Part 1
Examiner
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Candidate
Yes I had a bike. It was called Arman and I like it so much because it can go could go very fast and I usually share this bike with my friends and yeah it was gift for me.
Examiner
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Candidate
Yes, I think it's very popular transport in my country because we have a lot of traffic jumps in our road and we prefer to use bikes because it's very convenient and you can get to your job very fast and sometimes it takes
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Score: 58.0Suggestion: Answer directly, then add one or two clear details. Keep the story in the past: use “liked” and “could,” and say “it was a gift.” Avoid repeating yourself or using fillers such as “yeah.”
Example: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I named it Arman because it was very fast. I often shared it with my friends, and it was a gift from my parents.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Score: 46.0Suggestion: Give a direct answer and explain it with a specific reason. Use natural phrases such as “a popular form of transport,” “heavy traffic,” and “get to work quickly.” Avoid repeating “because,” and finish your final point rather than leaving the answer incomplete.
Example: Yes, bikes are a popular form of transport in my country, especially in busy cities. They are convenient because riders can avoid heavy traffic and get to work quickly. They are also cheaper to run than cars.
× It was called Arman and I like it so much because it can go could go very fast and I usually share this bike with my friends and yeah it was gift for me.
✓ It was called Arman, and I liked it so much because it could go very fast. I usually shared this bike with my friends, and it was a gift for me.
The student is describing a bike from childhood, so the past tense is needed. Change like to liked and share to shared to keep the verbs consistent with the past-time context.
× It was called Arman and I like it so much because it can go could go very fast and I usually share this bike with my friends and yeah it was gift for me.
✓ It was called Arman, and I liked it so much because it could go very fast. I usually shared this bike with my friends, and it was a gift for me.
The phrase can go could go contains two modal constructions in a row. Use only could go: could is appropriate for describing the bike's ability in the past.
× It was called Arman and I like it so much because it can go could go very fast and I usually share this bike with my friends and yeah it was gift for me.
✓ It was called Arman, and I liked it so much because it could go very fast. I usually shared this bike with my friends, and it was a gift for me.
Gift is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article. Use a gift.
× Yes, I think it's very popular transport in my country because we have a lot of traffic jumps in our road and we prefer to use bikes because it's very convenient and you can get to your job very fast and sometimes it takes
✓ Yes, I think it's a very popular means of transport in my country because we have a lot of traffic jumps on our road, and we prefer to use bikes because they are very convenient and you can get to your job very fast.
In this sentence, popular transport needs an article and a suitable noun phrase. Use a very popular means of transport. The article a is required before the singular countable noun means.
× Yes, I think it's very popular transport in my country because we have a lot of traffic jumps in our road and we prefer to use bikes because it's very convenient and you can get to your job very fast and sometimes it takes
✓ Yes, I think it's a very popular means of transport in my country because we have a lot of traffic jumps on our road, and we prefer to use bikes because they are very convenient and you can get to your job very fast.
Use on rather than in when referring to something located on a road. For example, say on our road or, more generally, on our roads.
× Yes, I think it's very popular transport in my country because we have a lot of traffic jumps in our road and we prefer to use bikes because it's very convenient and you can get to your job very fast and sometimes it takes
✓ Yes, I think it's a very popular means of transport in my country because we have a lot of traffic jumps on our road, and we prefer to use bikes because they are very convenient and you can get to your job very fast.
The pronoun it refers to bikes, which is plural. Use they instead, and pair it with the plural verb are.