off, knocking out one of my teeth. I still remember it because it was quite a frightening experience.

Suggestion: 回答有明确观点，也提供了过去和现在的背景及例子。不过，“Basycos”应为“Bicycles”；谈论过去时，“become”应改为“became”；“use bicycle”应改为“use bicycles”或“cycle”。“primary model of transport”不够自然，可用“main means of transport”。建议将原因和例子用“because”“for example”等连接起来，并避免重复说明自行车很普遍。

Example: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country. In the past, many people couldn’t afford cars, so bikes became a main means of transport. For example, children often cycle to school, while adults use them for short commutes. They’re still common in both cities and rural areas.

× It seems that in the past many people could not afford cars so bikes become the primary model of transport for daily activities.

✓ It seems that in the past many people could not afford cars, so bikes became the primary model of transport for daily activities.

句子中的“in the past”指过去的情况，因此描述自行车“成为”主要交通方式时也应使用一般过去时。把“become”改为其过去式“became”。

× For example, children often cycle to school and workers use bicycle to commute.

✓ For example, children often cycle to school and workers use bicycles to commute.

这里泛指工人通勤时使用的自行车，应使用可数名词的复数形式“bicycles”。也可以说“use a bicycle”，但不能在泛指单数可数名词前省略冠词。